Thanks so much for your input. I do appreciate your honesty! I'm not sure what I will change on the song at this point. I do frequently make minor changes to songs after I write them, as do probably most of us here. But I will certainly give some thought to what you posted. And your two cents are definitely worth more than two cents to me!
"In order to compose, all you need to do is remember a tune that nobody else has thought of." - Robert Schumann