This is somewhat of a vignette - it's called [Link no longer valid]
Red Hook's so cold tonight It might sleet or snow Changes minute to minute So hard to know Graffiti in the doorway Who's looking Goodbye Brooklyn
Word’s out you left town Your sister said goodbye The dog wanders around All he does is cry Graffiti in the doorway Who's looking Goodbye Brooklyn
Took a trip to the city As the subway roared Battery Park drips chalk Like an old blackboard Graffiti in the doorway Who's looking Goodbye Brooklyn Goodbye Brooklyn
A wonderful "album" track to go on your "CD" is how it feels to me. It fits in so nicely with your recent songs. Love the way you paint with words. Lovely work.
Well done, Bob! It is a touching piece of music with lyrics that fits perfectly into the universe that the music creates. I really liked listening to this!
Bob, You summed it up - a lovely vignette - leaves me wanting more. It occurs that you have a body of work about the city that would stand up there with the best songs of place & time. Real & good.
One quickly gets used to the way you perform. The cello has a strong part in the melody. Combined with your voice tears come up somewhere after line 4 of your lyrics (I'm lying a littlebit, it's after line 6). So a very nice song!
Wow - you did a truly great job on this one Short, sweet, and really packs an emotional punch. In my mind it's the perfect length - you hit everything you needed to. Love the poetic lyrics on this one as well.
Just a few simple snapshots that make me squint a little closer. Kinda reminds me of some of the deep album cuts--those short pieces by Simon and Garfunkle, Jethro Tull and others. They say what they say and stick with you...like this. And I do...like this.
A wonderful heartfelt song. Very good production. Every time I listen to you I hear Rodney Crowell , your vocals are perfect for this narrative type song. Thanks for sharing
Very nice, Bob! Your lyrics are always so strong, they stand alone, regardless of the music bed they lay upon. These are very poignant words, and are very well spoken in this one.
Well done Bob, I really enjoyed the overall tone of this. This is beautiful and I dig the overall timbres. Great tone with the guitar too. Very captivating lyrics. Great work!
Bob, obviously a very short song but man you did a lot in under 2 minutes! That cello was perfect to carry this one along! The track was a beautiful vehicle to carry your thoughts! Thanks, Torrey
Looking - Brooklyn what a great rhyme. Really creative fresh visuals too - dripping chalk. The tune was a bit repetitious for my taste but I get what you're going for - it's a style thing. Great job on your sound and extra kudos for such fresh creative lyrics.
I love your use of the cello to set the tone of this composition. A sense of sadness because of moving on resonated so clearly and poignantly. These lyrics are outstanding. That three line refrain at the end of each A-section is perfect.
I mention this just in case it is not something you've thought about (which is extremely unlikely), but as I listened, I would have loved to hear a cello solo between the 2nd and 3rd A-sections -- something like in the top clip below. I'd also experiment with such solo being unaccompanied just like in the uptempo clip below -- it's very effective to go from a band sound to unaccompanied cello.