Woman Of Perfection

Guess what, this song got its inspiration from my dream In that dream I played the chorus of this song with acoustic guitar to a member of a girl band at a railway station. Probably she was going to travel to fame on global market and leaving me behind. Original lyrics were in Finnish and had references to local towns and places from my life, I thought that it would be difficult to translate, but I wanted to give it a try. Chorus was easier and I had it ready for a quite while ago, finally I changed references to better known places on the local scale, maybe some personal touch was lost, but hopefully the story is now more suitable for international audience

In the original Finnish version, I had a guest vocalist. For my version I had to transpose down by 2 half steps. Thus, the guitar solo had to be re-worked. I tried with multiriff but it didn't provide satisfactory result, so I used Adobe Audition to transpose the original solo track, luckily it worked out well, I used re-generated part only for the last couple of bars (unfortunately multiriff didn't generate the ending properly so I had to use the real BIAB for that).

RealDrums: NashvilleEven8^1
RealTracks:
1759:Bass, Electric, Pop16ths Ev 085
703:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Spirited Ev 085
1596:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Pop16ths Ev16 065
2718:Guitar, Nylon, Fingerpicking CountryBrent Ev 085
1902:Guitar, Acoustic, Background Bolero Ev 090
1856:Cello
2334:String Quartet


Vocals by me

Mixed in Cakewalk by BandLab

Lyrics:


At Moomin World, after birding
I bought you a doughnut, fresh made
at the station I played guitar
do you miss my serenade?

You are my woman of perfection
every key from C to B
you are a polyglot
London is your cup of tea.
You are my woman of essentials
you are water, oxygen
but my habitat is too flat for
a cosmopolitan.

At McDonald's once in Helsinki
on a tender winter Friday
at a near pub a scrabble game
as always you ran away.

You are my woman...

On an autumn walk in tranquil Lapland
you smiled at my palindrome
almost dating at the stadium
still waiting beneath that dome.

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Janne

Nice work Jannesan, thank you for sharing this! This sounds very full and I really dug the chord progression. That guitar tone is very warm! Great work!

Janne,

Some really nice music here... Great song and production / mix. Your vocal is a good fit for this style.

I really like the way you slowly built the arrangement and the inclusion of the strings toward the end - very nice.

Much enjoyed!

Bob

Nice tune & production...
I have to give you extra thanks...
For going to the trouble of translating your creation for those of us who are not polyglots

This is excellent Janne. Super vocal. Guitar was excellent

Janne,

A really interesting lyric. A very nice arrangement - good instrumentation and a good mix.

I enjoyed the listen.

fj

This song has a dreamy element to it that really suits the song -- and finding out that the chorus came from a dream I think makes it all make so much sense! Really great job. Thanks for sharing.

Hello Janne. This has a pretty melody. I wouldn't have minded hearing the original Finnish version. Over all good write and production. Rob

Janne,
Interesting write, both lyrically and musically. Clever use of phrasing.
Loved the opening line "At Moomin World, after birding" (My wife is a huge fan of T.Jansson*). Please share Finnish version if you have that recorded.

Thank you for posting.

Misha.

Hi Janne, I really like this song, it has a nice, soothing feel to it... the sounds are great!
Nice guitar playing too!
I hope your wife is fine with the lyrics!

Thanks for sharing!
Will

Well, that has to be one of the most interesting back stories I have ever read about a song!

Cool stuff Janne, enjoyed the listen

Wow - I really enjoyed this one! Love the stripped down backing tracks and slow progression in the tune, and your vocal melodies are stunning. It flows smooth as butter, and has some really memorable moments.

Thanks for sharing

Cool dream --> Cool song!

The progression and build are well conceived and the melody is very, very nice.

And like Dave said the backstory was fun to read.

Enjoyed it!

J&B

Hi Janne ..

This is very interesting and pretty. The backing tracks are perfect for the song - nice selection!

The lyric and melody are captivating. i really enjoyed this! Best to you ...

Alan

Thanks Joe for your kind comment I was seeking a warm guitar sound and I'm glad to hear that I was successful… or actually that BIAB had such good choices.

Janne

Thanks Bob for your kind feedback

Janne

Thanks Jim for your kind comment and extra thanks for your extra thanks

Janne

I'm a polyglot but now I'm vaccinated for that.

A very pretty progression and melody

well written, translated very well,

enjoyed the listen,

Kenny

I like that you started with the cello by itself for a few seconds before the other instruments came in. Nice effect. Beautiful chorus melody. Your instrumentation works well in this song. Refreshingly original lyrics.

Thanks Scott, I appreciate your very positive comment

Janne

Thanks Floyd for your kind review

Janne

Thanks Ember for your nice comment I'm glad you liked the "dreaminess" in my little song, actually now that you mentioned it, I could work on that idea further...but maybe I leave it for my next inspirational dream

Janne

Thanks Rob, I'm glad you liked the melody and production Here is the link to the original Finnish version

Janne

Thanks Misha for your kind comment And also big thanks for lyrical inspiration, you mentioned Moomin World in some earlier comment and it kind of pushed the translation forward - I thought that it would be cool to use that on the starting line, because there is at least one on this forum who knows the reference

Link to the Finnish version is in the previous reply and also on this version's detail area in SoundCloud.

Janne

Thanks Will for your kind feedback I have no wife so no-one to complain about my dream women or the lyrical content

Janne

Thanks Dave, I'm glad to hear you enjoyed the story and the song

Janne

Thanks Deryk for your positive words

Janne

Thanks Janice and Bud, I appreciate your kind comment

Janne

Nicely eased into with the cello. The lyric is visual, original and evocative and I don't think much was lost in translation. Much enjoyed the listen.

Thanks Alan for your kind words

Janne

Thanks Kenny for your positive feedback, I'm glad you liked the progression

Janne

Thanks Ezekiel's Storm for your kind feedback Now with the new BIAB VST I cannot remove one bar from the lead-in (the cursor in VST would show incorrectly), I have to fill that with something else, so I usually repeat couple of bars from the intro and this time I choose only the cello section. I'm glad it worked for you

Janne

Thanks Tangmo for your kind and uplifting comments about my lyrics

Janne

Janne,

Really nice song!
With a very good melody and a beautiful chord progression.
I feel your usual wonderful sense in this tune strongly.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi

Thank you Shigeki Adachi for your heartwarming feedback I hope spring is progressing well in Japan

Janne

Very nice Janne!! The melody is very pretty, and I love the guitar/strings sound. Very well produced and mixed. Everything works well!! Take care. Greg

Thanks Greg for your kind feedback, glad you liked everything

Janne