Hi. Redone this one from 50/90.

https://soundcloud.com/tuigorge/crystal-heart

Style - SIMPORK4 - orchestral
Drums - Rock ev 16
Violin - RT 2338

Hope you enjoy it. All comments welcome.
Cheers.


Crystal Heart

Opal clouds em-brace the stars Bursting flowers shattered vase
Clouds of mystery cloak the sun-rise Unicorns be-fore my eyes

If you're not with me I'm not here Savage shadows feed cold fear
Re-flected rainbows need you near Forever

Crystal Heart clear and shining Crystal Heart never blue
Crystal Heart warm and wondring Longing just for you

Lovers laugh and fly like doves Cold steel hides in velvet gloves
Shall we join the celebration Shiny shoes and pink carnation

If you're not with me I'm not here Savage shadows feed cold fear
Re-flected rainbows need you near For--ever

Crystal Heart clear and shining Crystal Heart never blue
Crystal Heart warm and wondring Longing just for you
Longing just for you

My 50/90 effort fizzled out after the first moth or so, did you keep going? Since I missed this one the first time around, I thought I should give a listen. Nice music and interesting storyline -- I enjoyed my morning listen.

Hi Rich,

and again you're painting interesting
pictures with your words.
Nice arrangement.
I enjoyed my listen.

Guenter

Rich,
I read the words first, you are a poet putting his words to music.

Great stuff Rich

Alyn

Hi Rich,
You write some very interesting lyrics. I agree with Guenter and Alyn. I enjoyed your song.
Sonny

Nice chords line and lyrics you created.
I like your song.

Sergio

I agree with everything that has been said thus far, especially Alyn's poet putting music to his poetry comment.

Very nice!

Hi Kevin. Thanks for the listen and comments.
I battled on to the end of 50/90 using Graheme Cochran's advice.
I think it was him. Don't try to write really good songs, just write songs.
Hopefully they will improve with time, rewrites and tweaking.
I have a hell of a lot of tweaking to do! Cheers.

Richard,

I like the sound of this. A fairly big sounding production from a very small number of instruments.

Not sure what the lyric is trying to convey - but some cool word combinations.

floyd

Nice job RichMac!! You are certainly one of the most creative and colorful lyricists on the forum. Arrangement is very different but I really like it. A pleasure to listen to! Take care. Greg

Hi Richard,

There are terrific phrases in the lyrics... very inspired, indeed. Things like... "clouds of mystery cloak the sunrise" .... "savage shadows" ... "cold steel hides in velvet gloves", etc. These are such fantastic images. I'm not quite sure how they relate to the whole but it's very inventive writing.

If ever you revisit this, I would try singing the lyrics against a swing style. To my ears, it sounded like you were singing in a swing 8-beat and the drums were playing an even 8-beat. I found myself wondering what it would sound like if vocal rhythm and drum rhythm matched.... I simply pass the thought on for what it's worth. Please feel completely free to ignore.

Overall... another inventive listen!

All the best,
Noel

Hi Guenter. Thanks for the comment about painting pictures.
This one's about feelings. Cheers.

Thanks Alyn. Not much of a poet i'm afraid but I enjoy jamming words together. Cheers.

I enjoyed the song and getting lost in the lyrics. You are very innovative with your lyrics and music.

Charlie

Thanks Sonny. I'm glad you enjoyed this. It's a bit new agey. Cheers.

Hi Sergio. Thanks for liking the song. I'm actually quite pleased with it. Cheers.

Hi Mario. Thanks for the nice comments.
It's certainly fun to do something a bit abstract now and then. Cheers.

Hi Rich,

Nice style! We're going to try that one.
Good lyrics and melody.

Rob and Anne-Marie

Hi Floyd.
Well it's feelings rather than a story. A bit abstract.
The verse and prechorus (if that's what it is) contemplate different aspects of a relationship.
With some joy and some misgivings.
The chorus reaffirms the purity and strength of the relationship. I sort of felt it being an interlude in a rock opera. The male lead singing the verse and prechorus and massive chorus and orchestra thundering the chorus. Crystal Heart is the female lead. That's about it.
Thanks for having a listen and for making me consider what it was about. Cheers.

Richard, You most certainly are a poet. Sometimes we have to look back at our creations to find deeper meanings. It's part of the magic of creative songwriting. This one has some very good lines in it. I enjoyed it. Tom

"Cold steel hides in velvet gloves"

Ain't it the truth? Beware the pitfalls, indeed.

I've oft stated that we like writes that require
some listener dot connecting. And this one
fits that bill for sure IMO.

Enjoyed the listen and the afterward contemplating.

J&B

Thank you Greg for the kind words and especially for enjoying this. Cheers.

Thanks Noel. You are always so perceptive. This one's more intuition than intellect.
Can only repeat my attempted explanation to Floyd.

"Well it's feelings rather than a story. A bit abstract.
The verse and prechorus (if that's what it is) contemplate different aspects of a relationship.
With some joy and some misgivings.
The chorus reaffirms the purity and strength of the relationship. I sort of felt it being an interlude in a rock opera. The male lead singing the verse and prechorus and massive chorus and orchestra thundering the chorus. Crystal Heart is the female lead. That's about it."

Tried a few swing styles and couldn't find a fit at all.
The vocal accents are mostly on the weak beats 2 and 4 of the bar in the chorus (which still feels stable)
and in between beats most other places (unstable). Thanks for your thoughts. Very interesting.

But I dunno - it's all pretty much what I wanted. Cheers.

Hi Charlie. Glad you enjoyed getting lost in the lyrics. Maybe i did too. Cheers.

Thanks RnAM. Don't think I tried that style before. Glad you enjoyed it. Cheers.

Hi Tom. Glad you enjoyed it. I usually don't analyze much. Just spit it out and move on.
Appreciate your comments though. Cheers.

Hi J&B. "Cold steel hides in velvet gloves" was a reference to 40 shades of grey.
Thanks for your comments. Cheers.