Hey Ya'll,
Here's a ballad I wrote a few weeks ago. Written in BIAB, recorded in RB and mixed in Tracktion.
I Can't Be Your Friend Realtracks used:
Bass 1827
PopMod Drums
E. Piano 910
Pad 1842
Ac Piano 1839
Sax 1643
El. Guitars 1537, 1538, 1834
Hope you enjoy.
All comments welcome.
Josie,
That there's some fine song writin'! Really like the vocal as well. The sax works great too.
Nice Job!
Greg
Hi Josie,
What a great song!!! As I listened, images of Karen Carpenter kept floating around inside my head. I couldn't get rid of them! I'm a huge Carpenters fan and this is exactly the kind of song she'd have sung. In addition, your performance has the quality of her singing. Wow! I'm incredibly impressed.
Best regards,
Noel
P.S. I loved the metaphor "quicksand of old feelings" - it releases a flood of images and feelings about the situation!
Lovely ballad Josie!
Great lyrics and your voice is just perfect for the song.
Excellent choice of tracks and the Sax solo and infills are just SO right.
As Noel said - "I'm incredibly impressed".
cheers
Ian
Josie,
Cool opening - all those oohs. The e. piano was a great choice for the song - no one uses them much - at least here in the showcase. All the tracks were nice, actually. The pad was very effective. And the sax was tasty.
The melody had a very cool Smokey R vibe to it (I think I may have said that about something else you did) - certainly not a bad way to go...
The last verse was quite strong.
floyd
As Noel96 says a touch of the Carpenters, and I say mixed with Carly Simon and that is just your vocals.......
I think this is teh best yet from Josie, but it has stiff competition.
Alyn
Hi Josie.
You just broke my heart with your song! So sad, but so beautiful.
ROG.
Hi Josie,
what an expressive voice. You couldn't do that with Avanna.
Beautiful instrumentation.
I like the background vocals in the beginning.
It's a pity there aren't more of them.
Guenter
Josie,
I think this is your best yet. Your vocals really shine in this one. And you did a very nice job with the mix.
Really like this one.
Steve
Excellent song, and your vocal is remarkable. thanks for sharing!
A Supremes ballad style immediately comes to mind (and that's admirable). Instruments and mix offer ideal backing for the whole vibe. Nice effort. Thanks for posting.
Greg, Noel, Ian, Floyd, Alyn, ROG, Guenter, Steve, Robert, and Bud,
Thank each of you very much for taking the time to listen and your comments.
We have such a diverse and talented group here. I appreciate all of you.
As the others have said, this is a really lovely tune.
As a piano player, I can't help noticing the chord change clipping in both the piano and electric piano patches. (This is probably still the #1 biggest weakness w/ BIAB in general that I hear) You might consider using midi tracks and sample tank, especially w/ the e piano as there's some really nice midi e piano patches. BIAB does a decent job switching chords, and I'm sure lot's of folks wouldn't even notice. But to my ears this is the one thing that's holding your track back from sounding truly pro.
Really nice tune.
Peace,
Ian
Well done Josie. Very nice.
Regards,
Bob
Hey Josie -
Damn, I wish I had your intonation. You can really nail them notes girl.
Aleck
Who said Josie only writes and sings country songs? Well, no one, but if there was ever a doubt this pop ballad dispels any and all of those thoughts.
As much as I liked the song I could not stop thinking that even though I know fully well you wrote this song from a girl's point of view, that with a tweak of the lyric the same message this could be a great song from a "guy's" point as well. Hey maybe this could be one of those songs that could be "answered" from a guy's point of view.
OK, I'll stop rambling, very good song, equally as good performance.
Later,
hi josie great vocal realy enjoyed this also great job with band in the box thanks for sharing eric
Ian, thank you. I am still basically a midiot and without the RT's I'd be lost.
Bob, thank you. Your song "Carolina Girl" is still an earworm that won't stay out of my head.
Thank you, Aleck.
Danny, I started out writing pop in Nashville then made the switch to country - left me with a split music personality like Dr. Jekylette and Miss Heidi but both are fun. Seriously, thank you.
Joanne, thank you.
Thank you Eric.
Hey Josie,
very nice song and performance! I echo the Carpenters comparison to some extent... but you have your own style and therefore you can't really be squished into a cubbyhole with any other female vocalist.
at the 1:48 marker I thought strings entered the equation... but your list of instruments doesn't include strings... so I assume that was the pad you have listed?? (whatever it was, I liked it a lot.)
I also like your lyrical development of not being able to remain friends after having been more.
(which prompts me to ask: How *IS* love supposed to end?)
anyway, if toes could double as thumbs, I'd give this 4 thumbs up!
Thank you Pat. Much appreciated.
(answer - happily ever after.)
Hi, Josie !
I like your song very much though the
words make me sad ! Reminds me that
people should be much more responsible
in their realtionships ! I had no problem
in being married to my dear late wife for 42 years
and I have no problem in staying true to her
for the rest of my life !
Cheers
Dani
Your choice of instrumentation and chord progression are very lush and smooth and I think fit the lyrics perfectly! and your vocal was warm and worked well too!
much enjoyed
I really like this Josie. A perfect vocal.
Congratulations on an excellent composition.
Excellent, as always, Josie! Thanks for posting.
Josie,
I don't what what I'm envious of: your writing, performance, or production. You really are a master. Thanks for sharing.
SD
This really suits your style all the way around. I enjoyed listening.