The Dream

Posted by: GocartMoz

The Dream - 08/23/18 07:09 AM

This is a song I originally wrote in 2013 after I, along with members of my family, ran into some serious health battles. I have two recordings from 2013 and figured I would try to re-imagine this tune using BIAB. I decided on a very simple arrangement. I am not at my "BIAB computer," so I will have to post the backing tracks later.

The Dream
(c)2018 David S. Becker Music

https://soundcloud.com/gocartmoz/the-dream-redux-2018

Intro
Verse 1

I'm walking
Down a narrow road
I'm carrying
Such a heavy load
I'm losing my breath
Trying not to fall behind
I'm struggling
To stay within the lines

Verse 2
A weight it lifts
No more need to fight
A blast of air
And a radiant light
I'm for once at ease
As the air it fills my lungs
The pain is gone
My body and mind go numb

Pre-Chorus
But I can't escape
This nightmare
Why must I have to wake
This existence I'd forsake
I've survived too long
In this hospice
In my dream I'm set free
It's where I want to be

Chorus
I want to go home
Home
There's nothing here for me
But pain & misery
Home
I need to go home
Won't someone set me free
Take these shackles off of me

Bridge
Well I have a pulse
My heart's beating
I can take a breath
I'm breathing
But the pain is never easing
And to suffer there's no meaning

Verse 3

I am sleeping
With a peaceful ease
No bitter cold
Just a soothing breeze
There's a voice that's faint
Screaming "stay with me"
A shock to the heart
Why can't they let me be

Repeat Pre-chorus
Repeat Chorus
Outro


Posted by: BlueAttitude

Re: The Dream - 08/23/18 07:38 AM

A very powerful and moving song!

Simple arrangement is perfect IMHO, anything else would get in the way.

Nicely done!
Posted by: Janice & Bud

Re: The Dream - 08/23/18 08:31 AM

That'll rip the paint off your heart.

Very moving and the perfect backup to support the moving vocal and lyric.

We are with Dave that anymore, arrangement wise, would not add anything.

Great work!

J&B
Posted by: Deryk - PG Music

Re: The Dream - 08/23/18 09:26 AM

Really well done smile Very moving, and imply put - it is beautiful. You can feel the sincerity in your voice and lyrics. It is perfectly catchy as well, and very well produced.

Great work and thanks for sharing!
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/23/18 02:49 PM

Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
A very powerful and moving song!

Simple arrangement is perfect IMHO, anything else would get in the way.

Nicely done!


Thank you for the listen and comments. It is greatly appreciated.

Dave
Posted by: Joe -PG Music

Re: The Dream - 08/23/18 04:19 PM

Hi GocartMoz, Thanks for sharing this with us! I found this very easy to listen to and has a pleasant chord structure. Great work on the guitars. Nice work on the vocals too, especially at the bridge. Well done!
Posted by: Torrey Bliss

Re: The Dream - 08/23/18 04:27 PM

What a nice song! Full of emotional heartfelt lyrics and performance! Great vocal! Thanks, Torrey
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/24/18 02:46 AM

Originally Posted By: Janice & Bud
That'll rip the paint off your heart.

Very moving and the perfect backup to support the moving vocal and lyric.

We are with Dave that anymore, arrangement wise, would not add anything.

Great work!

J&B


Hey J & B ,

Always appreciate hearing your thoughts. Thanks much for giving this a listen and commenting.

Dave
Posted by: Al-David

Re: The Dream - 08/24/18 03:36 AM

What a terrific, although, poignant song. The simplicity of the background tracks is the perfect complement to the straightforward lyric. Everything about this powerful and compellinmg. Best to you and yours.

Alan
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: The Dream - 08/24/18 07:25 AM

Dave,

A very powerful write and a very powerful performance and presentation.

The piano/organ combination works really well for this. Nice production and mix. The "touch of fiddle", works well, too...

Seems like you have quickly "gotten comfortable" with the BAND!

Well done.

fj
Posted by: 44kfl

Re: The Dream - 08/24/18 07:43 AM

A strong and emotional write, great performance

Florida is well represented on these forums by

really good songwriters!

I love the sparse backing, it's my "go to" very often

good storytelling, it put me in the "Lord save me from this fate"

frame of mind.

Kenny
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/25/18 05:04 AM

Originally Posted By: Deryk - PG Music
Really well done smile Very moving, and imply put - it is beautiful. You can feel the sincerity in your voice and lyrics. It is perfectly catchy as well, and very well produced.

Great work and thanks for sharing!


Thank you Derek, I appreciate the comments.

Dave
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/25/18 05:06 AM

Originally Posted By: Joe -PG Music
Hi GocartMoz, Thanks for sharing this with us! I found this very easy to listen to and has a pleasant chord structure. Great work on the guitars. Nice work on the vocals too, especially at the bridge. Well done!


Thx for the listen. Interestingly though there is no guitar in this recording. I originally included some acoustic tracks with me playing, but decided to nix them as I wanted to keep it sparse. Appreciate the listen.

Thanks,

Dave
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/25/18 05:08 AM

Originally Posted By: Torrey Bliss
What a nice song! Full of emotional heartfelt lyrics and performance! Great vocal! Thanks, Torrey


Thank you Torrey. I appreciate your thoughts.

Dave
Posted by: Skyline

Re: The Dream - 08/25/18 07:20 AM

A remarkable song Dave, incredibly moving, sincere and so well put together.
Well done my friend.

John
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/25/18 09:29 AM

Originally Posted By: Al-David
What a terrific, although, poignant song. The simplicity of the background tracks is the perfect complement to the straightforward lyric. Everything about this powerful and compellinmg. Best to you and yours.

Alan


Thank you Alan. I appreciate your time listening and commenting.

Dave
Posted by: rsdean

Re: The Dream - 08/25/18 11:18 AM

David,

This is very moving... I love the song and performance. Some very fine production here as well.

Bob
Posted by: Greg Johnson

Re: The Dream - 08/25/18 01:46 PM

POWERFUL, riveting, passionate!!! Beautifully done. I would not change a thing about this. BTW, is the piano an RT? I'd like to check that one out. My mom is 87 and this pretty much describes her life. It is difficult to watch. Fortunately her pain is relatively mild most of the time but there is so little there for her that I wonder how she pushes on. GREAT work here!! Take care. Greg
Posted by: gruverider

Re: The Dream - 08/25/18 03:59 PM

Your vocal is filled with emotion! Wonderful choice of instruments and arrangement!

very much enjoyed!
Posted by: PeterF

Re: The Dream - 08/25/18 08:40 PM

Well that was a powerful and sad song. Really nicely produced written and performed.
A strong composition.
Peter
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/26/18 05:23 AM

Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Dave,

A very powerful write and a very powerful performance and presentation.

The piano/organ combination works really well for this. Nice production and mix. The "touch of fiddle", works well, too...

Seems like you have quickly "gotten comfortable" with the BAND!

Well done.

fj


Hey Floyd,

Thx as always for listening. I am definitely getting a better understanding of how powerful BIAB is. I am enjoying it and appreciate you recommending it to me. It has definitely opened up alot of possibilities. Appreciate your thoughts on this tune. I actually have a version with just vocal and piano which is how I originally envisioned it when I wrote it in 2013, but didn’t have any real piano chops. Very cool to hear it like I initially wanted.

Dave
Posted by: Robertkc

Re: The Dream - 08/26/18 10:10 AM

Dave,
Powerful,personal, raw lyrics and a vocal that carries the emotion.
Love the arrangement - plse post tracks if you can.
Excellent work!

Robert
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/26/18 11:32 AM

Originally Posted By: 44kfl
A strong and emotional write, great performance

Florida is well represented on these forums by

really good songwriters!

I love the sparse backing, it's my "go to" very often

good storytelling, it put me in the "Lord save me from this fate"

frame of mind.

Kenny

Thank you very much for the comments Kenny it is greatly appreciated.

Dave
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/26/18 11:33 AM

Originally Posted By: Skyline
A remarkable song Dave, incredibly moving, sincere and so well put together.
Well done my friend.

John


Thank you very much John for taking the time to listen and comment. Greatly appreciated.

Dave
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/26/18 11:34 AM

Originally Posted By: rsdean
David,

This is very moving... I love the song and performance. Some very fine production here as well.

Bob


Thank you kindly Bob. I appreciate you taking the time to listen and comment.

Dave
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/26/18 11:46 AM

Originally Posted By: Greg Johnson
POWERFUL, riveting, passionate!!! Beautifully done. I would not change a thing about this. BTW, is the piano an RT? I'd like to check that one out. My mom is 87 and this pretty much describes her life. It is difficult to watch. Fortunately her pain is relatively mild most of the time but there is so little there for her that I wonder how she pushes on. GREAT work here!! Take care. Greg


Thank you very much for your comments Greg. I am sorry to hear about the issue your mother is dealing with. I hope things improve. The piano is RT. I tried to edit the initial post with the tracks but I couldn't seem to edit it, so I am going to post here ... This song was done with all RT's in BIAB, aside from my vocal.

It is in the Key of G
80 BPM
Style is _QUASAR.STY: Quasar Minimal Moden Pop Ballad

Piano is 2693:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm ModernPop16thsMike Ev16075
Organ is 2592:Organ, Rhythm ModernPopSlowMike Ev075
Bass is -2475:Bass, Acoustic, HeldSimple Ev085
Drums are RealDrums-NashvilleBrushesBalladPushEv16: a: Sidestick, Brushes b: brushes
Fiddle is 1760 Fiddle, Background Pop 16 Ev85

Hope that helps
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/27/18 06:31 AM

Originally Posted By: gruverider
Your vocal is filled with emotion! Wonderful choice of instruments and arrangement!

very much enjoyed!


Thank you very much for giving this a listen and commenting. It is greatly appreciated.

Dave
Posted by: gibson

Re: The Dream - 08/27/18 07:05 AM

David,
Got to agree with all the previous posters.
This is excellent
You had me singing the second chorus on my first listen.

Enjoyed that a lot

looking forward to more

Alyn
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/28/18 12:18 PM

Originally Posted By: PeterF
Well that was a powerful and sad song. Really nicely produced written and performed.
A strong composition.
Peter


Thank you for listening and commenting Peter. It is greatly appreciated.

Dave
Posted by: GocartMoz

Re: The Dream - 08/29/18 10:39 AM

Thank you Robert,

I really appreciate your thoughts and time.

Dave
Posted by: animarorecords

Re: The Dream - 08/29/18 05:41 PM

Hello, GocartMoz

Really strong vocal!
Your interpretation is so emotional.
I like Pre-chorus part the most.
That part proceeds with the E minor key, and it is very good it resolves with E major only at the end.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi
Posted by: Steve Young

Re: The Dream - 08/29/18 06:18 PM

Very moving. Loved the ending. Powerfully done. Thanks for sharing it!

Steve