Eddie,

That's a very strong song, the lyrics work well and I think it has potential for being published. I'd hawk it around and don't think twice about whether the demo is perfect or not; someone who's interested will just listen to the topline melody and lyrics. They'll have just one thing in their head 'can I make money off this?'

Vocal: actually, I think your voice 100% suited the message being delivered in this song! Aside from the popshield issue, I think you also put too much reverb on it (which people often do when they're self-aware of their singing voice), or you've got a tad too much room ambience?

Good luck with this one, it's got legs!

John


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