Mike LeBlanc, my pal from Louisiana contacted me and said he thought his new gloomy lyric was right up my street.
I was flattered (in a way).

Changed a couple of lines and did the music on BIAB. I think it turned out the right side of gloomy Americana.
What do you think?

Bass: 2877,
Drums: Americana roots, Americana funky whip brush
Guitars: 2552,2553,3756
Fiddle:3152

https://on.soundcloud.com/5oVFr

Deathbed Confession © 2023 LeBlanc & Arnold
V1
I have a lot of yesterdays
But my tomorrows wearing thin
So there's something i need to say
Come up close and lean on in
Something i have held inside
That's been haunting me for years
Something to easily steal my pride
And bring you hurt and tears
Ch. 1
But then i wonder if it matters
Should i keep these words
in my soul's possession
Don't want to change forever after
by my deathbed confession
V2
I see the angels swirling
And the light is growing dim
Please hold my hands and listen darling
For my time is at its end
Forgive me not for what i say
Have no mercy on your breath
For i have sinned but come what may
I'll will still love you beyond death
Ch.2
And all our tears and all our laughter
were our mind's and heart's obsession,
so i pray that you'll still love me
after my deathbed confession

I was compelled to click by the title and I enjoyed the song. Nice arrangement and vocals and I like that we never actually get to know the juicy details of the confession.

Excellent lyric! And excellent vocal too, you have such an expressive voice.

One of the guitars seems a bit busy to me, to my ears it is taking away from the vocal. Maybe pan it a bit more to give the vocal more space? Or drop it down a little.

But yeah, another cool song, Vic. I'm a fan!

Vic,
Nice dark lyrics & good vocals. When I read notes & lyrics, I thought it would be darker, but arrangement made it incline in a slightly different direction, which actually worked very well. Enjoyed it and thank you for sharing.

Misha.

Hi Joe.
Thanks for the listen and comment.
Yes, we'll never know the ending. Does he or doesn't he?


Vic

Pretty good lyrics, and you made a nice song out of it.
The guitars are a bit too busy for my taste, I would have preferred more sustained notes. But it's also good the way it is now.

'I have a lot of yesterdays but my tomorrows wearing thin' is something I would never have thought of (as a non-native speaker).
Excellent

Vic

Good song, evocative. Nicely sung and produced.

Very good story telling.

Peter

Thanks Dave. I have spread the panning again and reduced the gain a couple of db on those guitars.

Vic

I had an argument with myself as to whether there's an apostrophe needed in the 2nd line. It rather depends upon the listener's interpretation I suppose.
The narrative does leave me unsatisfied - I think that' a good thing but still a tease.
Well written & well realized.

Vic, this is a very captivating song. I hung on every word.
Super concept and execution.
You vocal was perfect for this setting.
I had no problem with the guitars.
Great mix.

Hi Misha.
Thank you. I like to confuse the emotions.

Vic

Mr. Thomas.
You cut me deep. Those busy guitars were what initially got me to choose that basic style.
They were a foil to the dark lyrics, I thought, but thank you for your thoughts on it.

Where are you a native of?

Vic

HA! I actually laughed out loud reading "I was flattered (in a way)." Mike's lyrics are perfect. I love how there is actually no confession. Of course, your vocals are the master salesman for this song, and I like the melody you gave those lyrics. Well done.

Thank you Peter.

Mike has an interesting imagination.
I've put quite a few of his lyrics to music.

Vic

Hi Ray.
I would never argue over an apostrophe but in this case I suppose it could have said, "I have a lot of yesterdays but my tomorrows are worn thin", but the poor man is too short on time and education for grammar corrections. Have mercy.

Thanks for the nice comment.

Vic

Thanks Mario.
I hope it's a better mix now than when I started

Vic

Nicely done Vic. Your vocals and the band do each other justice.
And the lyrics leave us pondering what our confession(s) might be.

The whole package works well. Melody, instrumentation, vocal, and lyric all fit together and make a good impression on my ears and mind.

Hey Vic...really nice...smart, relatable and well written lyrics...they had a very nice flow inside your excellent melody...I especially like the tempo and the cadence of your vocal...you excel vocally in this groove but then again you composed the melody and it's in your wheelhouse! I always enjoy your productions and style choices!

Hi Marty.
You’re very kind. Thank you.

Vic

A thought-provoking song and a very solid write.

I like it.

Thanks Steve.
Mike did good to leave it hanging.

Vic

That's good to know. Thank you sir.

Vic

Don't worry, as I wrote, I like the song as it is now too

I'm from Germany and I write my lyrics in English.
Sometimes that's not a wise decision

Hi, Vic:

Michael writes some great lyrics and it’s good to see a collaboration from him. I’m sure your additions only added to this terrific write. I’m listening to the latest version and it all sounds pretty balanced to me on the mix. On the write, I love the open-ended aspect of this. Some of the best poems and lyrics for me had a story behind the story . . . something unresolved that keeps the reader/listener thinking thereafter. This one does that. I’m torn on whether the tone of the lead guitar fits (e.g., starting at around 1:28) . . . scrolling through no one else mentions it, so likely just a me thing. Excellent tune, Vic—impressive collaboration!

My best to you both,

Deej

Hi Firesong.
Thank you.
Much appreciated.


Vic

Thanks again B.D.
Yes, I would also find it difficult writing in another language.

Vic

Thank you Scott.

Vic

Hi Deej.
Yes, Mike is imaginative in his writing. He sent me the lyric and said, “Just do your thing on it”.
I did think a lot about the guitar part you mentioned. I tried a mandolin and then a fiddle but it sounded too bluegrassy. I wanted that crossover sound. Hence the guitar.

Thanks as always.
Vic

Vic,

I like the sound of the BAND.
Vocals are good.

An interesting write.

fj

Thank you Floyd.
Yes, thought provoking I would say.

Vic

Haunting song, sort of primitive music, traditional but with a modern touch. The picking guitar and the drums create hypnotic surroundings for the mysterious confession, the soulful vocal carries the story. Other instruments are selected very well, I especially like that solo guitar. Everything is packed into a very pleasant listening experience.

Janne

Thank you Janne. You are very kind.

Vic

Vic, I really like the double time feel of this one. The lyrics kept me engaged. Good one, Tom

Excellent bit of Americana. Like rayc, I agree it's a bit of a tease not to know what the confession was... And the right choice to leave it out, as well. Good write and presentation.

Thank you Tom.

Vic

Thanks David.
Yes, some stories are best left to the imagination.

Vic

“I have a lot of yesterdays
But my tomorrows wearing thin
So there's something i need to say
Come up close and lean on in”

It had us hooked from the first lines. The eternal optimist Janice decided that he kept the secret to himself.

Your melody and vocal fit the lyric so well and we can see the dark room and the deathbed vigil vividly. We enjoyed the band and the fiddle especially.

Good collab!

J&B

Hi Vircan,

Very engaging melody, very well written lyrics. I love the lead guitar and your voice transcribes the lyrics well. I appreciated.

Kindly regard
Derochette
alias JaniJackFlash

Thank you J&B.
I’m happy we reeled you in.

Vic

Hi Janne
Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed it.

Vic