This one has an odd form, if any at all. You can decide if there's a verse and a chorus or what.

Back story, a violent storm rolled through the area at mid-morning one day last year. I was home alone. Sometime later the song-idea light bulb illuminated:)


https://soundcloud.com/scott-h-olson/the-storm


THE STORM

Copyright © 2015 by Scott H. Olson

Well the storm blew through this town around ten a.m.
Wreaked a little havoc, caused a little more mayhem
Yeah, the power went out, but the beer was cold
So I had me quite an episode

When the storm blew through this town around ten a.m.

Them ol' dark clouds swallowed the sun
Running for cover I thought I was done
When the rain poured down overflowing the ditches
I found high ground right there in the kitchen
Where that fridgidaire, a side by side
Stood with all the tall-boys chillin' inside

When the storm blew through this town around ten a.m.


Style is _NWORSUF.STY (NewOrleans Shuffle Band[130RS])

RealTracks in style: 2435:Bass, Electric, NewOrleansShuffle Sw 130
RealTracks in style: 2437:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm NewOrleansShuffleKevin Sw 130
RealTracks in song: ~957:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm CountryBoogieGrittyMuted Sw 110
RealTracks in song: ~423:Harmonica, Background Blues Sw 120
RealDrums in style: NewOrleansShuffle^04-a:Kick Shuffle , b:Ride, Shuffle

I gave her a listen.

I think this a pretty good write.
Your vocal has good quality, very well delivered with good imagery.
IE: " Where that fridgidaire, a side by side
Stood with all the tall-boys chilllin' inside".

I want to say the honky tonk piano could come up a db but I'm listening on my laptop so that may be too presumptuous of me.

Well done...do carry on.

Hi Scott,
Very cool song! Everything fits together and you did a great job with the stops (I really like that part). Very clean and professional sound and mix. Your vocal is outstanding and the lyrics tell an interesting story. I enjoyed listening.
Sonny

Hi Scott,

I like the story. Outstanding vocals.
An enjoyable listen throughout.

Guenter

An original idea for a song, good lyrics! A very pro production.

John

Very nice groove and a cool idea......


BUT.....


It's only halfway finished. I wasn't halfway through the first verse when this thought hit me.

You need a verse #2 that talks about the "storm" being a woman, most likely your woman, who is seeking some revenge on you for being out a bit too late and coming home a bit to inebriated.... put a bit of a twist on the metaphor about a storm.

Well the storm blew through this town around ten a.m.
Wreaked a little havoc, caused a little more mayhem

That is one of the most clever rhymes I've ever heard!! This is a really fun and clever song. Well done in every way. Vocal is great, mix is sweet and arrangement sounds very natural. Great job!! Take care. Greg

Hi, Scott !:))


Absolutely super music !

Cheers
Dani

Hello Scott,

well, we're definitely hearing a song structure ;-)
a good one too.
well done, good vocals too!

Rob & Anne-Marie

Scott
This is a first class delivery. Had my toe tapping right from the start. There's really nothing to not like about this little beauty. Your vocals are first class, and choice of RealTracks is the icing on the cake.
Tops

Scott
Really easy listen - good tune very nice vocal and well put together. Liked the ending.

Nice song; good country sound and very well sung.

Sergio

hi scott awesome work here very engageing love this thanks for sharing eric

A good write, Scott.

Nice, crisp production. Good vocals and nice mix.

Well done.

fj

I agree with all. This is a very cool tune and an awesome vocal delivery

Scott, I like the write and the vocal is amazing. I felt like the instrumental break lacked a cohesive solo. It sounded like just harmonica fills. The mix is excellent. Very well put together and I enjoyed it a lot. Tom

Excellent stuff here Scott. Really enjoyed it.



Regards,

Bob

Hi Scott.

Absolutely superb - I loved that.

I always like a song with a story and this is a great one with a bit of humour thrown in.

The mix has a lot of punch, but it's still crystal clear and not over compressed. All the instruments work well together and support an excellent vocal.

A great track.

ROG.

Hi Scott,
The title hooked me. I just had to give it a listen.
Great story. That's usually what I do too when the power goes out; start drinking the beer.
Loved the song.
SD

"Well the storm blew through this town around ten a.m.
Wreaked a little havoc, caused a little more mayhem"

Greg's already mentioned that line but it deserves another
as it is immediately memorable. Everything here is in
the pocket and the band is hittin' the note.

This is a fine production that is right in our wheelhouse
and had an immediate add to our SC playlist.

Really, really good!

J&B

EDIT: Janice just reminded me that recently when our
refrigerator bit the dust we got our priorities in order
and put the beer on ice. Craft brews I might add

And we just listened again. Great tune!!

Really good production and a unique storyline. Good stuff.

This would be a good pitch to Allstate Insurance to go with their "Mr. Mayhem" character commercials.

Thanks. I automated the piano volume throughout and tried to bring it up for those right-hand parts.


Thanks, Sonny. I really didn't know where I was going with this one, but I guess BiaB did:)


Thanks for giving it a listen, Guenter.


Appreciate that, John.


Yeah, Herb, I toyed with that theme too. There was going to be backyard pool party with me and all the neighbor ladies who were in the same predicament. Then I decided to just let the listener make up their own story:)


Wow, Greg. Thank you.


Thank you, Dani!



I appreciate that, you two. Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment:)

Hey we just went through an ice storm so I can relate!!!

Great tune.

I distinctly hear a verse chorus structure, though not typical of today, still very much a verse chorus structure of classic country where the chorus does not have to be exactly the same words each time.

The lift and flow was excellent though, also the lyrics and production.

Thank you so much!


I was experimenting with endings in BiaB and hadn't planned on that tag at all, but it seemed to belong. Glad you liked it.


Thanks for the listen, Sergio.


Thanks for listening and commenting, Eric!


I appreciate that, Floyd. I feel like my mixing has improved and my producer's ear has developed enough to get decent results fairly quickly now. Still working on it though. Thanks again for the feedback.


I suppose singing is what I enjoy the most, so it means a lot when someone tells me they enjoy it too. Thank you.

Scott I have listened to this a few times on Soundcloud and only now noticed I have not been here.
I am also listening to it in the middle of a storm, 70+mph winds and torrential rain so this is a perfect backdrop
Excellent vocals and choice of Rts, I thought the harmonica was perfect with the short reprise at the end.

All in all that was a good rockin' tune and it sounded good LOUD

excellent I look forward to more

Alyn

[/quote] You need a verse #2 that talks about the "storm" being a woman, most likely your woman, who is seeking some revenge on you for being out a bit too late and coming home a bit to inebriated.... put a bit of a twist on the metaphor about a storm. [/quote]

That was my first thought as well, cool song though by itself.

Rob