Hi there. Here's another one.

Started with THRASH1 style added country Brent guitar and ended up with a surf sound. Cheers.

Edit - Umm yes - Thanks Floyd. Here's the link.

https://soundcloud.com/tuigorge/ghost-in-my-machine-509014

RD - Rock thrash - Half time
Bass - RT 387 - Metal
Guitar - RT 639 - Thrash rhythm
Guitar - RT 642 - Hard rock rhythm
Guitar - RT 643 - Hard rock thrash hollow
Guitar - RT 1706 - Country Brent

Ghost in my Machine

Theres a ghost in my ma-chine don't know who it might have been
Making things go wrong in every-way
It haunts me night and day tells me what to say
Slinkin sly sad and mad and mean

Theres a ghost in my ma-chine dont know where it might have been
Wish bright flames would take it back to stay
Now theres hell to pay as I crash on lifes high-way
Driven by a fiend i've never seen

From the dark it comes to stalk it's prey A hungry thirsty gothic grey
Reeks of death and stark decay

Theres a ghost in my ma-chine dont know what evil sights its seen
Follows me down endless black dead days
Know it's here to stay just can't re-sist the need to slay
A Homi-cidal crazy gruesome teen

From the dark it comes to stalk it's prey A hungry thirsty gothic grey
Reeks of death and stark decay

Hey, Richard....

Seems you forget to put a link in your post...


https://soundcloud.com/tuigorge/ghost-in-my-machine-509014



"From the dark it comes to stalk it's prey
A hungry thirsty gothic grey
Reeks of death and stark decay"

That's especially good.
Cool song. Nice treatment.
You're so punk!

floyd

Cool song Richmac!! You really span quite a wide variety of styles. There are some wonderfully dark and vivid images in this. Very well done and very interesting as usual!! Take care. Greg

Yep, I agree with Greg. Definitely a cool song!

Thanks for the music,
Dan

I like this !

Great job with the lyrics, paints a great picture.

Biab is amazing. Combining different genre's into one and making it work is kinda cool.

Keep up the good work.

Trax

Thanks Floyd. Too late at night. Wandering mind.
Fancy not putting in the link! Cheers. Punky Richard.

Thanks Greg.
I don't like rushing songs but need a new one every two days to keep up.
Doing demos is fun it's the tweaking and polishing that i find hard. Cheers.

Thank you Dan.
I'm glad you enjoyed this. The comments certainly encourage one. Cheers.

Hi Trax.
Had fun thinking up gruesome images for a heavy metal song but it turned into surf thanks to Brent's lead.
I love mixing up Real Tracks ,never know what's going to happen, and Realband makes it sooo easy to experiment. Cheers.

Impressive. Enjoyed this one and I think you nailed the genre. Good work.

Charlie

+1

I hear you about mixing. Getting ideas down is easy and fun but polishing them is a lot more time consuming! But the end result is worth it, otherwise we wouldn't do it!

Hello Rich,

you never stop to amaze us! we'd never heard of the trash style before but it sounds cool. So does the soloist you used here (Brent is always the right choice!).
Very nice work.

Rob & Anne-Marie

Richard,

I really enjoyed this one.

The rhyme-structure of the lyrics is incredibly creative. It seems to me that you've put a decent amount of thought into massaging these lyrics into shape.

I'll explain what I mean. Here are your lyrics. I've realigned them so show how I heard them...



These lyrics are a variation on the AABA format. The rhyme scheme immediately caught my ear and then my eye. With one exception (namely, "days"), these are all perfect rhymes. Moreover, you've chosen to use only two sounds to complete the rhymes; these are the '-ay' and the '-een' sounds. I find that very impressive.

In addition, the rhyme scheme of A A B B B A for each (A)-section and then A A A in each (B)-section works for me!

When I saw that this was AABA format, you got me wondering if you'd ever thought about repeating (A3) again after the second time through the (B)-section. Have you? There's no reason you have to. I mention it simply because a large number of AABA format songs travel along in a sequence as...

A1, A2, B, A3, Instrumental, Repeat_B, Repeat_A3

Kudos to you! I found this a very engaging composition. One of your best!

Regards,
Noel

• a co-write with Steve Young: One More Day

Hi Charlie. Thanks for checking it out.
I'm still amazed that Brent's guitar works so well for surf rock. Cheers.

Hi Mario.
I'm never going to be a finishing hand.
Always wanting to move on to the next one but
after i get a bigger library of songs to work on
want to spend more time on presenting them. Cheers.

Thanks R&AM.
(Brent is always the right choice!)
Yes his work seems to fit just about anywhere very comfortably. Cheers.

Thank you Noel for the amazing comments and insights you provide!
The way you have the lyrics is also the way i wrote them.
i have a thing about fitting a song on one A4 page so combine lines so they fit.
The only reason I didn't repeat A3 was because I wanted to hear more of Brent's guitar instead and the song was long enough.
I think the outro wants a bit more work later. Cheers.

Me too. What I do is to set the sheet in landscape mode and use two columns.

Noel

• a song I co-wrote with Steve Young: One More Day

"From the dark it comes to stalk it's prey
A hungry thirsty gothic grey
Reeks of death and stark decay"

Plus 2 here on what floyd said about the
above. Great lines indeed.

I used to think we were all over the map
with genres and styles but you are the
boss. Your mashups of RT styles
is always different and invariably effective.
This is no exception.

Very cool!!

J&B

Richard, What a great idea to use that lead. It fits perfectly. I knew I was in for a treat when I read the instrument choices. What I didn't know was how much I was going to like it. Very experimental and you pulled it off superbly. Great listen, Tom

Hi J&B. Thanks for the comments.
I have never been able to categorize so enjoy trying anything that comes along.
I'm not boss. I'm just lost!
Cheers.

Hi Tommy.
Glad you liked that one.
It was a big surprise to me that Country Brent went so well with that rhythm section.
Must try it again sometime. Cheers.

RichMac ,
Brent did fit right in. That was really a cool choice. Spooky enjoyable stuff. I'll have to bookmark this one for Halloween!

Going grunge and goth on us Rich - good write for that genre. Interesting mix of instruments. I was expecting a harder lead guitar. Nicely done.

Thanks Patrick.
Yes I think Halloween is about right for the genre. Cheers.

Hi Josie.
Thanks for your comment.
I worry about writing the same thing over and over so try to vary it a bit.
Still find the same themes and ideas coming up over and over though. Cheers.