Here's a song I wrote about a couple dealing with depression.

Tracks used in song:
Bass: 518:Bass, Electric, Pop HalfNotes Ev 085
Piano: 365:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Ev 085
Drums: RealDrums=NashvilleEven8^6-HiHat,HHatO
Guitar: 362:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Ev 085
Strings:363:Pedal Steel, Background Ev 085
Melody: 1264:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm PopShiningA-B Ev 120
Soloist: 1259:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopShiningRockA-B Ev 120

Song link:
http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=11447339&q=hi

Lyrics:

Ain't No Love goin' On Here Tonight.
Tim Lawrence 2012
Verse:
Woke up in a cold, cold sweat
my mind was filled with regret
over things I said and can't take back
And now it's late and the lights are out
and I'm awake on this cold couch
she's down the hall, but further away then that

Chorus:
And There ain't no love goin' on here tonight
no there ain't no love goin' on here to night

Verse:
Was that a dream I half recall
about a rumble down the hall
her silent cries echo through my mind
there's hidden spaces I never see
for bidden places she keeps from me
it's hard to love a wounded soul some times

(c)
(Break)

Verse:
Her days are dark and her nights are grey
and in her heart she's lost her way
and I can see she's headin' for a fall
some gotta win some gotta lose
some walk away and some get bruised
and some never get to choose at all

(C)

Bridge:
It's the weight on my heart keeps my feet on the ground
the love in her eyes keeps me waitin' 'round

Chorus:
But there ain't no love goin' on here tonight
no there ain't no love goin' on here to night

Yeah There ain't no love goin' on here tonight
ain't no love goin' on here to night


Tim

I like this a lot Tim. My fav of yours so far.


Josie

Hi Tim, I like it to. One thing, you have the guitar fighting with the steel during the break. If you want to use the two of them then I would break them apart like maybe the guitar alone for so many bars then bring the steel in alone also. In any case nice job.

Cheers

Nelson

Thank you much Josie.

Tim

Sounds like you've got the C&W blues, hope this ain't yer life in a song Tim. Thanks for sharing, I love your Biab style selection for this song it fits just right!

Excellent song, lyrics flow perfect! The "further away than that" line is a home run. Nice demo. Thanks 4 sharing!




My Music

Tim,

Great job! I agree with Josie, this is a fav of yours so far.

I particularly like the line...
"It's the weight on my heart keeps my feet on the ground"

Keep up the good work!

Steve

I found this track to be well put together and nicely mixed
Was that you playing the solo at 2:17 Tim?

I feel that in many lines the delivery (phrasing) could use a re-think.

At 4:45 Maybe a little too long – I’m not sure that the bridge section should be repeated at 3:53. You should be looking to wind things down at that point.
Wow when you write a dark lyric, it sure is dark Tim!

Regards,

Marc