Having fun with BIAB.
A phrase by fellow user was generously given to me to fool around with, so it inspired me to write this song sketch. It is about a hard day of work of city janitor.

Skin Of A Snow Tire


572:Bass, Electric,Blues BB Ev 085
1346: Guitar, Slide, Soloist Blues Sw 165
ReaDrums BluesRockFunky 16th
2677: Guitar Acoustic, Rhytm BluesStraightBrent Ev 085
2431: Piano Acoustic, Rhytm NewOrleansMardiGrasKevin Ev 16 085
377:Guitar, Resonator, Background Trav Ev 088

Morning comes early, too early to liking,
drinking my coffee chewing my muffin
Subway depression, metallic announcements.
Riders as robots, like gloomy accountants
But I aint care, too soon to retire,
I got bullet proof skin of snow tire


Shuffling workers, going to meetings
Cubicles dusty, I hear no greetings.
Broom and a bucking my only two fellows,
Its time to get busy and grease up my elbows.
There's is trouble in toilet for me to admire
But I just don't care, got skin of snow tire.


Time for hot cocoa, mood gently sliding
Hard working day spirally winding .
Soft lazy pillows are calling from bedroom
Their sweet angel voices I hear in my head now.
floor under feet feels like spring quagmire,
Hanging on coat rack my skin of a snow tire.

I would say it was a fun listen, but I feel for the guy.

No. I changed my mind. He's about to retire. It was a fun listen.

Sweet progression, great melody. Oddly, I was captured by the bass and vocals working together. Not sure why. That immigrant NYC voice is perfect, both in the write and in the singing. Such weariness. The last verse buttons it up.

And loved the scat ending. Icing on the cake.

Fun. And touching too.

Hi Rusty, Great work on this! Very thematic and true to the season. Love the piano work on this too. Well done!

Really enjoyed this. Cool tune. Well done

Fun story. The reso solo sounded cool.

Nice writing!

My favorite line:
"Subway depression, metallic announcements.
Riders as robots, like gloomy accountants"

And that little improv scat at the end was fun.

Enjoyed the listen, Mike!

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Top of the morning...

Chuckle....I'm happy to echo other comments.

Creative lyrical write, well performed.
It a has swampy sort of mood too it which works well for me.
You definitely have your own style and BIAB is an excellent tool to nurture it and keep you interested.

I'm glad the phrase kindled your creativity.
Got me to thinking about what subject I'd come up with if I desired to squeeze that narly phrase into an actual song.

Well done.....and thanks for posting it.....back to it.

Guys, Thank you for undeserved feedback!
This was easy write, almost no struggle

It is about a city office janitor, but partly a true story.
Many years ago I was walking by 34th street in NYC and crowd was moving like there is no tomorrow. And there was this street sweeper guy with broom... And when I saw him, it was as he lived in different law of time. He was moving at different pace than everything surrounding him. It was a strange and mesmerizing experience.

Mike.

Great song idea, loved the unique lyric choices.

Wow - what a unique and inventive tune! I actually found the slightly off-kilter vocal delivery really mesmerizing and enticing to hear. It definitely gave it a special quality. Almost cartoonish in a way, but still sincere. All around, a solid tune - you should be proud!

Thanks for sharing

Mike,

A very interesting write. Well sung.

Your mix on this is quite well done. Sounds good.

fj

Interesting write

Interesting performance

loved the resonator parts too,

I thought it was a very good mix,

enjoyed the listen,

Kenny

Thank you all for support & feedback!!
Kenny, FJ I am happy to learn that my mixing got better! That means a lot to me.
It is still way sloppy, I know, but I am learning the ropes

Best,
Mike.

"Subway depression, metallic announcements.
Riders as robots, like gloomy accountants"

Great write. It's different in a good way!

The out front vocal works well and the mix sounds tight on our monitors.

Well done!

J&B

J&B,

Thank you for the feedback!
Your opinion means a lot since I listened to your music, and you have amazing mixes and great collaborations!

I got a level better with the advice from you and all the other helpful members.

Hi!

Talk about a really cool song! The vocal was as interesting as the super lyrical write. You put me right out here with a broom and people swarming all around me. Loved it!

Alan

You had me laughing out loud! Great write!

And I love your vocal delivery!


much enjoyed!

Rustyspoon#, sorry I almost missed this one. This has such a neat sound to it with some creative fun lyric content! That resonator really gives this song something that just carries it right along! Good work here! Thanks, Torrey