Hi all,

After taking off for a month, I have written a new one today, called In Between The Rhythm And The Rhyme. All the instrumentation is RealTracks/RealDrums, except a smidgen of strings and organ that I played. I hope you enjoy it!

In Between The Rhythm And The Rhyme

Here is the RT/RD info...
RealTracks in song: :Bass, Electric, NorthernRockBallad Ev 065
RealTracks in song: :Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm PopUpliftPulsing Ev16 120
RealTracks in song: :Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Ev 120
RealTracks in song: :Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Syncopated Sugar Ev 102
RealTracks in song: :Guitar, Electric, Rhythm RockBritSoulful Ev 085
RealTracks in song: :Guitar, Electric, Soloist CountryWaltzBrent Sw 085
RealDrums in Song: SmoothJazzBallad^4-XStHHt,SnrHHt
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And here are the lyrics...

In Between The Rhythm And The Rhyme
Copyright Stephen W. Young

There's a little girl making eyes at me
She's wanting my attention
Wanting me to see what she can do
Yesterday when she waa two

On a Saturday at the football field
A pretty girl is cheering
And every now and then her team will win
Yesterday when she was ten

In between the rhythm and the rhyme
There's so much more to life if you just take the time
I wouldn't trade for all the things that you can find
In between the rhythm and the rhyme

A young man smiles nervously at me
He's wanting my permission
To take away my pretty little girl
And turn around my whole world

In between the rhythm and the rhyme
There's so much more to life if you just take the time
I wouldn't trade for all the things that you can find
In between the rhythm and the rhyme
(Repeat Chorus)

A little girl is making eyes at me
She's wanting my attention
Wanting me to see what she can do
I can't believe she's almost two

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Hope you all have a great day!!!

Steve

Nice job! I really like everything about the song. I,m just putting my own songs on BB.

Steve, you have outdone yourself on this one. You are one great lyricist!

Everything is absolutely perfect!

Two thumbs up!

Beautiful song! Very well performed and produced. Thanks for sharing!



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Hi Steve,

Yet another fantastic effort! Your productions always leave me amazed. The way you can pull so many differently styled instrumental Realtrack together to get a homogeneous mix is outstanding. This one is no exception. It's a real credit to your talent.

All the best,
Noel

Great song, musically. At first, I thought the voice was mixed a little bit too up front... that seemed to improve as the song clearly developed in a very personal direction.

But, I guess I didn't really understand it. Maybe I'm just a little dense, and I get the "kids growing up" lines, but the refrain, "In between the rhythm and the rhyme, There's so much more to life if you just take the time."

My guess is, that you haven't given your kids as much of yourself as you should have, as you would like to have done, as you have pursued your personal adventures (music, I guess). (I confess to that error - "Hey, get out of the studio... Daddy's recording!)

Nice song and sentiments Steve. Well put together and mixed. I enjoyed that!

John

frs,

Thanks so much for your nice words! I look forward to hearing some of your work.

Steve

Mario,

Thank you so much! You are too kind! I really appreciate your time and comments.

Steve

Robert,

Thanks so much. I always appreciate your kind words!

Noel,

Always good to hear from you. I so appreciate your taking the time to listen and comment!

Steve

Brad,

Thanks so much for listening and giving your comments! Much appreciated!

This song is not really a confession of my regrets. It's more of an observation on how time flies, and an encouragement to focus on our most valuable assets - our loved ones.

If this were a confession of my regrets and shortcomings, my daughters would say that the song is Waaaaay too short!

But this is one of the wonderful things about songwriting. There are so many interpretations that can come from a song. I like that.

Again thanks so much for taking the time to listen and comment!

Steve

John,

Thanks so much for your kind comments! As always, I really appreciate your time.

Steve

I love it Steve ,very Texan indeed ! Are we some kinda kin ? Kin to a lot of Young's from New Mexico .

Tommy,

Thanks so much! I don't know of any of my family coming from New Mexico. All the Young's in my family that I am aware of are from East Texas. I'm not saying that I come from a Redneck lineage, but I did have an uncle named Mutt, and a cousin named Bozo! (With that knowledge, you may not want to claim any relationship with me.)

Have a great day!

Steve

Ewe never meet my Uncle Booger Red ,so they may be a chance of relativity !

I liked the song a lot. One small thing i would do is to re record the choruses, and make the second line go up instead of ending on the same note like the other lines do, that way it does not sound the same on every line. Other than that i enjoyed.

Steve, Great write and fantastic production. It's inspiring the way you mix these real tracks from different styles and make them work. Keep up the great work. We are all learning from you. Thanks, Tom

Steve,

Very beautiful and touching. Really great use of RT's as usual. As someone with a 20 year-old daughter, I can totally relate...

Bob

Robh,

Thanks for your input. I will put some thought into your suggestion. We'll see what comes out when I get ready to record the final vocals.

Tom,

Thanks so much for your very kind words! We are all continually learning! I'm always anxious this time of year, because it won't be long until the .5 update comes out, and we get some more RT/RD. I'm looking forward to see what this year has to offer!

Bob,

As always, your comments are very much appreciated! This song really is a true one for me. My oldest daughter turned 30 this year, and she has a daughter that really is almost 2. They grow up so fast! (And cost so much!)

Have a great day!

Steve

Hey Steve,

Beautiful song beautifully done.

Josie,

Thank you so much! Always appreciate your input!

Have a blessed day!

Steve

As usual, solid work - strong lyrics, great backing tracks and well mixed. The guitar solo fits in perfectly. The internal rhymes work nicely.

The only two "critical" comments (and they're only minor nits) I can think of -


1. The introduction piano chords sound sort of "buzzy", and not very crisp. I don't know if it came like that, or it's just mixed that way.

2. The lyric of the chorus "There's so much more to life if you just take the time" sort of bugs me. It sort of "breaks the wall", and changing the voice from a sort of internal musing to talking to the listener. It's not bad, and I don't know of a better way to do it.

Someone mentioned that they couldn't tell if the song was regretful or musing. I wonder if the word "if" in that lyric is the cause of some confusion. Perhaps "when" would clarify it?

Anyway, nice and solid, a very pleasant song.

Plus 1 on just about every good comment you've had so far.
I've always been a sucker for songs with minor chords, or Jackson Browne-like arrangements.
This is really good melodically, with lots of well-chosen riffs.

I see the fathers are coming out of the woodwork .
Four of my six children are girls, youngest now 28 - this song really presses my emotion button.
Can't say enough about the song, or the feelings.

It's just long enough so you want to listen again. I loved the guitar lead . . . so much so that 8 bars of it would be nice after "two" to close it out.

But as I said, "two" definitely makes you want to play it again.

As mentioned in the chorus - There's so much more to life if you (I/we) just take (my/our)the time
I wouldn't trade for all the things that (I/we) you can find - just put it in the first person singular or plural and should clear the perspective.

Super song, Super Steve. Thanks for the listen.

Ian

David,

Thanks so much for taking the time to listen and offer your feedback. You always take a very thoughtful approach to offering your ideas. Helps me to consider alternatives. The piano part just sounds that way. I get what you are saying about the lyrics in the chorus. On the other hand, though, upon reflection, I sort of like the idea that the song could have more than one meaning. Makes it a little more thought provoking. Jury is still out on that one.

Once again, I really do appreciate your input!

Ian,

Thank you very much for the kind words! Yes, this song does have a pretty strong emotional lean to it. Nothing tugs at my heart strings like my "little girls"!

I toyed with the idea of going back into the chorus after that last word (two). But after some thought, I concluded that the sum of what I wanted to say in the song was wrapped up in that last phrase. I think it might make it more "commercial" to go back to the chorus, or a guitar solo, but I just felt it was right (for me) to end it where I did.

And again, I truly appreciate your thoughts on everything!

I just downloaded the 2011.5 version, and I am really looking forward to doing some more new stuff!!!

Hope you have a great weekend!

Steve

Jest stopin by cuz fer a nuther listen !

Wow! I love the lyrics and the judicious use of tracks. I write songs and hope to publish one day. Your rendition gave me something to aspire to. My songs use real tracks but I think they need more arranging. Your song was an artful use of software. I was moved by your lyrics and I like your voice. What kind of microphone do you use? Hope to hear from you.
Frank
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Frank,

Thank you so much for your kind comments! I use an Audio Technica AT3525 mic with a Focusrite Saffire 6 USB. The mic is not that expensive, but seems to fit my vocals okay. I have been very pleased with the Focusrite.

Thanks again for taking the time to listen!

Steve

Steve,

It's kind of all been said, but really enjoyed this one.
As usual your voice sounds good. Good production and great words and melody.
A keeper for sure.

Tim

Steve,

After hearing 'Lonely Man' I jumped over everyone else to find your next composition... it was worth it too... this is just beautiful. What a great story you've told... it's hard to go from start to finish and then back to start again, but you've done it wonderfully...

It really helps that you sing so well too... there are some nice songs on here but the writers aren't very good singers and it takes away somewhat from their songs... but you are the total package...

Loved this!

Randy

The first song I have heard since registering. It's wonderful!