Just a little waltz (a bit wordy at 78 words )

I've misplaced the original file on this, so no memo. All BIAB with some strings and such added. Comments or crits welcomed.


The WAV:

https://90dbband.bandcamp.com/track/the-widows-walk


The MP3:

https://soundcloud.com/90-db/the-widows-walk



The Widow's Walk
©2015 Robert Randall Burke

Day after day
Down by the quay
She scans the horizon for canvas
A month overdue
Soon becomes two
Down on The Widow's Walk.

Tell her a tale
Of life under sail
And she'll tell you one about waiting
To hear a ship's bells'
Homecoming knells
Down on the Widow's Walk.

The fog is just lifting
As she strains to see
Just what her future will be
A month overdue
Soon becomes two
Down on The Widow's Walk.

Nicely done, Sir. Strong lyrically, good performance.

Here are my favorite parts of this, Bob:

Day after day
Down by the quay
She scans the horizon for canvas
A month overdue
Soon becomes two
Down on The Widow's Walk.

Tell her a tale
Of life under sail
And she'll tell you one about waiting
To hear a ship's bells'
Homecoming knells
Down on the Widow's Walk.

The fog is just lifting
As she strains to see
Just what her future will be
A month overdue
Soon becomes two
Down on The Widow's Walk.


Lyric writing simply does not get tighter than this. Such a WOW-factor.
The melody is beautiful, too.
The production is perfect for it.

The bar goes up again.

Killer.

floyd

I really like this. I think it is very artistic all the way around. Great sounds, warm, charming, and super lyrics.

I really love this song. It's got real hit potential in my humble opinion, but quay is pronounced 'key'. That would drive me nuts. Maybe you can change the first sentence to rhyme with key? Anyway love it. Nice voice. Its style reminds me of traditional English folk songs.

'Too close to the Moon' is also really beautiful as well.

One hell of a tune, yes to echo Floyd, this is some tight writing.

Congrats!

Bob,

Just beautiful... Great lyrics and outstanding vocal.

Bob

Bob, this is a great one. An economical set of lyrics that needs nothing more. It has the ring of an olde English sea shanty wrapped in a waltz. I love the melody. Bravo! Tom

Bob
Lovely folk feel - very pretty.
Nice lyric excellent vocal.
(Listened to both versions the guitar sounds much better to me in the uncompressed version.)

Hey Bob,

This is beautiful. The accompaniment is a great fit and, as floyd has already mentioned, lyric writing doesn't get any tighter than this. You sure know how to make 78 words work for you! This is definitely up there with the best!

Regards,
Noel

Nicely done Bob. A lyric that draws you in powerfully; with a perfect musical setting. Very enjoyable.

John

Paul,

Thanks for the kind remarks.I see your father worked with Marty Robbins. I knew his manager years ago.


Regards,

Bob

fj,

Thanks for listening and the nice comments. Appreciate it.


Regards,

Bob

David,

Thanks. Appreciate the listen.


Regards,

Bob

lambada,

Thanks for the comments. Actually, "quay" has several different pronounciations, if you study it's Etymology.


http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/quay


"Too Close To The Moon" is a Lawrence Oliver song.



Regards,

Bob

Danny,

Thanks for listening and commenting.

Regards,

Bob

Bob,

Thanks for the kind words. Hope you are well.



Regards,

Bob

Tommy,

My head is full of shanties. Past life maybe?

thanks for the kind comments.

Regards,

Bob

Peter,

Thanks. That's why I post WAV files in addition to the MP3's. I've had the same experience as you.


Regards,

Bob

Noel,

Thanks. Appreciate the kind words.

Regards,

Bob

John,

Thanks for the listen and comment.


Regards,

Bob

Awesome! Songwriting at it's best

Dave,

Thanks for listening and the kind comment.

Regards,

Bob

Sensational writing Bob, Master-Class for sure, However Floyd nailed it with his response, I couldn't come close.

Tremendous feel, and your melody, vocals and delivery sets the time and place so perfectly.

I need to say it again: "Master Class"

We liked Tom's description of your tune being a waltz sea shanty.

It's a lovely write. There is much more elegantly stated here in 78 words than
many could say in a couple of pages.

And for us it has the "wow quality" as when it's over we just look
at each other and smile and think YES!


Most excellent.

J&B

Hi, Bob !


I really loved this most beautiful
tune and performance !
I don´t really find the right words
for it but it awoke in me a kind of
longing to go back to Scotland again !
There was something Scottish in that
lovely tune, you know !:))

Great, just great Bob !

Cheers
Dani

Another great one Bob!! You have such a way with these melancholy songs-lyrics have just the right touch of sadness, and are neither too sparse or redundant. And, the music carries it perfectly. Your roll continues!! Take care. Greg

You're welcome, Bob. I'm a sucker for a good waltz.

My uncles, Tompall and the Glaser Brothers worked with Marty back in the late 50's.

Wonderful and rich. The strings come in at the perfect moment.

Great write and super arrangement.

Wow Bob.... that was scary good! I like the way you arrange your songs. Truly, you are a music professional.

Trevor,

Thanks for the kind words.


Regards,

Bob

J&B,

Thanks. I love a sea shanty...Argghhhhh!!!!!!!!!!


Regards,


Bob

Dani,

I'm half Scot, so it's in my blood. Thanks for the kind remarks.


Regards,

Bob

Greg,

Thanks for the listen and comments. Appreciate it.


Regards,

Bob

Lawrence,

Thanks. Love your new one!


Regards,

Bob

Pat,

Thanks for the kind remarks.


Regards,

Bob

Good lyrics, beautiful melody, well sung!

Bob,
I enjoyed your clear measured vocal & the images in the lyric - as others have said , there`s not a word wasted... nice that the last verse leaves the outcome of her waiting uncertain.
Robert

Another concise masterpiece. Enjoyed this from start to finish.

Rob and Anne-Marie,

Thanks for listening and the kind comments.

Regards,

Bob

Robert,

Thanks. Appreciate the kind remarks.

Regards,

Bob

Charlie,

Thanks for listening and commenting. Hope you are staying frosty!


Regards,

Bob

Beautiful song. Love the feel of the waltz. Excellent lyric and vocal

Scott,

Thanks for listening and commenting.

Regards,

Bob