Good tune...me likes!

Here's my input. Don't put any importance on it!

I think it would be a great tune kicking it in the pants so to speak and making it swing like an "Asleep at the Wheel" tune. Anyway that's what I hear while you're singing it.

Recording wise, well if you can identify the defects, you're off to a good start. Instead of "directing" you a better approach IMO is for you to ask direct questions to what you've identified as a good starting point, then apply that and move forward.

Since there's no specifically devoted recording clinic forum here I guess OffTopic might be as good a place as any.

DTuna