Hi fellows.

Here is satirical song I wrote before asking advice on mixing I
tried fixing it, but it is still all over the frequencies, as I started "fixing
process" way into the project. My time on music is limited, so I will
leave it as is for time being and maybe come back to it one day.

VR


Band:
921: Bass Acoustic
1903: Guitar, Acoustic, Rhytm Bolero
RealDrums: BossaTerryClarke
612: Pedal Steel, Background
2355: Sax,Baritone, Background StraightBluesGary
2014: Sax,Alto, Soloist CountryTrainMark
2460:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm NewAgeAlbertiMoody

lyrics:
Wind is dragging silver clouds,
like a magical tug boat,
I am sitting on a couch,
Touching gently my remote

Welcome to Virtual Reality,
Artificial thinking
Don't snooze for too long
Life might pass by
before your eyes go blinking

Birds are chirping on the trees,
Sun is coming out.
I am saddened by the fact
That internet is down

Welcome to Virtual Reality,
Artificial thinking..
Don't snooze for too long
Life might pass by
before your eyes go blinking

Spring had sprung , girls throw looks
Eyes are full of luster
I am scanning my hard drive
searching for bad clusters.

Welcome to Virtual Reality,
Artificial thinking...
Don't snooze for too long
Life is passing by... life is passing by.

Fun & funny but a sad reality.
I'm glad I grew up in a a world that kicked kids out of the house until dinner time.
I think the mix is pretty good. I'll have to listen more critically but it seemed good.
I enjoy the way you allow yourself the room and give yourself permission to use you voice VERY expressively.
The scatting was cool too.
I enjoyed the clever word play of "...lu lustering" and "...blink blinking".
Nice work Rustyspoon.

You write the most interesting songs!

Very well done, nice production with your mix of instruments and the way you are bringing them in and out, clever.

Mix is not bad either, maybe the vocal could come down a couple of db but that is a personal taste thing.

Good stuff!

What an interesting, and engaging tune! Loved the vocal deliver on this - very unique and attention-grabbing. I liked the subject matter and lyricism too. That aside, musically it is just the right level of catchy.

Good work here and thanks for sharing

The arrangement is very nice, sounds like from the last century, but the lyrics are fresh and funny. So, difficult to categorize. Actually reminds me of those scifi movies where in the middle of the modern world there is always some small shop selling old fashioned stuff, analog devices etc.

Janne

"Spring had sprung , girls throw looks
Eyes are full of luster
I am scanning my hard drive
searching for bad clusters"

My favourite lines in a song full of quirky humour- which your very free vocal delivers in a way that made me sit up!
An original cautionary tale ; very much enjoyed.

Robert

Love your unique vocal style.
This was fun. Great lyrics and melody.
Rob

Guys,
Thank you for undeserved positive feedback!
This community is a great inspiration for me.

P.S. Dave, thank you for suggestion!

Misha.

Hi Misha,

What a nice song and composition! I truly enjoyed listening to that. I like your choice of instruments, it worked really well.

I agree with Dave - if your vocal were just 2 db lower it would "glue" better with the rest of the mix. Also I think you fade out a bit too quickly, maybe do it over 4 or 8 bars next time. But - as Dave wrote - this is just a matter of personal taste.

I'm looking forward to your next project!
Will

Hi Misha,

I love it! The subtle humor, the instrument selection - everything is great. I really enjoy and appreciate the originality of your music. You have a unique and very entertaining style. I didn't find any real issues with the mixing - perhaps the vocal is just a wee bit loud. Regardless, I enjoyed my listening from beginning to end. best to you.

Alan

Fun lyric. Fun delivery. I'm drawn to scat like flies to...scat? Nice work.

Misha.. instead of duplicating all of the positive comments that have already been posted, I want to say that I really appreciate your attention to detail in the arrangement. You used lots of different elements in the musical mix.

In this type of song, which focuses on a clever lyric, you could have gotten away with simply repeating the musical background for each verse, but you didn’t do that! You made the musical track very interesting, so that, even if you took the vocal away, it would have a high degree of interest.

Kudos on a fun and well constructed piece of music!

Will,
Thank you! Got it, vocals 2db quieter. Thank you for reminding about fading out / endings. You are totally right. I guess I need somebody with a whip to stand by me when I try to finalize arrangement and softly remind me that ending is too short

Alan,
thank you! I am grateful for your input as it seems to me you have a feel for all kinds of music genres.

Tangmo,
Thanks! I wish I can write lyrics as good as yours. Should not have skipped classes in HS

Tano,
thank you for the creative comment and especially the "elements" one! I dig what you are saying! Especially now, after hearing "Day of the Dead".

Hi Rustyspoon, I really enjoyed the overall tone of this. Fantastic selection of instruments here and very soothing to hear and easy to listen to. Great work!

Back fro another listen - excellent.

Really interesting - loved the vocal and overall composition.
Some inspired instrument choices and and interesting lyric.

Peter

Fun stuff!! Very clever. I am quite passionate about the ills of technology myself. BUT, I'm very thankful for my internet friends on this forum. Nice work here!! Take care. Greg

This is a cool tune. Super vocal and lyric. Super backtrack.

Hi Fellows.

With this kind of support, I will have to leave my job and start writing music full time

Thank you for your time and kind words!

Best regards,
Misha.

love that bossa beat,

nice progressions, nice write

Spring had sprung , girls throw looks
Eyes are full of luster
I am scanning my hard drive
searching for bad clusters. (inspired!)

cool song, great vocals!

enjoyed the listen,

Kenny