https://soundcloud.com/tanomusic/screen-talk

This started by playing around with style _JFMOVNF...jazz/funk moving. Created some chords. Let BIAB suggest a melody. THen moved it over to RB, filled it in with some add'l RT's. Came up with idea/lyric after all music was in place:

RealTracks in style: 1769:Bass, Fretless Electric, JazzFunkMovin Ev16 130
RealTracks in style: 1772:Piano, Electric, Rhythm JazzFunkMovin Ev16 130
RealTracks in style: 1770:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm JazzFunkMovinChords Ev16 130
RealTracks in style: 1771:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm JazzFunkMovinMuted Ev16 130
RealTracks in song: 1650:Guitar, Electric, Soloist JazzFunkGroovin Ev16 110
RealDrums in style: JazzFunkMovin^1-a:SideStick, HiHat , b:Snare, HiHat
Also:
1260 Guitar Solo
RD: LAPopJazzSamba
1056 Sax Solo
Added midi perc/pads
Pasted in girl's voice

Appreciate any comments!!

Tano,

Cool sound. Great tracks, well mixed. And an interesting idea/lyric. There are a number of places in the lyric where there are words that you could "drop" without changing the meaning at all - and make the lyric "sing" more. Since you did not post a lyric, it's hard to remember exactly where/what they were...

floyd

Thanks Floyd, I agree..I'd like to simplify the lyric in spots, without changing the meaning...I'm sure a fresh pair of eyes can give me some great ideas..thanks for the comments and input!


"Screen Talk"

In the dark of night
I scan the global sea
I'm searching every little moment
In the hopes that I might find someone
Drifting traveler who'll echo me.
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Every lonely night
Out on the virtual sea
I'm surfing every little moment
And I hope I can rescue someone--
And that someone can rescue me.
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As I'm cruising in the endless space
Out of darkness pops a friendly face
A gentle smile and velvet hair
Is she really there?
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It's a non-stop flight
To one specific bay
I'm spending every little moment
Where I know I will meet my someone.
Lovely stranger from far away.
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And I find that I'm reaching for her image..I touch it
Nothing there to warm me but the cool of the glass
She knows just what I mean
Smiling there on my screen
But am I falling for a phantom
Tell me she's real.
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Since we started we've been pouring out
'Cross the lines we feel each other out
But then I have to I stop and stare
Is she really there?
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In the dark of night
I dash across the sea
I'm loving every little moment
To the arms of my special someone.
Phantom lover who echoes me.
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And I find that I'm reaching for her image..I touch it
Nothing there to warm me but the cool of the glass
Really like what I've seen
Chatting there on the screen
But am I falling for a phantom
Tell me she's real.
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To the arms of my special someone.
Phantom lover who echoes me.
(repeat)

BTW.. love the whispers.

You have a PM

floyd

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Cool sound. Great tracks, well mixed. And an interesting idea/lyric.

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Guenter