Embers

A "Bookends" kind of song, with more of a pop feel than I usually try for.

Style is _LONGWAY.STY (Longway Even Country Ballad)

RealTracks in style: ~~2488:Bass, Acoustic, Bowed Held Ev 110
RealTracks in style: 2024:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm CountryJohn Ev 085
RealTracks in style: 2718:Guitar, Nylon, Fingerpicking CountryBrent Ev 085
RealDrums in style: CountryPopBallad^02-a:Kick, HiHat , b:Snare, Ride
RT Strings - high,low & viola



Embers

she puts her knitting down
hums along to Unforgettable
says to herself
at least someone understands
he turns a page of Hemingway
these days books are his best friends
they sit apart on furniture
wrinkled as their hands

its not yet cold
he doesn`t need to be told
time to light the fire
alone together all their treasures
live in the embers

at six oclock they`ll walk the dog
she complains about the weather
he knows to handle her gently
as their silk antiquities
still each night in flickers bright
the mystery of the glow
memories that bind
their peculiarities

its not yet cold
he doesn`t need to be told
time to light the fire
alone together all their treasures
live in the embers

dancing in the flames
better thoughts summer nights children`s games
its the best they can do

its not yet cold
he doesn`t need to be told
time to light the fire
alone together all their treasures
live in the embers

© Robert Cordrey July 2018

Beautiful song Robert, well produced my friend, well written and the vocal hits the spot. Cliff

It is a beautiful write. I thought the vocal might have been too up front, in parts. Maybe if brought down just a touch it would work fine, That being said, I really enjoyed the song. Lovely lyric and nice melody.

Well done.

Dave

Robert,

These lyrics were an incredibly visual journey for me. It was so easy to see everything that you sang about. My first impression was that there's a lot confidence on display in this creation, its arrangement and its production. You certainly are achieving some pretty polished results working with your DAW and BIAB these days.

As always, your storytelling stood proudly at centre stage.

All the best,
Noel

Robert

A lovely poetic set of lyrics and a thoughtful backing and a strong vocal performance.
Very nice indeed.

Peter

Nice one, Robert! As always I enjoy your lyrics and the images that they evoke.

Nice production, I like the way you built the track and they way your brought the strings in.

Very good, enjoyed the listen!

What a beautiful and haunting song. Your vocals here and absolutely piercing, and the feel of the whole thing is almost ghostly. Some really incredible lyrics in this too, which pull the whole thing along, to me at least.

You should be proud of this one Thanks for sharing!

Once again you paint a detailed and very interesting picture

love the sparse music backing

nice melodies

well written, cool song

Kenny

Robert,

An excellent write. You captured "growing old together" magnificently. A beautifully painted picture.

The production and mix are good, however, I did not care for the choice of drums. I thought they were "too jaunty" for the thoughtful lyric.

fj

Floyd,
Supportive and astute comments as always...there`s a long story about that drum track, but it amounts to- I agree its a poor fit!
Replaced with something more appropriate now.
Thank you,

Robert

Your lyrics and style always make me wonder, Then I realize where you are, and why your writing this way.


And that's why I followed the artists of my youth, Steve Harley, John Lennon, David bowie and the eagles and Paul macca etc,.


Thank you for that.


Best.

Thank you, Cliff!



Dave,

Thanks for that... vocal levels fine tuning is something I often revisit after giving my mixing brain a rest for a while, so will have another listen in a few days.

Robert

The lyrics really paint a vivid picture. Bit haunting vocals and arrangement give this song another level of 'growing old' feeling.

Janne

Such a beautiful song!
We like the chorus very much.
Brent is doing a wonderful job again and the viola is beautiful.
Great job!

Rob and Anne-Marie

Very cool song. What a neat lyric. I really love these folk song. Acoustic was very cool.. Super vocal and the song is very well mixed and produced.. Well done

I agree!

I thought that your vocal was great throughout this song. Great lyrics also.

This is really good!

Robert, you painted a lovely picture with your lyrics in this! The song just flows so nicely! I really liked the way you gently bring in the strings and the bring them up louder shortly thereafter! Great job! Thanks, Torrey

Better!

Noel.

That`s a very supportive review - thank you!

Robert



Peter,

I appreciate your listen and kind comments.

Robert




Thanks Dave!



The


Deryk,
Well this started with a very personal observation about my own life... which I tried to make more universal in the song story. I`m happy you liked the result.

Robert

Thanks for that, Kenny.



Looks like there`s some link in our musical influences ( have to admit Steve Harley made me go to Google though!)... I did think there`s a bit of McCartney in in the chorus on this one.
Thanks for your comments.



Janne,
Thank you for listening.

Robert

Rob & Anne-Marie,
I`m glad you liked this - its nice to get a nod for the chorus - you guys really understand pop!

Robert

Thanks Scott... I`m starting to think my folk songs are just a way to recover from our rock outings!

Robert

Mario and Torrey - thank you for your positive comments.
Floyd- thanks for giving those drums another listen.

Robert

Robert,

Such a beautiful and fragile song... Great vocal and mix.

One of my favorites from you!

Bob

Really wonderful writing!! I think the music is a great fit...somber, sparse, sad. I'm reminded of the lyric:

My father sits at night with no lights on
His cigarette glows in the dar
The living room is still
I walk by, no remark

I tiptoe past the master bedroom where
My mother reads her magazines
I hear her call "sweet dreams"
But I forget how to dream

Do you know that one Robert? Your song paints that kind of clear picture of a relationship, although in yours there is more resignation instead of isolation. Fine writing!! Take care. Greg

Hello, Robert

Very nice folk ballad!
The melody is so beautiful.
And it's very pop.
Your vocal just fits this.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi

Close your eyes and the story unfolds in your mind. Your song made me think of some dear old friends he's 85 and she's 83. He says he is catching up on his reading and she is cooking like a maniac
I am eating her Bara Brith as I write this.
Your song and her cake go well together

Nice.

Alyn

Thank you, Bob - feels good to hear that approval from you.

Robert



Greg,

I like those lyrics - don`t know the song- who is it?
Thanks for your listen and positive comments.

Robert

Shigeki,

Good to hear you liked this- and especially that you mention the melody... it took some work as its a bit different from my usual style.

Robert




Alyn,

That cake and your friends sound sweet... I`m glad my song brought real folks to mind.
Thanks for your listen.


Robert

As floyd said "A beautifully painted picture..."

The rich imagery surrounds a wonderful story of aging. Uplifting... and sad.

Your vocal, your choice of "band" and the production ice the lyric cake.

Well done Robert!

J&B

J&B,
I`m glad you found more in this picture than just sad - thank you for your listens and support.

Robert