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[link no longer valid] V2 based on suggestions.
Re tracked vocals, added a new guitar or two to the "solo" section and moved the synths around a bit.
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I step further along...I had a comment elsewhere that it was all a little brittle and lacked low mids and low end. I was using some one's mixing template & it had low shelf roll off on almost everything. I changed that aspect as well as putting some oomph into the bass to compensate fro playing up the neck.
WARMER?
I'm not entirely sure I'm keen on this mix becasue I was aiming for aJoy Division feel. Oh, I've removed all reverb.
A built this song from the ground up in BIAB.
Remaining BIAB elements are the drums and two synths.
I've added guitars, guitar synths, (Mel9), bass and a sketch vocal to those two.
BIAB enabled me to stretch and shrink the time, shuffle the structure and get arrangement ideas.
It's a bit like Howard Devoto dragging the newly decapitated Joy Division into the studio for a disaster session.
I've not used an amp for this as yet...amp in a box pedals have been used for the sketch.
Your suggestions are eagerly anticipated.
Lyrics thus far...tweaked as well...

We wrote of it in letters 7
We spoke of it in disguise 7
The truth is somewhere between us 8
7

You spoke of it in whispers 7
They spoke of it in lies 7
The truth is somewhere between them 8
7

It’s another crime 5
This is another crime 6
It’s another time 5
This is the another time 6
Words won’t do 3
Word won’t do 3
Words won’t do 3
What they’re supposed to do 6

They spoke of it in whispers 7
You didn’t realize 6
The truth is somewhere between them 8
7

I’ve spoke of it in letters 7
I didn’t recognize 7
The truth is I am between us 8
Words that pass between our eyes 7

It’s another lie 5
No need to even try 6
It’s another lie 5
They seem to multiple 6
Lies won’t do 3
Lies won’t do 3
Lies won’t do 3
As the doubts accrue 5

Solo

It’s another crime 5
This is a pantomime 6
It’s another time 5
& we’ll be real sometime 6
Words won’t do 3
Lying too 3
Words won’t do 3
What I want them to 5

It’s another crime 5
This is another crime 6
It’s another time 5
This is another time 6
Words won’t do 3
Words won’t do 3
Lying too 3
Between me & you

Last edited by Andrew - PG Music; 09/08/20 08:22 AM.
Cheers
rayc
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