Thanks all. Chulaivet1966: genuine thanks for the feedback, no problem whatsoever with it from me. We all hear different things - which is why it's great to have other people's feedback - they WILL hear things I may not immediately hear myself, that's just how it works; so thanks!!!
IMO....in this context.
Too break in down to the lowest common denominator, the goal is too not
only make a
better as it evolves but to actually have it
stand out among other songs of the same genre.
A true creative challenge.
Song writing is a craft that one develops over time which requires discipline, focus and is a very
personal endeavor.
It's very risky too jump in a thread like this for obvious reasons.
I rarely do because why would I think anyone would respect my creative comments or employ my suggestions on their work in progress?.
I'm not (and never will be) famous and my song writing may suck in the opinions of most anyway.
I'm very pleased you accept my comments
as I intended them.
Your can do this!....stick with this WIP...work through the creative labor pains and make it happen to your satisfaction.
Whether you consider all the helpful comments offered.....or not.
Are you intending on writing lyrics for this?
If so, have you selected a
specific subject matter relating to "Her"?
Maybe spell out the chord progression for those of us with inquiring minds.
Back to it....