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#149195 - 02/01/12 03:23 PM FAWM 2012/ One Drop Of Blood=Gospel Ctry Rock
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This is Song 1 of 14½ for the FAWM 2012 Songwriting Challenge. The Style is Country Rock With 12 String.

It is the instrument group loaded with the style, no changes. Songs will be done quickly to insure getting completed. After Fawm is over I will go back and work on any critiques. All tips and tricks are alway appreciated. It is all realtracks using BIAB 2012.

Bass=520 Elec Pop
Piano=690 B3 Organ Background
RD=Nashville Outlaw^10 SN ride
Gtr=1682 12 String Acoustic Fp
Strings=524 Acoustic Strum

One Drop Of Blood
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#149196 - 02/01/12 06:10 PM Re: FAWM 2012/ One Drop Of Blood=Gospel Ctry Rock [Re: PgFantastic]
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I get an error with IE9...maybe Reverbnation is down right now ?

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#149197 - 02/01/12 10:36 PM Re: FAWM 2012/ One Drop Of Blood=Gospel Ctry Rock [Re: MitchC]
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Nice! Even in it's "unpolished" state, it works quite well, which says a lot both for BiaB, the song and your singing.

The line "That's when I pointed to the cross..." is particularly nice in how it changes the rhythmic pattern.

The chorus works well, but I think a similar effect on the chorus on the line "One drop of blood/covered all my sin" to break the expected pattern would make it even more memorable.

On the second verse, "Satan will try" and "try to convince you" feel like a forced fit compared with the rest of the lyrics. Similarly, the break between "He seeks out" and "whom he may devour" sticks as being just a bit too unnatural.

This would be a great with a big gospel choir on the end chorus, especially if the choir was echoing the lyric, rather than singing with you. Maybe we'll get a "RealGospelChoir" in BiaB 2013?

Cutting the song at "Nothing but the blood of Jesus" would give a more dramatic ending.

The drums are too relentless for my taste. Obviously, working on builds and bringing things in and out (especially the drums). As you said, you just used the straight tracks, so there's lots of room for tweaks.

Thanks for posting!
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#149198 - 02/02/12 06:35 PM Re: FAWM 2012/ One Drop Of Blood=Gospel Ctry Rock [Re: dcuny]
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Thanks dcuny for the comments. As soon as Fawm is over I will give your tips a whirl, thanks! MitchC thanks for attempting to listen.
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#149199 - 02/02/12 06:41 PM Died To Set Them Free/ Gospel Rock [Re: PgFantastic]
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Here is song 2 in the FAWM Challenge. I forgot to write down the instruments, I will try to list them tomorrow. They are all real tracks from biab 2012.

Died To Set Them Free
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#149200 - 02/03/12 02:30 PM Re: Waitin' On The Shoe To Drop [Re: PgFantastic]
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Song #3 of FAWM uses Real tracks.
Bass=701 Elec Pop half note ev 85
Gtr=365 Acoustic FP
RD= Nashville ev 8^5HIhat,ride
Gtr=362 Acoustic Strum

Waitin' On The Shoe To Drop


NOTE: Here are the realtracks I used for song 2 Died to set them Free, I forgot to add them before.

388 Bass
425 B3organ
Drums=Nashville ev 8^hihat0ride
499 Elec Rhy GTR
505 Elec Rhy
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#149201 - 02/04/12 04:20 AM Re: Waitin' On The Shoe To Drop [Re: PgFantastic]
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Robert is it that time again, you are a song writing machine! Looks like you will make it in plenty of time this year. Love One Drop of Blood, that's as far as I have made it today back soon. Hope you have a BLESSED day !

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#149202 - 02/04/12 11:06 AM Re: Waitin' On The Shoe To Drop [Re: Tommyc]
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As noted, you're on a tear.

"Died to Set Them Free" is a straight ahead rocker. I like how you dropped everything but the drums. The last time around, I was thinking "It was unique the first time... I needs something different now, like someone witnessing..." and lo and behold, ask and you shall receive.

My only comment is that it the "Alleluia" vocals seem a bit restrained. Yeah, you won't hear me say that very often about your songs.

"Waiting for the Shoe to Drop" is nicely done - classic setup, and I love how the lyrics are turned around. But - for me - "It's been a month this Sunday" after that build isn't enough. Given how you've set this up, and how insidious a problem drinking can be, I need something more than that to "sell" me that the singer can start preaching to me.

But dang... you're a songwriting machine!
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#149203 - 02/04/12 08:19 PM Re: (Mom Still Takes My Temperature) The Old Fashion Way [Re: dcuny]
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Here is song 4 in this years FAWM installment. I got the idea for the title from an episode of Everybody Loves Raymond. The Instruments are

Bass 379 Elec Double Time
RD= Nashville Train EV16^1stksnr,stksnrR16
Gtr=Acoustic Strumming

(Mom Still Takes My Temperature) The Old Fashion Way
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#149204 - 02/05/12 03:41 AM Re: (Mom Still Takes My Temperature) The Old Fashion Way [Re: PgFantastic]
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Ha I laughed my behind off Robert, very funny song! Thanks for sharing it was a real hoot ! Hope you have a BLESSED SUNDAY Robert !

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#149205 - 02/05/12 07:15 AM Re: (Mom Still Takes My Temperature) The Old Fashion Way [Re: Tommyc]
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Robert, that's such a clever idea for a song - well put together and I really did laugh out loud! Well done!
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#149206 - 02/05/12 09:36 AM Re: (Mom Still Takes My Temperature) The Old Fashion Way [Re: Skyline]
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Very funny! Glad you decided to speak the lyric vs. singing... funnier.

I hope it's not a true story, but if so, I would recommend shopping online, rather than the mall.

Cheers! See you on FAWM.
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#149207 - 02/05/12 03:58 PM Re: (Mom Still Takes My Temperature) The Old Fashion Way [Re: Brallan]
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Robert,

You are a songwriting machine! Great job on these...

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#149208 - 02/06/12 04:07 AM Re: (Mom Still Takes My Temperature) The Old Fashion Way [Re: rsdean]
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Thanks dcuny, Tommyc, Skyline, Brallan, rsdean for the feedback. I appreciate all of your feedback and suggestions. Thanks to all who have gave the songs a listen. Brallan loved the shopping on line comment, LOL.




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#149209 - 02/06/12 08:17 AM Re: FAWM 2012/ One Drop Of Blood=Gospel Ctry Rock [Re: PgFantastic]
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I'm glad to learn about FAWM...I think I'm going to do it! Starting on 2/6 means I'll have a really short month!

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