JosieC asked me a while back to write a song about the plight of the rhino and I have been waiting impatiently for my other one to get off the front page!!
The nearest I have been to a rhino was in Longleat Safari Park, UK. BUT I have seen the tv progammes and the dreadful pictures and go why??? This song is about those horrific images forever etched in my mind.

time runs out

time runs out
soon we wont see them any more
you cant understand the reason why they're going
but something tells you you are right
and the hardest part of all are the visions inside your head that wont go away
they wont disappear

you see the news
and hear the reports on the radio
another one has gone away never to return
but something tells you you are right
and the hardest part of all are the visions inside your head that wont go away
they wont disappear

you try hard not to cry
that's been done too many times before
something tells you there's something you must do
there's just one thing left in your life and one thing that you know
c'mon now stop the slaughter they don't deserve to go

time runs out
soon we wont see them any more
you cant understand the reason why they're going
but something tells you you are right
and the hardest part of all are the visions inside your head that wont go away
they wont disappear
don't let them go


RealTracks in style: ~~684:Bass, Electric, PopHalfNotesSync Ev 120
RealTracks in style: ~~522:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Ev 120
RealTracks in style: ~~405:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Ev 120
RealTracks in style: ~~686:Organ, B3, Background Pop Ev 120
RealTracks in song: 854:Guitar, 12-String Acoustic, Rhythm RockWaltzA-B Ev 140
RealTracks in song: 848:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm CountryRockRiff Ev 120 (A:sync)
RealDrums in style: NashvilleEven8^5-a:Snare, HiHat , b:Snare, Ride
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Alyn

Alyn. I loved it. From folksy to... well, not so folksy. This is the coolest arrangement of any of the Rhino project submissions here on the forum. "the visions won't go away, won't disappear" really states how this project has touched more than one of us as we've stopped and taken a look at the rhino plight for the first time.

Enjoyed this from start to finish.

Charlie

I believe that you Alyn are the only person on this forum that could pull off a song that doesn't rhyme. Brilliant! You have no fear when it comes to breaking the rules. Who made those rules anyway? A great contribution to the project. Very heartfelt and meaningful. Another good one. Love the arrangement. Tom

Hi Alyn,

I like the lyrics and the delivery. Cool arrangement.
I wonder why the drums sound "doubled" to me.
Enjoyable listen.

Guenter

Hi Alyn

I've been waiting impatiently for you to post so that I can tell you publicly that I love your song!

I really appreciate all the effort that has gone into these songs. The power of this forum is just completely awesome. Each and every one of you has done such terrific job. It makes my eyes water.

Today I have sent off four sponsorship proposals to big South African firms to try and get sponsorship for the initial cost of the memory stick. (We are looking at doing a memory stick in the shape of a rhino with the music preloaded). I am hoping to have the same enthusiastic response from South African business to this concept as I have had from the members of this forum.

Thank you Alyn.

Edited to add: I also sent something to Prince Harry via his website. He is getting his feet into the anti rhino poaching thing. Thanks for the suggestion Alyn.

Alyn,

A good write. If Tom had not mentioned it the fact that there are no rhymes slipped by... impressive. impressive.

The balance between drums, bass, acoustic and vocal in the verses is perfect.

Well done all around.

floyd

Hi, Alyn.

I gonna have to agree with Charlie. Cool arrangement, to be sure.

Bravo!

Thanks for the music,
Dan

I like the "well not so folksy " bit. The middle bit was meant to make people sit up and hopefully expressed anger.

Thanks for commenting and so glad you enjoyed

Alyn

The only rule I follow in my musical life is don't follow no rules. A variation on the great Groucho Marx saying "I don't care to belong to any club that will have me as a member".To be honest I didn't notice there was no rhyme

So glad you enjoyed the listen

take care

Alyn

Stop wondering. The drums ARE doubled in the loud bit. I wanted to show my anger and sampled a snare from the realdrums to add on beats 1 and 3 but that didn't sound right, moving a second copy a beat did however do the trick. Well spotted!

Thanks for listening and commenting

Alyn

Joanne
YOU were waiting impatiently, so was I! I was waiting for "Stranger" to disappear from page one, I didn't post the song because I didn't know if you wanted them posted or not.
Thank you, thank you.*gives Joanne an internetz hug* That means such a lot to me. THANK YOU for giving me the opportunity to write it and for such a good cause.

Let's hope Harry will get involved somehow

Thank you so much

Alyn

If Tom hadn't mentioned it I wouldn't have noticed either!! honestly

The praise for the mix is praise indeed, coming from you!
SO glad you enjoyed

Alyn

thanks for the comments, Dan, much appreciated

all the best

Alyn

Fabulous Alyn. Liked the angry bit too and wouldn't have noticed the rhyme scheme as it all flows so effortlessly. Cheers.

Thanks Rich, I wanted to write a song from the heart; about how I felt and so wrote many phrases and picked the ones I felt were best to use in the song and never noticed that there was no rhyming scheme until Tom mentioned it in his comments.
This is how I write anyway I never try to force rhyme, it sometimes comes naturally tho', as I write free or blank verse or prose and then put that to music.
I try to paint a picture with words, and music, to convey my thoughts and emotions. An influential song was "America" by Simon and Garfunkel
anyway

thanks for listening

Alyn

I really enjoyed this Alyn.
Good work sir.
Rob

Really nice song Alyn!! I like the sparse arrangement and great build in the B section. Very heartfelt lyrics and wonderful vocal delivery. Really nice effort all around. Enjoyed it A LOT!! Take care. Greg

That one wrings out every drop of
the emotion involved with this
issue. Powerful write that is
well delivered. Greg nailed the
word "heartfelt."

BTW, Janice has asked me a
zillion times why must it always rhyme?
Thanks for making me realize how
just well a song can work sans
a rhyme structure.

Great work.

J&B

Nice write! I liked the way you moved from thinking to a call to action, which is a really the whole point of this sort of song.

Hi Alyn,

Very cool song! We especially like the part
you try hard not to cry...
............deserve to go
Nice vocals there. Would have been nice to do it again at the end.

Rob and Anne-Marie

Hi Alyn.

Outstanding! The B-section took me unawares and made me sit-up and pay attention. That was a very clever arrangement strategy. You are a master at presenting the unexpected!

I notice that you mentioned "America". When it comes to non-rhyming songs, you've picked one of the classics!

Whenever I hear a song that doesn't rhyme and it works beautifully without the rhyme, I always ask myself, "How has this been accomplished? Why does it work?" That's how it was with "Time Runs Out". I'm still pondering those questions now as I type. You've done it incredibly well!

A little more information on not rhyming...

For what it's worth, a song doesn't have to have lyric rhymes to be musical. Rhymes are one way of adding musicality to words but there are other ways, too. For example, Ira Gershwin never shied away from taking a non-rhyming approach when writing lyrics for George's melodies if that's how it worked out. Have a look at the following sections of lyrics for "I Got Rhythm". I've highlighted the rhymes so that it's easier to identify them.



Seems like you're in good company!

After all that, I'm now heading back for another listen to your excellent work!

All the best,
Noel

• recent song: Walk With Me

Thank YOU, Sir.
thanks for listening and comenting, oh and calling me Sir I shall wear my jacket with the fake ermine collar today with pride

all the best mate

Alyn

Thank you so much, Greg. Such a sad subject needed the angry loud bit in the middle.
I am so glad you liked it a lot

all the best

Alyn

Coming from you Sir, that is praise indeed. Especially as the song just sorta appeared and as I have said in my previous replies, I never noticed that there wasn't any rhyme.

thanks a lot

Alyn

I never noticed that there was no rhyme and I definitely didn't notice the "call to action" either!!! There is something wrong with me but then I wrote the song having googled the sorry state of affairs so I wrote from the heart.

Thanks for pointing that out and for enjoying, if that is a word I can use for this horror, the song

best wishes

Alyn

Yes I did think of that but I wanted the song to be 3 minutes or so, I had already cut out a verse with a nylon guitar solo which re-appears towards the end of the last verse as a response to my vocals.
I am so glad you liked my angry bit.

thanks for listening and commenting

Alyn

WOW thank you.
I have ALWAYS wanted for you to dissect one of my songs, as you have just done. I have great respect for your knowledge and your ability to explain it all is impressive. You MUST be a good, nay excellent, teacher, Sir.

That sounds trite in writing but if I said those words to you in person my body language would easily show my respect for you.

Thank you, Noel. I am humbled.

oh I now have "I got rhythm" STUCK in my brain, what a great song!

thanks again and all the best.

Alyn

Yeah. I was immediately drawn in to the music and the great vibe of this before I noticed anything different about the rhyming scheme or lack thereof. Impressive indeed. Excellent production.

Good luck with this.

Thanks Scott, as I have also said even I didn't notice there was no rhyme and I wrote it LOL
Thank you for the good luck I will pass them to Joanne (JosieC) because without her this song would not have been written

All the best

Alyn