Good stuff:
I liked the general flow and feel of the song.
you have a great voice for that style of music
harmonies worked quite well
I liked the fact that you played a lot of it yourself
This may be your first song posted here, but its clearly not your first go-round at songwriting. You seem to have a flair for it.
It was fun listening to it.
the guitar work shows real talent
they were innovative and not a rubberstamp of every other guitar part ever heard

Not as good stuff:
A simpler and more predictable bass part would have really enhanced the song.
You posted it saying it was not finished.

all in all a good listen
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