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Posted By: lambada It's not me. - 02/05/18 11:43 AM
This is my first song for the FAWN February challenge.

https://soundcloud.com/salsatomebaby/is-it-me

Realtracks used:

RealBass 683 Electric PopHalfNotesPUsh EV 120
RealDrums NashvilleEven16 5-HiHat,Ride
RealPiano 888 Piano Acoustic, Solo Accompaniment PopBro
RealGuitar 1270 Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopUpliftSyncMu
RT1444 Sax, Alto, Soloist JazzFunkGroovin Ev16 110
RT583 Guitar, Electric, Soloist Blues Roadhouse Ev 120
RT2346 Horn Section, Rhythm, Funk 2-part Ev 110

BIAB 2018-RealBand-Reaper. Ozone 8 + Neutron 2 = Nectar 2.

Lyrics

It's Not Me


Verse 1
Walking around
Hearing your sound
Lost in time
Writing this rhyme.
Feeling your touch
Having your say
Never too much
Maybe just stay.

Chorus
Can’t you see?
It’s not me
It’s only you
That won’t be true.
Why do I try?
Why don’t I go?
Why do I cry?
Loving you so.


Verse 2
Look at the sky
Maybe we’ll try
I’ll be fine
Give it time
Where I’m bound
Had my fill
Lost then found
Paying the bill.

Bridge
She’s sometimes shouting
She’s always sad
He’s often working
He’s often mad.
She’s sometimes crying
She’s not to blame
He’s often lying
He’s not the same.

Verse 3
Gently you hush
Always a rush
When I don’t know
Love you don’t show.
Show you care
Never free
Heart so bare
When you’re with me

Copyright 2018
Posted By: floyd jane Re: It's not me. - 02/05/18 01:31 PM
Neil,

Very well done.

The opening rhythm guitar was a good way to start. The piano is nicely mixed. The choice of e piano and sax as solo instruments worked well...

Your vocal is nice. Well recorded and mixed.

An enjoyable listen.

fj
Posted By: Al-David Re: It's not me. - 02/05/18 02:16 PM
I agree with all that Floyd said. This is an easy listen - relatively soft, yet has a drive. Nicely done!. Wish I had a soft, pleasant voice like yours!

Alan
Posted By: Torrey Bliss Re: It's not me. - 02/05/18 09:24 PM
lambada, great vocal on an energetic entertaining song! That sax coming was a great choice! Thanks, Torrey
Posted By: lambada Re: It's not me. - 02/05/18 09:56 PM
Thanks all.
Posted By: Teunis Re: It's not me. - 02/06/18 07:23 AM
Yet another really well written and performed song. Some of you folk amaze me with your abilities. Really well done!!

Tony
Posted By: Deryk - PG Music Re: It's not me. - 02/06/18 12:58 PM
I really enjoyed this smile It's wonderfully catchy, and shows a great grasp of songwriting. It has a great groove that's easy to tap your foot to. I loved the solos used here. It makes it have a very 80's vibe.

Great work, and thanks for sharing!
Posted By: edshaw Re: It's not me. - 02/06/18 01:38 PM
Very nicely done.
Maybe a little more vocal compression for aging
ears that might have lost some auditory acuity...
oh, not mine, mind you, mine are fine...:)
Posted By: Scott C Re: It's not me. - 02/07/18 12:01 AM
Cool intro. Super vocal and lyric..
Posted By: lambada Re: It's not me. - 02/07/18 08:29 AM
Thanks all. Now if I could only get Song 2, 3 and 4 finished. So far only lyrics and riffs.
Posted By: Janice & Bud Re: It's not me. - 02/07/18 12:27 PM
As all said "...relatively soft, yet has a drive..." And the word catchy has been used. And we agree with all of the above!

Nice!

J&B
Posted By: David Snyder Re: It's not me. - 02/07/18 01:06 PM

Really nice work here! Great lyrics.

One technical tweak, the vocals are ALMOST in that perfect sweet spot cradle, but off just a hair.

I think with minor EQ-ing adjustments, this could be getting close to "radio ready." If you want more expansive commentary, maybe we could figure out a way for me to transmit that info.

It's on the one yard line, mix wise though.

smile

Great job.
Posted By: Guitarhacker Re: It's not me. - 02/07/18 04:45 PM
Nice work. The cool thing about the FAWM thing is it forces people to write more than they normally would.

Looking forward to more.

PS.... I'd put a bit of reverb on the vocals to let them set in the mix a bit smoother.
Posted By: lambada Re: It's not me. - 02/08/18 09:30 AM
Thanks everyone. Yes David, please tell me. I'd value your experience etc. Guitarhacker, I'm not big on reverb normally but you're probably right. Edshaw, compression! Probably would have been a good idea if I knew how to use it properly. I'm such a complete novice when it comes to mixing.

Actually, I want to redo all my vocals on every BIAB song I've written. What I really need is somewhere soundproofed, relaxed and comfortable so I can really sing. Almost impossible in my life in Hong Kong. I may just get a dozen or so songs ready and go into a studio just to do vocals. Still, FAWM is really good for me and has nudged me out of my stupor.
Posted By: lambada Re: It's not me. - 02/11/18 08:21 AM
I've redone the vocals
https://soundcloud.com/salsatomebaby/is-it-me-1
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