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Too Lovely For Words

Style is _RISING.STY (Rising Fingerpicking w/Drums)

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RealTracks in style: ~2505:Piano, Electric, HeldChords 085
RealTracks in style: 2914:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Folky16thsBrent Ev16 08
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chingching loop

A love song. Constructive comments welcome.



Too Lovely For Words

when our hands met it was a May morning
touching a November afternoon
in your bangles and petals I guess you heard
B-side songs from a lonely room

you said I can`t make rivers run uphill
I`m not much younger than you
I`ve seen other dreams show up a day too late
a dollar short a little out of tune

it all falls away
whisper that cliche
you are you are
too lovely for words
too lovely for words

from a tower of clouds you can calculate
openings in the sky
`til someone dances through your design
springtime in her eye

we rolled up the clouds I lost some grey
to the rain and dust our own patch of dirt
in flints and flowers somewhere we dug up
the boy and girl we were

it all falls away
whisper that cliche
you are you are
too lovely for words
too lovely for words

hold me and say
those lovely words

© Robert Cordrey June 2018

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Robert,

This is absolutely beautiful...

Love the song, arrangement and your vocal treatment. Great clear mix.

Bob

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My first thoughts were John Denver but this is way more complex vocal wise. The strings are a good touch. Very pretty emotional tune. Really enjoyed my listen. Nicely done. Rob

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Robert,

This has a very haunting sound. The backing, your vivid lyric imagery sung with soft and gentle vocals and the restful flow of lyrics and melody created a very pleasant effect. Your choice of instrumentation was excellent. You captured my imagination!

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Well done! The strings were especially lovely, especially in stereo.

Nicely sung, evocative lyrics.

The sparse arrangement works really well.


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Robert

Beautifully done in all aspects - lyrically, vocally and composition wise.
Lovely sound and excellent work.

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Very nice, Robert!

As always lots of great lines. My favorite:
"I`ve seen other dreams show up a day too late
a dollar short a little out of tune"

Nice job on the track too, I like it when the strings come in and the chingching loop is subtle and effective.

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Robert,

"Lovely" describes this in so many ways...

A lovely write, a lovely arrangement - perfect RT choices, A lovely vocal...

"in your bangles and petals I guess you heard
B-side songs from a lonely room"

Nice.

(This once brought to mind Murray McLauchlan)

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Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Robert,

"Lovely" describes this in so many ways...

A lovely write, a lovely arrangement - perfect RT choices, A lovely vocal...

"in your bangles and petals I guess you heard
B-side songs from a lonely room"

Nice.

(This once brought to mind Murray McLauchlan)

fj


I agree with all that!! Except I don't know who Murray McLauchlan is. This is so well done in every way. One of my faves of yours for sure!! Take care. Greg

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Originally Posted By: rsdean
Robert,

This is absolutely beautiful...

Love the song, arrangement and your vocal treatment. Great clear mix.

Bob


Bob,
Thank you!
I`ve been working on a formula for vocals on the folky tunes that sure makes the mixing easier. Glad you liked this.

Robert
Originally Posted By: Rob4580
My first thoughts were John Denver but this is way more complex vocal wise. The strings are a good touch. Very pretty emotional tune. Really enjoyed my listen. Nicely done. Rob


Thanks Rob, I appreciate the listen and positive comments.

Robert

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Robert,

This has a very haunting sound. The backing, your vivid lyric imagery sung with soft and gentle vocals and the restful flow of lyrics and melody created a very pleasant effect. Your choice of instrumentation was excellent. You captured my imagination!

All the best,
Noel



Noel,
Good to hear that the effect was pleasant- funnily enough I found the lyrics on this song difficult ( many rewrites), so thank you for saying the result of my struggles has a flow!

Robert

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Hi Robertkc, Great work on this! I really enjoyed the overall tone of this. Fantastic choice of instrumentation. Loved the strings and vocals too. Thanks for sharing!


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Another winner Rob, keep 'em coming, I'm enjoying listening

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Originally Posted By: Greg Johnson
Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Robert,

"Lovely" describes this in so many ways...

A lovely write, a lovely arrangement - perfect RT choices, A lovely vocal...

"in your bangles and petals I guess you heard
B-side songs from a lonely room"

Nice.

(This once brought to mind Murray McLauchlan)

fj


I agree with all that!! Except I don't know who Murray McLauchlan is. This is so well done in every way. One of my faves of yours for sure!! Take care. Greg


Everything Greg and Floyd said. There simply aren't enough superlatives to adequately describe the gentle beauty of this song. And wow - what gorgeous vocal! If beauty didn't already have a definition, this would be the perfect way to describe it.

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Such a beautiful song Robert. Just love your folk songs. Such a lovely lyric. Well done...


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Originally Posted By: dcuny
Well done! The strings were especially lovely, especially in stereo.

Nicely sung, evocative lyrics.

The sparse arrangement works really well.


Thank you, glad you liked this.
The high/low violins seemed to work better than cello on this song ( and eliminates that niggly question about panning for the solo).



Originally Posted By: PeterF
Robert

Beautifully done in all aspects - lyrically, vocally and composition wise.
Lovely sound and excellent work.

Peter


That`s very kind, Peter - a big thank you!

Robert

Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
Very nice, Robert!

As always lots of great lines. My favorite:
"I`ve seen other dreams show up a day too late
a dollar short a little out of tune"

Nice job on the track too, I like it when the strings come in and the chingching loop is subtle and effective.


Dave,
I`m always pleased when the lyrics stand out... but especially for a guitarist!
Thanks for your listen and positive comments.

Robert




Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Robert,

"Lovely" describes this in so many ways...

A lovely write, a lovely arrangement - perfect RT choices, A lovely vocal...

"in your bangles and petals I guess you heard
B-side songs from a lonely room"

Nice.

(This once brought to mind Murray McLauchlan)

fj


Floyd,
And there`s me thinking only Canadians listened to Murray - he wrote some good songs, so thanks for that... and all your supportive feedback.

Robert

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Originally Posted By: Joe -PG Music
Hi Robertkc, Great work on this! I really enjoyed the overall tone of this. Fantastic choice of instrumentation. Loved the strings and vocals too. Thanks for sharing!


Thank you, Joe!

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Another winner Rob, keep 'em coming, I'm enjoying listening


I appreciate the listen and comments, Graham.

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Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Robert,

"Lovely" describes this in so many ways...

A lovely write, a lovely arrangement - perfect RT choices, A lovely vocal...

"in your bangles and petals I guess you heard
B-side songs from a lonely room"

Nice.

(This once brought to mind Murray McLauchlan)

fj


I agree with all that!! Except I don't know who Murray McLauchlan is. This is so well done in every way. One of my faves of yours for sure!! Take care. Greg


Greg,
Glad you liked this.
Murray has a way with folksy wisdom in his lyrics and a very simple style. I haven`t listened to him in years but he`s worth
checking out.

Robert

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Nice write and vocals.

I liked this and enjoyed it.


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Robert this is sooo pretty. Poetic and earthy - real heart tugger with the vocal and arrangement.

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Robert, you have a powerful talent for visual imagery.

from a tower of clouds you can calculate
openings in the sky
`til someone dances through your design
springtime in her eye

Wonderful.

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Beautiful song Robert, such a top notch vocal to go with the music and lyrics!!

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What a lovely song Robert.


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The vocals remind me of Tom Rapp and the more complex melody also gives me flickers of him too.
Lovely stuff.


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“we rolled up the clouds I lost some grey
to the rain and dust our own patch of dirt
in flints and flowers somewhere we dug up
the boy and girl we were”

Robert, this is a stunningly beautiful write. Rich, rich imagery.

The band, your vocal and the production more than do justice to the write.

And the strings were a very special addition.

Lovely!

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Gosh, this is a really beautiful song.

Great mix--perfect. Vocal sits perfectly. I can hear this on an album, easily.

Reminds me of Paul Simon.

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Originally Posted By: Al-David
Originally Posted By: Greg Johnson
Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Robert,

"Lovely" describes this in so many ways...

A lovely write, a lovely arrangement - perfect RT choices, A lovely vocal...

"in your bangles and petals I guess you heard
B-side songs from a lonely room"

Nice.

(This once brought to mind Murray McLauchlan)

fj


I agree with all that!! Except I don't know who Murray McLauchlan is. This is so well done in every way. One of my faves of yours for sure!! Take care. Greg


Everything Greg and Floyd said. There simply aren't enough superlatives to adequately describe the gentle beauty of this song. And wow - what gorgeous vocal! If beauty didn't already have a definition, this would be the perfect way to describe it.

Alan



Alan,
You made my day with that - very kind, sir!
This is the first time I`ve used the Reaper tuning feature to smooth some notes in the vocals;it surprised me how well it worked.

Robert

Originally Posted By: Scott C
Such a beautiful song Robert. Just love your folk songs. Such a lovely lyric. Well done...


Thanks,Scott - I wrote this while recovering from our last heavy song!

Robert



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Nice write and vocals.

I liked this and enjoyed it.


Thanks for your listen.


Originally Posted By: Sundance
Robert this is sooo pretty. Poetic and earthy - real heart tugger with the vocal and arrangement.




Josie,
Glad you enjoyed this.Thanks for your positive comments.

Robert

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Wow - this is stunning smile The whole tune sounds so velvety and delicate. Your vocal performance sound so natural, and it is so tranquil and sincere. Simply put, this is just a beautiful song.

Really well done - thanks for sharing!


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Originally Posted By: guitar1
Robert, you have a powerful talent for visual imagery.

from a tower of clouds you can calculate
openings in the sky
`til someone dances through your design
springtime in her eye

Wonderful.



Thank you!

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Beautiful song Robert, such a top notch vocal to go with the music and lyrics!!


I appreciate that. My vocal processing has become just a bit more subtle which helps on a tune like this.

Robert

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Originally Posted By: JoanneCooper
What a lovely song Robert.


Thanks for the listen, Joanne!

Originally Posted By: rayc
The vocals remind me of Tom Rapp and the more complex melody also gives me flickers of him too.
Lovely stuff.


Thank you for that - will have to check out Tom Rapp`s solo songs ( I remember Pearls Before Swine from way back).

Originally Posted By: Janice & Bud
“we rolled up the clouds I lost some grey
to the rain and dust our own patch of dirt
in flints and flowers somewhere we dug up
the boy and girl we were”

Robert, this is a stunningly beautiful write. Rich, rich imagery.

The band, your vocal and the production more than do justice to the write.

And the strings were a very special addition.

Lovely!

J&B



J&B,

That last verse is really there cos it would have meaning for my wife ( the song initially had only 3 verses).
Your listens and supportive comments are most appreciated.

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Originally Posted By: David Snyder

Gosh, this is a really beautiful song.

Great mix--perfect. Vocal sits perfectly. I can hear this on an album, easily.

Reminds me of Paul Simon.


David,

Thanks for that. Paul Simon`s early romantic songs are a big favourite of mine.

Robert

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Wow - this is stunning smile The whole tune sounds so velvety and delicate. Your vocal performance sound so natural, and it is so tranquil and sincere. Simply put, this is just a beautiful song.

Really well done - thanks for sharing!


Deryk,
Those are some very nice things to say about this song: thank you!


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Hello, Robert

Very beautiful.
Your vocal perfectly fits this tune.
It is very nice and very natural to use the ordinary chord progression of D-Bm-G-A7, but using them shifting their bar lengths slightly.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

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Shigeki,
Thanks for those kind words- glad you liked this.

Robert

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