Things You Didn`t Say

Posted by: Robertkc

Things You Didn`t Say - 08/10/16 05:16 PM

https://soundcloud.com/user-564042721/things-you-didnt-say

About as close to a rock song as I`ve done so far, this was written 20yrs ago but had a redo after I began listening to the Waterboys. I tried to get close to their great wild fiddle folkrock sound here.
This forum has been very helpful to me... your comments are welcomed!

Style is _NRTRKSW.STY (Northern Rock Swing 8ths)


Things You Didn`t Say
( Robert Cordrey, April 2016)

you were a dark horse on a good day
a black sheep on the rest
its too late to learn
too late to learn

I watched you from the barricades
ride back into the flames
I felt you burn
I felt you burn

I was painting the rainbow
when you shot the waterfall
I saw you turn
I saw you turn

you became a poem
the blazing ember of a day
so I became the poet
of the things you didn`t say

my heart was racing
reading Dharma Bums
I heard you cry
I heard you cry

from your lockup in Tangier
flying too close to the sun
I closed your eyes
I closed your eyes

you became the moon
your shadow falls far away
that`s how I found the box
of the things you didn`t say

you became a poem
the blazing ember of a day
so I became the poet
of the things you didn`t say
Posted by: boehm

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/11/16 08:11 AM

Hi Robert,

nice song.
Enjoyable listen.

Guenter
Posted by: Robertkc

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/12/16 07:42 AM

Thank you, Guenter
Posted by: Charlie Fogle

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/12/16 06:48 PM

This is quite nice. Americana in style which I enjoy a lot.

Enjoyed my listen.

Charlie
Posted by: Robertkc

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/13/16 09:43 AM

Thanks for listening, Charlie
Posted by: Janice & Bud

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/13/16 02:45 PM

Nice write and arrangement all wrapped up in an Americana production. Americana has become a large tent and captures a lot of good music now days. You are in good company.

We enjoyed it!

J&B
Posted by: rsdean

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/13/16 03:35 PM

Robert,

Very cool song and sound. As the others have said, this fits in very nicely with the Americana genre - enjoyed it.

Bob
Posted by: Robertkc

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/14/16 09:50 AM

Bob, Janice & Bud - Many thanks for listening and glad you enjoyed the song!
I`ve just had a read on Wikipedia about Americana... not really knowing the term it seems I`ve been listening to the genre for most of my life . Many of my favourite artists are in that bag, and now I get how trying to sound like an Irish folk rock group could fit in there.

Robert
Posted by: Greg Johnson

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/21/16 05:29 PM

Very well written and delivered!! Really interesting lyrics-reminds me of the 60's/70's writers I love so much. I like the vocal processing. Nice job!! Take care. Greg
Posted by: Noel96

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/21/16 05:53 PM

Hi Robert,

A very confident presentation indeed. I like the harmony. One thing is for sure, you have a great ability to create very visual phrases. That's quite a skill you have!

All the best,
Noel
Posted by: David Snyder

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/22/16 04:54 AM

I love these lyrics. Great music too! Very well mixed. A truly enjoyable listen.
Posted by: Robertkc

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/22/16 09:54 AM

Thanks very much, Greg.
No matter how much I listen to current music I`m forever stuck hearing and no doubt trying to recreate the songs of back then... why fight it!

Robert
Posted by: Robertkc

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/22/16 09:59 AM

Thanks Noel,
I had fun with the vocals on this ... a bit out of my comfort zone so I`m glad the result sounds confident.
I credit a lifelong reading habit for any lyrical ability... and disguising sources, of course!

Robert
Posted by: Robertkc

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/22/16 10:03 AM

David,
Thanks for your kind comments - the mixing part is getting a bit easier.

Robert
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/22/16 02:30 PM

"...the box
of the things you didn`t say"

A very interesting lyric all the way through., Robert.

And a good sound to wrap it in.

fj
Posted by: Robertkc

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/23/16 10:33 AM

Thanks for the listen, Floyd - glad it held your interest.
Robert
Posted by: Alyssa - PG Music

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/31/16 02:53 PM

Great song Robert! Incredibly powerful lyrics. I'm just dying to hear them darker, over a slow bluesy accompaniment. Maybe something with a harmonica soloist? You know, the kind of harmonica that gives you "feels"... (_AcBlz2 Slow Blues for example).
Posted by: Robertkc

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 08/31/16 05:35 PM

Originally Posted By: Alyssa - PG Music
Great song Robert! Incredibly powerful lyrics. I'm just dying to hear them darker, over a slow bluesy accompaniment. Maybe something with a harmonica soloist? You know, the kind of harmonica that gives you "feels"... (_AcBlz2 Slow Blues for example).



Alyssa,

The lyrics are very personal so I`m glad they resonate. Slower & bluesier?... never thought of that, but I like the harp idea & do plan to rerecord the song sometime.

Robert
Posted by: RnAM

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 09/01/16 04:22 AM

Robert,

Floyd said it earlier as a comment on the other song you posted. There is something Leonard Cohen like in your lyrics and singing rhythm. A little bit stronger in this one.
Now both me and Anne-Marie are huge Cohen fans, so you have our attention ;-)

Rob
Posted by: Callie - PG Music

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 09/01/16 08:15 AM

Great song - I am listening to it again right now - love the lyrics!

This song post is the "Hot Forum Topic" for today!

-Callie
Posted by: Robertkc

Re: Things You Didn`t Say - 09/01/16 05:00 PM

Originally Posted By: RnAM
Robert,

Floyd said it earlier as a comment on the other song you posted. There is something Leonard Cohen like in your lyrics and singing rhythm. A little bit stronger in this one.
Now both me and Anne-Marie are huge Cohen fans, so you have our attention ;-)

Rob



Rob,
As a Canadian I have a special regard for Mr Cohen and would even like to add a bit of his "gravel" to my voice sometimes!
Funny enough I`ve never thought anything in my lyrics influenced by him ... until the new one I`m working on for the competition, so please stay tuned.

Robert