Kudos Marc to the real players! Nice and tight.
First of all "knuckle rap" for no lyrics . "Listen carefully" does not quite work for me.
And this leads to my first suggestion - while I appreciate the high vocal volume (I could catch some of the lyrics), I think maybe the voice needs to be pulled down somewhat IMHO - but you need to hear from good ears about this.

Maybe an alternative ending - after the second chorus repetition at the end, conclude with a heavy clipped band shots on each of "hard" and "way" and let the reverb tail off about 4 min. Save the extra seconds for live. Basically I liked the way you worked the closing . . . except for the length (for which you already apologized )

Should work well live. Do you have a front man who can lead the audience with some enthusiastic handclapping?

Cheers - Ian

Last edited by Ian Fraser; 01/09/11 11:03 AM.

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