I agree with everyone else - great song, singer and a solid production. I can easily imagine how this song is going to shine with another level of polish.

My only thought is that song feels short. The first verse feels like a second verse to me - it's very abstract. I'd like the first verse to set up a specific scene of the ex-lovers "coming and going" before moving on to generalities.

Keep in mind this advice is coming from someone who's never written a successful song!

Verse 2 has the lyric "to mends our broken heart", which should probably be "to mend our broken hearts."

Anyway, really well done.


-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?