Title: Revenge Song

Link: Revenge Song

The idea for the song came to me after watching the movie "Blues Brothers" again.
There is a running gag with this girl trying to kill Jake Blues in several bizarre attempts.
I know a girl who behaved (more or less, minus the killing) similarly after a good friend of mine left her.

Come to think of it, this could be part 2 of my last song, but the girl is no longer begging for "One More Time", she's starting to get serious.

The idea: make it loud and dirty
The result: it's loud and dirty

Feedback, good or bad, is as always very welcome.

Some background information:

• apologies to Liam Neeson for the "Taken" quote. But the opportunity was just too tempting.
• additional apologies go to my compatriot Johann Pachelbel. I hope the chorus doesn't hurt him too much...
• a final apology to everyone for the overuse of the F-word. Believe me, I don't like this either.
  But this f*cking girl really f*cked my friend's best friend and his sister. She told me herself.
• before you ask: no, I'm still happily married
• with a little nudging, forcing and swearing you can do amazing things with guitar RealTracks

F-word usage approved by Marty. Thanks my friend

Some technical information:
Style: _TINES.STY

The band:
Drums: PraiseWorshipUptempo16
Bass: 4363 (re-amped)
Guitars: (some re-amped)
4388
4386
4387
4385
4383
2x 3931
3738
3435
Piano: 894
Vocals: Natalie with BG vocals from Solaria and Cong.

You can find the lyrics in the next post.

Title: Revenge Song

Verse 1:
Don't look back, I won't follow
I don't need you, I don't want you anymore
I'm just so angry, so f*cking angry
the things I'd like to do to you
are getting more and more

Chorus 1:
Stab you, cut you, kick your balls,
staple you to a wall,
burn your house and wreck your car,
beat you with my bass guitar.
F*ck your best friend and your sister,
be in general sinister,
be the nightmare of your life.
Sincerely, your no-more loving wife.

Verse 2:
I'll call my boss and tell him that his lovely wife
is leading a double life with you.
He will hate you
he will look for you
and he will find you
and will kill you
kill you

Chorus 2:
Stab you, cut you, kick your balls,
staple you to a wall
burn your house and wreck your car
beat you with my bass guitar.
F*ck your best friend and your sister
be in general sinister
be the nightmare of your life
haunting you forever

Bridge:
I'll be your nightmare
I'll be your Boogeyman
And I'll hurt you ... again and again and again and again
I'll be the pain inside your head
I'll be in your dreams
and I'll f*ck with your mind
till the end time

Chorus 3:
Stab you, cut you, kick your balls,
staple you to a wall
burn your house and wreck your car
beat you with my bass guitar.
F*ck your best friend and your sister
be in general sinister
be the nightmare of your life
sincerely, your no-more loving wife,
former wife

Chorus 4:
Stab you, cut you, kick your balls,
staple you to a wall
burn your house and wreck your car
beat you with my bass guitar.
F*ck your best friend and your sister
be in general sinister
be the nightmare of your life
sincerely, your no-more loving wife

That's quite the creative endeavor.

Musically it's tight and checks all the right boxes.
Lyrically.... It's creative as fu..... Well.... Yeah. I like it.

She sounds like someone I'd want to avoid in real life.

I really like this song. Well done. You show what is possible.

Hello B.D.
Good song
Great intro and ending
Natalie sings the lyrics unfortunately quite shy,
but it still sounds nice
Good work
Many greetings
Andi ;-)

Powerful and easily entertaining pop song. Great start with Natalie's low voice. She sounds good for the angry message, her vibrato has sort of repressed malicious hatred, good work! Maybe her voice could be made even more wicked sounding? The F word doesn't bother me, the story needs straightforward emotional eruption. Also funny like in "burn your house and wreck your car/beat you with my bass guitar".

Very nice dynamical differences between the verses & bridge and the chorus. The band is strong, I like the guitars and the piano playing together.

Catchy chorus, I really like the chord progression.

Janne

Thanks Herb, I really appreciate your feedback.
I have really known her for a long time and she is actually a calm and even-tempered person.
I think in this case a fuse just blew. When a woman really loves, anything can happen.
And he deserved some hate.

Man, she is not someone I would want to mess with!

Absolutely top notch production on this, sounds great through the phones.

Great song despite all the F-Bombs!

I love that "Blues Brothers" movie BTW, watched it many times.

Good stuff, enjoyed.

Thanks Andi for listening and your nice feedback.
Greetings back from Germany

She's a bass player? No wonder she's angry. 'Cause bass players are just wannabe lead guitarists, right?

Nice work all around, it's just too bad the SynthV angry female rock vocalist isn't there. Yet.

From a songwriting perspective, I think cursing once or twice is works, but past that, it seems to lose impact and feels ineffective.

B.D.

Strong stuff. Start to finish.
A strong write.
A Super Strong Production. Really well done. A lot of Punch.
Excellent mix.

I just keeps getting better. Top Shelf.

fj

HAHA! After our lengthy discussions, that is your only takeaway? Truth is I approved everything, but I only insisted on one thing: Beat with my bass guitar --a much more formidable weapon. When I "proof" your lyrics the only thing I can do is look for typos or spelling errors.

So what I enjoy most is the preview of your song. This one is crazy good, which is the perfect feel for such a crazy gal. You do an incredible job with synth voices. Natalie is really quite versatile --AND she chose the 6-string bass for her weapon of choice. I really like the dynamics you incorporate in this gem. BD. Well done!

I enjoyed it but became stuck on sister/sinister each time it appeared.
The bridge is very Radiohead Creep.
I like the passive voice amidst louder rock & angry words.
It rocks well Norman!

B.D.
Very informative song
Good arrangement and mix! Excellent job on putting it all together. The only thing, vocals are too "angelic", need some sort of punk/grunge treatment. Distortion?
Thank you for sharing.

Misha.

Yikes! We don’t wanna mess with that girl.

The band and Natalie convincingly make us feel the smoldering heat from her anger.

Bud, being an upright bass player, said well at least hers wasn't as big as a couch!

Kudos!

J&B

P.S. You can’t go wrong with the Blues Brothers.

B.D.,

That's great stuff! What an excellent production.

Much enjoyed!

Bob

Thanks Janne, I really appreciate your feedback.
Sounding wicked is difficult, I already added some distortion in some places to make it more gritty, but what I would need is some growl (think Pink (the singer)), but that's not possible (yet).

Yeah, that's how bass guitarists are sometimes
Thanks for listening and your feedback, Dave. Much appreciated!

Super groove with great dynamics.
Great vocal and vocal effects - you are a master of synth vocals.
Two thumbs up.

PS - Please keep her away from me!

Nope, bass players hold it all together and make the band look good.
Ask Marty!


I think you're basically right. But I released a song a few weeks ago, and the publisher required that the "Explicit" box be checked for only one swear word, and that was at the end of the song, so most listeners will never hear it.
So I figured, "If I HAVE to check that box, I at least want it to be worth it"

Thanks for stopping by, David. Your feedback is always highly appreciated

Thank you, Floyd, for listening and your encouraging words.
I appreciate it very much!

Thanks Marty.
In my opinion, a real bass has 4 strings, not more.
But no matter how many strings it has, it is a formidable weapon when used properly

Thanks for listening, Ray. As always, your feedback is highly appreciated.

I your sister / sinister problem sematic or because of the timing?
If the latter, it's intentional so you don't fall asleep. You automatically focus on this instead of dozing off with the song.

In the first version of the song, it was right on the beat, but when you throw it off beat, and differently each time, it gives it the uneven/unsteady feel I wanted.
My wife doesn't like it either, so you're in good company

PS: "It rocks good, Norman!": I guess that's another reference I'm too young for. Or is that an Australian thing?

Thanks for listening and your feedback, Misha. I really appreciate it, and agree with your findings.
As I wrote above, there is already some distortion, but adding more doesn't create the effect I and you would like to hear.
I'm already testing different things, but they need time to be implemented properly.
Stay tuned

My personal survival recipe: never mess with any girl

Thanks J&B for listening and the nice feedback.
I didn't know Bud played an upright. Cool!
But in an infight situation, the regular bass would be my weapon of choice, it's more versatile.

B,D,

I didn't know you had met my former girlfriend. That's why she was (she passed away a few years ago) an ex.

You always amaze me with your skills for the Synth voices. I downloaded the basic program but still haven't figured out very much about using it.

Yep ... that's revenge for sure!

A most entertaining listen! You do good work.

Alan

Thanks for your feedback, Bob. Glad you like it

Thanks Mario, glad you like it.
No need to worry, she's in a box.
Just like the rest of the band

B.D.Thomas,

That poor gal certainly has some issues to deal with!The dynamics of this keep the listener engaged all the way! You've got a great sounding mix! You are a really good arranger and producer!

Thanks, TB

Very cool song BD. Loved the video. Incredible way to bring your lyrics to life. Bassline were excellent. Super backtrack. Really well done..

[So I am halfway healthy again and can continue where I left off before. Sorry for the delay...]


Thanks Alan for your nice feedback. I guess everyone knows (or knew) a girl like this.
Synth voices are actually not that hard to master, it's like any other instrument, you learn by doing.

I like the contrast between the verse and chorus. Vocal fits verse quite well, but needs more balls for the chorus. Is there a "balls" setting for the synth vocals. Catchy tune!

B.D.,

Gosh, I could have sworn I commented on this one already . . guess not. Must have listened to it earlier . . . but at any rate, it’s an excellent effort . , , outstanding arrangement and production. You really do wonders with the vocaloid. Very cool listen . . . nice stops and starts throughout that really add to the power of the tune. Outstanding!

That said, I think she would benefit from some extensive counseling, LOL!

All my best,

Deej

Thanks Torrey for listening and your feedback.
Knowing how good your own productions are, that means a lot to me

Thanks Scott for listening and your positive feedback, I really appreciate it!

A good rock song, very effective.

Well produced throughout and some excellent dynamics.

Good stuff.

Peter

"It rocks good, Norman!"
Rocks well
Norman Rockwell
"Norman Percevel Rockwell was an American painter and illustrator. His works have a broad popular appeal in the United States for their reflection of the country's culture."
Poor puns from this old man.

Unfortunately, the female synth singers lack an "balls" setting
But I agree, and after listening to some isolated vocals from Pink (the singer), I have a pretty good idea how to change that in the future.
Thanks for listening and your great feedback, ES. I really appreciate it.

Thanks Deej for listening and your comment, I really appreciate it!