Woman Of Perfection

Posted by: jannesan

Woman Of Perfection - 03/27/19 08:49 AM

Woman Of Perfection

Guess what, this song got its inspiration from my dream smile In that dream I played the chorus of this song with acoustic guitar to a member of a girl band at a railway station. Probably she was going to travel to fame on global market and leaving me behind. Original lyrics were in Finnish and had references to local towns and places from my life, I thought that it would be difficult to translate, but I wanted to give it a try. Chorus was easier and I had it ready for a quite while ago, finally I changed references to better known places on the local scale, maybe some personal touch was lost, but hopefully the story is now more suitable for international audience smile

In the original Finnish version, I had a guest vocalist. For my version I had to transpose down by 2 half steps. Thus, the guitar solo had to be re-worked. I tried with multiriff but it didn't provide satisfactory result, so I used Adobe Audition to transpose the original solo track, luckily it worked out well, I used re-generated part only for the last couple of bars (unfortunately multiriff didn't generate the ending properly so I had to use the real BIAB for that).

RealDrums: NashvilleEven8^1
RealTracks:
1759:Bass, Electric, Pop16ths Ev 085
703:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Spirited Ev 085
1596:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Pop16ths Ev16 065
2718:Guitar, Nylon, Fingerpicking CountryBrent Ev 085
1902:Guitar, Acoustic, Background Bolero Ev 090
1856:Cello
2334:String Quartet


Vocals by me

Mixed in Cakewalk by BandLab

Lyrics:


At Moomin World, after birding
I bought you a doughnut, fresh made
at the station I played guitar
do you miss my serenade?

You are my woman of perfection
every key from C to B
you are a polyglot
London is your cup of tea.
You are my woman of essentials
you are water, oxygen
but my habitat is too flat for
a cosmopolitan.

At McDonald's once in Helsinki
on a tender winter Friday
at a near pub a scrabble game
as always you ran away.

You are my woman...

On an autumn walk in tranquil Lapland
you smiled at my palindrome
almost dating at the stadium
still waiting beneath that dome.

------
Janne
Posted by: Joe -PG Music

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/27/19 09:01 AM

Nice work Jannesan, thank you for sharing this! This sounds very full and I really dug the chord progression. That guitar tone is very warm! Great work!
Posted by: rsdean

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/27/19 09:04 AM

Janne,

Some really nice music here... Great song and production / mix. Your vocal is a good fit for this style.

I really like the way you slowly built the arrangement and the inclusion of the strings toward the end - very nice.

Much enjoyed!

Bob
Posted by: Jim

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/27/19 09:45 AM

Nice tune & production...
I have to give you extra thanks...
For going to the trouble of translating your creation for those of us who are not polyglots smile
Posted by: Scott C

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/27/19 12:47 PM

This is excellent Janne. Super vocal. Guitar was excellent
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/27/19 01:28 PM

Janne,

A really interesting lyric. A very nice arrangement - good instrumentation and a good mix.

I enjoyed the listen.

fj
Posted by: Ember - PG Music

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/27/19 02:04 PM

This song has a dreamy element to it that really suits the song -- and finding out that the chorus came from a dream I think makes it all make so much sense! Really great job. Thanks for sharing.
Posted by: Rob4580

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/27/19 02:28 PM

Hello Janne. This has a pretty melody. I wouldn't have minded hearing the original Finnish version. Over all good write and production. Rob
Posted by: Rustyspoon#

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/27/19 06:00 PM

Janne,
Interesting write, both lyrically and musically. Clever use of phrasing.
Loved the opening line "At Moomin World, after birding" (My wife is a huge fan of T.Jansson*). Please share Finnish version if you have that recorded.

Thank you for posting.

Misha.
Posted by: Will Josef

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/27/19 06:02 PM

Hi Janne, I really like this song, it has a nice, soothing feel to it... the sounds are great!
Nice guitar playing too!
I hope your wife is fine with the lyrics! wink

Thanks for sharing!
Will
Posted by: BlueAttitude

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/28/19 03:48 AM

Well, that has to be one of the most interesting back stories I have ever read about a song!

Cool stuff Janne, enjoyed the listen smile
Posted by: Deryk - PG Music

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/28/19 08:52 AM

Wow - I really enjoyed this one! Love the stripped down backing tracks and slow progression in the tune, and your vocal melodies are stunning. It flows smooth as butter, and has some really memorable moments.

Thanks for sharing smile
Posted by: Janice & Bud

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/28/19 09:40 AM

Cool dream --> Cool song!

The progression and build are well conceived and the melody is very, very nice.

And like Dave said the backstory was fun to read.

Enjoyed it!

J&B
Posted by: Al-David

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/28/19 09:49 AM

Hi Janne ..

This is very interesting and pretty. The backing tracks are perfect for the song - nice selection!

The lyric and melody are captivating. i really enjoyed this! Best to you ...

Alan
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/29/19 11:24 AM

Originally Posted By: Joe -PG Music
Nice work Jannesan, thank you for sharing this! This sounds very full and I really dug the chord progression. That guitar tone is very warm! Great work!


Thanks Joe for your kind comment smile I was seeking a warm guitar sound and I'm glad to hear that I was successful… or actually that BIAB had such good choices.

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/29/19 11:25 AM

Originally Posted By: rsdean
Some really nice music here... Great song and production / mix. Your vocal is a good fit for this style.
I really like the way you slowly built the arrangement and the inclusion of the strings toward the end - very nice.
Much enjoyed!
Bob


Thanks Bob for your kind feedback smile

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/29/19 11:27 AM

Originally Posted By: Jim
Nice tune & production...
I have to give you extra thanks...
For going to the trouble of translating your creation for those of us who are not polyglots smile


Thanks Jim for your kind comment and extra thanks for your extra thanks laugh

Janne
Posted by: Don Gaynor

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/29/19 11:38 AM

Originally Posted By: jannesan
Originally Posted By: Jim
Nice tune & production...
I have to give you extra thanks...
For going to the trouble of translating your creation for those of us who are not polyglots smile


Thanks Jim for your kind comment and extra thanks for your extra thanks laugh

Janne


I'm a polyglot but now I'm vaccinated for that.
Posted by: 44kfl

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/30/19 09:10 AM

A very pretty progression and melody

well written, translated very well,

enjoyed the listen,

Kenny
Posted by: Ezekiel's Storm

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/31/19 12:01 PM

I like that you started with the cello by itself for a few seconds before the other instruments came in. Nice effect. Beautiful chorus melody. Your instrumentation works well in this song. Refreshingly original lyrics.
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/31/19 12:08 PM

Originally Posted By: Scott C
This is excellent Janne. Super vocal. Guitar was excellent


Thanks Scott, I appreciate your very positive comment smile

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/31/19 12:09 PM

Originally Posted By: floyd jane
A really interesting lyric. A very nice arrangement - good instrumentation and a good mix.
I enjoyed the listen.
fj


Thanks Floyd for your kind review smile

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 03/31/19 12:14 PM

Originally Posted By: Ember - PG Music
This song has a dreamy element to it that really suits the song -- and finding out that the chorus came from a dream I think makes it all make so much sense! Really great job. Thanks for sharing.


Thanks Ember for your nice comment smile I'm glad you liked the "dreaminess" in my little song, actually now that you mentioned it, I could work on that idea further...but maybe I leave it for my next inspirational dream wink

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/02/19 12:32 PM

Originally Posted By: Rob4580
Hello Janne. This has a pretty melody. I wouldn't have minded hearing the original Finnish version. Over all good write and production. Rob


Thanks Rob, I'm glad you liked the melody and production smile Here is the link to the original Finnish version

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/02/19 12:39 PM

Originally Posted By: Rustyspoon#
Janne,
Interesting write, both lyrically and musically. Clever use of phrasing.
Loved the opening line "At Moomin World, after birding" (My wife is a huge fan of T.Jansson*). Please share Finnish version if you have that recorded.
Thank you for posting.
Misha.


Thanks Misha for your kind comment smile And also big thanks for lyrical inspiration, you mentioned Moomin World in some earlier comment and it kind of pushed the translation forward - I thought that it would be cool to use that on the starting line, because there is at least one on this forum who knows the reference laugh

Link to the Finnish version is in the previous reply and also on this version's detail area in SoundCloud.

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/02/19 12:41 PM

Originally Posted By: Will Josef
Hi Janne, I really like this song, it has a nice, soothing feel to it... the sounds are great!
Nice guitar playing too!
I hope your wife is fine with the lyrics! wink
Thanks for sharing!
Will


Thanks Will for your kind feedback smile I have no wife so no-one to complain about my dream women or the lyrical content wink

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/04/19 11:28 AM

Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
Well, that has to be one of the most interesting back stories I have ever read about a song!
Cool stuff Janne, enjoyed the listen smile


Thanks Dave, I'm glad to hear you enjoyed the story and the song smile

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/04/19 11:30 AM

Originally Posted By: Deryk - PG Music
Wow - I really enjoyed this one! Love the stripped down backing tracks and slow progression in the tune, and your vocal melodies are stunning. It flows smooth as butter, and has some really memorable moments.
Thanks for sharing smile


Thanks Deryk for your positive words smile

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/04/19 11:32 AM

Originally Posted By: Janice & Bud
Cool dream --> Cool song!
The progression and build are well conceived and the melody is very, very nice.
And like Dave said the backstory was fun to read.
Enjoyed it!
J&B


Thanks Janice and Bud, I appreciate your kind comment smile

Janne
Posted by: Tangmo

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/04/19 11:40 PM

Nicely eased into with the cello. The lyric is visual, original and evocative and I don't think much was lost in translation. Much enjoyed the listen.
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/06/19 12:06 AM

Originally Posted By: Al-David
Hi Janne ..
This is very interesting and pretty. The backing tracks are perfect for the song - nice selection!
The lyric and melody are captivating. i really enjoyed this! Best to you ...
Alan


Thanks Alan for your kind words smile

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/06/19 12:07 AM

Originally Posted By: Don Gaynor
Originally Posted By: jannesan
Originally Posted By: Jim
Nice tune & production...
I have to give you extra thanks...
For going to the trouble of translating your creation for those of us who are not polyglots smile


Thanks Jim for your kind comment and extra thanks for your extra thanks laugh

Janne


I'm a polyglot but now I'm vaccinated for that.


laugh
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/06/19 12:08 AM

Originally Posted By: 44kfl
A very pretty progression and melody
well written, translated very well,
enjoyed the listen,
Kenny


Thanks Kenny for your positive feedback, I'm glad you liked the progression smile

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/07/19 11:50 AM

Originally Posted By: Ezekiel's Storm
I like that you started with the cello by itself for a few seconds before the other instruments came in. Nice effect. Beautiful chorus melody. Your instrumentation works well in this song. Refreshingly original lyrics.


Thanks Ezekiel's Storm for your kind feedback smile Now with the new BIAB VST I cannot remove one bar from the lead-in (the cursor in VST would show incorrectly), I have to fill that with something else, so I usually repeat couple of bars from the intro and this time I choose only the cello section. I'm glad it worked for you smile

Janne
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/07/19 11:52 AM

Originally Posted By: Tangmo
Nicely eased into with the cello. The lyric is visual, original and evocative and I don't think much was lost in translation. Much enjoyed the listen.


Thanks Tangmo for your kind and uplifting comments about my lyrics smile

Janne
Posted by: animarorecords

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/13/19 10:30 PM

Janne,

Really nice song!
With a very good melody and a beautiful chord progression.
I feel your usual wonderful sense in this tune strongly.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/15/19 10:35 AM

Originally Posted By: animarorecords
Really nice song!
With a very good melody and a beautiful chord progression.
I feel your usual wonderful sense in this tune strongly.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.
Best regards.
Shigeki Adachi


Thank you Shigeki Adachi for your heartwarming feedback smile I hope spring is progressing well in Japan smile

Janne
Posted by: Greg Johnson

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/16/19 10:49 AM

Very nice Janne!! The melody is very pretty, and I love the guitar/strings sound. Very well produced and mixed. Everything works well!! Take care. Greg
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Woman Of Perfection - 04/18/19 08:42 AM

Originally Posted By: Greg Johnson
Very nice Janne!! The melody is very pretty, and I love the guitar/strings sound. Very well produced and mixed. Everything works well!! Take care. Greg


Thanks Greg for your kind feedback, glad you liked everything smile

Janne