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#440447 - 11/25/17 04:54 AM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: floyd jane]
Jon Thomas Offline
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I like it very much Floyd.
As someone said, the lack of chorus may seem odd at first, but it does add power to the storytelling element.
Great job. Wow.
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#440707 - 11/26/17 06:36 AM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: floyd jane]
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Did we just hear a lost Prine write?

Never noticed the lack of a chorus as the arrangement is perfect for the story and supporting imagery.

The build and variety of instruments is extremely effective and indicative of a heckuva mix.

The vocal was perfect and full of, as Janice said, “richness.”

Many singer songwriters would be delighted to have one or two tunes like this in their repertoire but, man, you are a cornucopia!

J&B

PS We used to talk to an elderly lady, Pearl, who much reminds us of your story.
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#440863 - 11/26/17 05:44 PM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: floyd jane]
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A BIG WOOOOOOOOOW!!!! This is just great storytelling! I was first struck by the line David referenced. BUT, the whole song is so beautifully put together. Brilliant writing! The repetition of the verse structure as the story unfolds just tangles the listener into the story. Reminds me of something by Jerry Jeff or Dylan's Like a Rolling Stone. The arrangement is PERFECT! And the vocal is exactly the right tone for the story. In the LP days, this would be a first or last song on one side of the Best of Floyd Jane. Awesome Floyd!!! Take care. Greg

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#441021 - 11/27/17 03:13 PM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: 44kfl]
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Originally Posted By: 44kfl

"the state of the world for a crutch"

that's a line that I wish I'd written

the entire song is a super write and shows great storytelling ability

I instantly fell in love with that acoustic bluegrass Doc soloist

easy flowing, takes you along gently painting images

makes you want to hear it again as soon as it ends

"I could've been rich if I wanted"

even if he could not have, his experiences made him

wonderful mix

as always, I enjoyed this very much

Kenny


Thanks, Kenny. Can't think of anything I like to hear more than a writer like you say "...that's a line that I wish I'd written"... Really appreciate that... your stuff has been blowing me away...
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#441031 - 11/27/17 04:00 PM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: Ember - PG Music]
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Originally Posted By: Ember - PG Music
I think that this song is probably my new favourite from you. Victoria has a pretty high homeless population (perhaps because it is so temperate year round; some also choose it as a lifestyle), so this song hits pretty close to home and almost moved me to tears. There is so much that we will never understand that they go through on a daily basis, and I feel like this song gives us a small glimpse in to what it's like.

Thanks for making and sharing this song with us! <3


I appreciate that, Ember. Glad you liked the song. Indeed, there are far more (obvious) homeless these days. Far too many.
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#441152 - 11/28/17 05:13 AM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: David Snyder]
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Originally Posted By: David Snyder
All the lines are great, but these are genius:

his hands were swollen and bleeding
his stories as raw as they come
his whole life a matter of waiting to hear
he traveled the world on a thumb

Nice!!!!

Great song, Floyd. Kinda reminds me of Mr. Bojangles.

I have a story kind of like this. The result of it was REM's third album. Maybe I will tell it later.

smile

Happy Thanksgiving.


Bojangles was a classic. Looking forward to hearing that REM story...
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#441207 - 11/28/17 08:18 AM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: floyd jane]
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Ah floyd. This is just lovely. Sell you a story for a cigarette. Great line.
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#441236 - 11/28/17 10:13 AM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: floyd jane]
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Great story over a top notch arrangement. The entire musical bed is outstanding. It really holds my interest. Enjoyed this a lot and for some reason the bass had my attention throughout the song. It really fit the vibe of the song. A good story of life, and a bit in the vein of "Wrong Mailbox"

Good song by every measure.

Charlie
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#441348 - 11/28/17 04:00 PM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: floyd jane]
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This is great Floyd! What a story teller you are! Top level Singing/writing/production and I mean it!!! Veteran musicians have some of the best tales to tell! Thanks, Torrey
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#441420 - 11/28/17 08:25 PM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: Joe -PG Music]
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Originally Posted By: Joe -PG Music
Hi Floyd Jane, well done on this! I found the vocals quite captivating and an excellent groove with this. The Mandolin is a great touch too!


Thanks for having a listen, Joe.
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#441682 - 11/30/17 06:59 AM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: RichMac]
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Originally Posted By: RichMac
Hi Floyd.
Great this one.
Nice and relaxed.
A mixture of Tom T Hall and Jimmy Buffet to my ears.
Can relate to more of the song than I like to admit.
Sailing islands rum Hong Kong and more Oh dear. Cheers.


Thanks, Richard. Those are a couple of guys I have no problem with having a comparison... smile
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#441730 - 11/30/17 11:39 AM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: floyd jane]
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Great arrangement and mix. I appreciate you sharing the story behind the song. The song draws you in, the longer you listen the more you want to hear. Really like the fadeout.
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#441945 - 12/01/17 03:55 PM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: Al-David]
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Originally Posted By: Al-David
Hi Floyd,

What a great song! The simplicity of the backing tracks was great idea so as not to detract from fabulous lyric. By far the story telling in the lyric shines above all else.

Also, the way the backing tracks gentle layered up in about halfway through just added to the anticipation of the remainder of the song - compels the listener to pleasantly wait for the ending.

I could have heard Tom T. singing this back in '75 or '76. I'm quite comfortable with analogizing this to a Tom T. Hall effort. He's one of the very best story songwriters in country music history and this is right up there. It can be difficult to hold the listeners' attention without a chorus and a somewhat repetitive verse. But you threw all that out the window and stamped this with an indelible "can't wait to hear it again" mark.

I could ramble on more with seemingly unending praise, but I think you get the point that I believe this is a fabulous song on all accounts and I simply love it.

Best to you and yours.

Alan



Alan - thanks for all of that. The story song seems to have been lost over the last few years. I really appreciate the Tom T reference....
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#442147 - 12/02/17 02:04 PM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: floyd jane]
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I love that story!
The song itself reminded me of Homeless Brother (at least I seem to remember that was the name of the song) by Don Mclean.
Top quality as usual!

Rob
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#442262 - 12/03/17 04:29 AM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: Rob4580]
floyd jane Offline
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Originally Posted By: Rob4580
Floyd you truly are a story telling in song.
Great lyrics and vocals.
Love your instrument choices.
Well told. Rob


Thanks, Rob. I see that you have another new one... will have a listen soon..
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#442316 - 12/03/17 09:29 AM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: floyd jane]
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Ok, I need to know...how many top line writers are on staff over at the group known as "Floyd Jane?"

I used to think you were but one person, however, as you (plural) have demonstrated, that is clearly NOT the case! It simply wouldn't be possible.

Sorry to point out the obvious.
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#442433 - 12/03/17 06:02 PM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: PeterF]
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Originally Posted By: dani48
Hi, Floyd !

The best I´ve heard from
you so far without any doubt !
Love your singing and that
superb tune with those beautiful
chords !:))

Cheers
Dani


smile Thanks, Dani...

Originally Posted By: PeterF
floyd

A wonderful piece of storytelling.
The music sits perfectly behind the lyric with your trademark delivery.
Lovely mix and full of superb lines and touches.

Peter


Appreciate that, Peter...
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#442637 - 12/04/17 02:22 PM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: MusicStudent]
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Originally Posted By: Scott C
Very cool lyric Floyd. Vocal and backtrack was such a smooth blend. Just fit so tight with each other. So enjoyable. Guitar was very cool as well. Well done


Thanks, Scott...


Originally Posted By: MusicStudent
You the man FJ.


Always appreciate you stopping by, Dan...
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#442657 - 12/04/17 05:42 PM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: floyd jane]
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Genius writing again from you Floyd.

This is magical, both in its sensational instrumentation, but even more so because of the sensational lyrics.

This is story telling - put to music - at its absolute best.

A real winner. Polished delivery. Class? No question at all.
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#442917 - 12/05/17 08:34 PM [User Showcase] Re: The Bum [Re: floyd jane]
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Another great tune. I just love your songs. The story behind this one is really cool and the way you tell the story is great.
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