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Road,River & Rail

An old song written when I "discovered" country.
Listens and constructive comments appreciated!

Key=G , Tempo 105, Length (m:s)=3:43
No intro. 94 bar chorus, from bar 1 to bar 94. Repeat x1 chorus
No Melody
No Soloist track.
Song is saved with Volume, Pan, Reverb, Chorus, Bank0,
Song is saved with bar changes for Volume Changes,
Style is _TAILG8.STY (Tailgate Southern Rock w Banjo)

RealTracks in style: 1417:Bass, Electric, RootsRock Ev 100
RealTracks in style: 638:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm RootsRockTremolo Ev 100
RealTracks in style: 802:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm SouthernSnappyGritty Ev 090 (B:8ths)
RealTracks in style: ~589:Banjo, Bluegrass Doc Ev 100 (Rhythm)
RealDrums in style: BluesRockSlowEv^2-a:SideStick , b:Snare, HiHat
RT 602 Harmonica Soloist Train


Road, River & Rail

road road river and rail
been around this world
`til I`m chasing my tail
now you won`t see nothing
but a vapor trail
when I fly back home

momma won`t you look for me
look for me in your memory
in picture books there do you see
a boy with sparrow eyes

you`ll see me coming through the golden wheat
touch the tracks feel my heartbeat
I`m a stranger but I know your street
and I still love you

road road river and rail
been around this world
`til I`m chasing my tail
you won`t see nothing
but a vapor trail
when I fly back home

lord lord will you say I failed
I set out searching
for the holy grail
somewhere out there
on that crooked trail
all I found was a man

papa can you still hear me
hear me in your grave so green
my shoes are worn and my wounds are deep
now my tears fall down for you

I left all the dreams you had for my life
had to climb high to where my river ran dry
now my hand`s reaching down to where you lie
I know you were my friend

road road river and rail
been around this world
`til I`m chasing my tail
now you won`t see nothing
but a vapor trail
when I fly back home

life life so hard and so frail
I`ve been the hammer
and I`ve been the nail
you broke my wheels
then gave me a sail
to find my way back home


© Robert Cordrey Feb.1994

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Robert

Good catchy song - nice chorus. Some nice dynamics as the song develops.

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Hi Robertkc, Great job on this! Really dig the harmonica it adds flavor to the whole song. Well done! smile


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Enjoyed that Robert especially the boy with sparrow eyes. Cheers.

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I saw this one yesterday, was logged into soundcloud and the upload showed up on my stream. Great song, love the lyrics and especially the strong hook in the chorus.

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Hi robert. Love love the acapella start to this. The melody is very engaging. A great write and also a great production. Good job!


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Great sound on this. Totally pro. Excellent production. Love the lyrics.

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Originally Posted By: PeterF
Robert

Good catchy song - nice chorus. Some nice dynamics as the song develops.

Peter


Thanks for that, Peter. I tried to change things up between chorus & verses - glad it worked.

Robert

Originally Posted By: Joe -PG Music
Hi Robertkc, Great job on this! Really dig the harmonica it adds flavor to the whole song. Well done! smile


Hi Joe,
Harmonica was the first instrument I played and I always carried a couple when travelling so it was a good fit for this song. Thanks for your kind comments.

Robert

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Enjoyed that Robert especially the boy with sparrow eyes. Cheers.


Thank you!
Yeah,I like that line too- lots of cliches in the lyrics on this song, but that one`s original.

Robert

Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
I saw this one yesterday, was logged into soundcloud and the upload showed up on my stream. Great song, love the lyrics and especially the strong hook in the chorus.


Dave,
Thanks for your listen and comments here and on SoundCloud -The chorus "hook" on this might be the only really catchy one I`ve written!

Robert

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Robert,

An interesting write. The band is cool - works well.

The arrangement is nice. I thought the vocal could use more reverb - it seems quite dry.

Enjoyed the listen.

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Very cool start to the song. Excellent vocal, lyric and backtrack


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Robert,

Like Joanne, the vocal-only start really appealed to me. It worked like a charm and pulled me right into the lyrics.

I found this a very interesting journey. I like the way the slightly folk-sounding melody interacted with the country backing. To me it was a very effective cross-over of genres... creative plus!

Enjoyed it!

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I found this a very interesting journey. I like the way the slightly folk-sounding melody interacted with the country backing. To me it was a very effective cross-over of genres... creative plus!

(what Noel said)

very good description of my impression,
good song, has re-play value
enjoyed it!

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I think the lyrics for this are top drawer - very good and I wish i had written them. What a great chorus.

I liked the melody too , but I must be honest I didnt like the arrangements - The introduction and dropping of instruments somehow sounded a bit unnatural to me - I think you absolutely have the right instinct to have little moments thoughtout the song - but they just didnt seem quite authentic to my ears. My thought would be to work on the arrangement.

I actually wonder if it wouldnt be nicer in an arrangement with just your voice(s) and a single guitar - there is a power in your lyric which would stand up to a more bare-bones production

Anyway I hope that is useful feedback!


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Originally Posted By: JoanneCooper
Hi robert. Love love the acapella start to this. The melody is very engaging. A great write and also a great production. Good job!


Thanks Joanne!

Originally Posted By: David Snyder
Great sound on this. Totally pro. Excellent production. Love the lyrics.


David,
Wow, you are too kind... have to laugh a little on the production -I had a back problem and had to do all the mixing lying on the floor... maybe it gave me sharper ears?

Robert



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Robert,

An interesting write. The band is cool - works well.

The arrangement is nice. I thought the vocal could use more reverb - it seems quite dry.

Enjoyed the listen.

fj


Floyd,
I`m glad you liked the arrangement - this was a complete redo after recording the song at a slower tempo with a much folkier band.
I used a different "rock" preset for the vocal this time which sounded a bit edgier to me- I`ll have another listen and see if I can hear what you mean on the reverb.

Robert

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Robert,

I think this is my favorite from you so far... Everything about this song is excellent.

Bob

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Originally Posted By: Scott C
Very cool start to the song. Excellent vocal, lyric and backtrack


Scott,
Many thanks for your listens and likes.

Robert
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Robert,

Like Joanne, the vocal-only start really appealed to me. It worked like a charm and pulled me right into the lyrics.

I found this a very interesting journey. I like the way the slightly folk-sounding melody interacted with the country backing. To me it was a very effective cross-over of genres... creative plus!

Enjoyed it!

Regards,
Noel


Noel,
Thank you!
Your comments always let me know that you`ve really listened
to the song - it helps make the "journey" of getting all that production stuff done that bit more satisfying.

Robert

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I found this a very interesting journey. I like the way the slightly folk-sounding melody interacted with the country backing. To me it was a very effective cross-over of genres... creative plus!

(what Noel said)

very good description of my impression,
good song, has re-play value
enjoyed it!

Kenny


Thanks, Kenny ... this was a song I found would wake folks up after playing more introspective fare.

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Originally Posted By: fabkebab
I think the lyrics for this are top drawer - very good and I wish i had written them. What a great chorus.

I liked the melody too , but I must be honest I didnt like the arrangements - The introduction and dropping of instruments somehow sounded a bit unnatural to me - I think you absolutely have the right instinct to have little moments thoughtout the song - but they just didnt seem quite authentic to my ears. My thought would be to work on the arrangement.

I actually wonder if it wouldnt be nicer in an arrangement with just your voice(s) and a single guitar - there is a power in your lyric which would stand up to a more bare-bones production

Anyway I hope that is useful feedback!



I appreciate your listen and thoughtful comments- yes, I find them useful!
I played this song with just guitar & harp for years, so I tried that simple arrangement on first recording with BiaB... and then thought " not enough fun!" and decided to try and rock out just a little.The syncopation of this "Southern" rock style took a fair bit of practice to get right for the vocals and I`m quite pleased with the result.
I get what you`re saying about the changes in instrumentation through the song and I might revisit some of the fade-in/outs in any future version.

Robert

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Excellent song. Very much like early country rock in the 70's in the storyline, choice of instruments and presentation.

Enjoyed my listen.


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Robert,

We agree with all being said here. Very cool production with very nice lyrics!

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Originally Posted By: rsdean
Robert,

I think this is my favorite from you so far... Everything about this song is excellent.

Bob


Thanks Bob.
A musician friend of mine thinks its the only song I`ve written with commercial potential, so I tell him now that`s out of the way I can just write what I like!

Robert


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