Nice! Even in it's "unpolished" state, it works quite well, which says a lot both for BiaB, the song and your singing.
The line "That's when I pointed to the cross..."
is particularly nice in how it changes the rhythmic pattern.
The chorus works well, but I think a similar effect on the chorus on the line "One drop of blood/covered all my sin"
to break the expected pattern would make it even more memorable.
On the second verse, "Satan will try"
and "try to convince you"
feel like a forced fit compared with the rest of the lyrics. Similarly, the break between "He seeks out"
and "whom he may devour"
sticks as being just a bit too
This would be a great
with a big gospel choir on the end chorus, especially if the choir was echoing the lyric, rather than singing with you. Maybe we'll get a "RealGospelChoir" in BiaB 2013?
Cutting the song at "Nothing but the blood of Jesus" would give a more dramatic ending.
The drums are too relentless for my taste. Obviously, working on builds and bringing things in and out (especially the drums). As you said, you just used the straight tracks, so there's lots of room for tweaks.
Thanks for posting!