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Posted By: Rustyspoon# Needle In Hay - 04/20/19 12:01 AM
Hi Folks,

Here is my latest experiment for your enjoyment or displeasure. Please forgive linguistic mistakes, I admit this was faaar from perfect. Same goes for story line, I doubt it bears solid coherency smile Critique is ALWAYS welcomed. Thank you!

Needle In Hay


Midi arrangement in vArranger. Mixed in Cakewalk. Synths of Halion.
Band:
1173: Accordion PopCalypso
2903: Bass Acoustic
Drums: BossaRock
Guitar:1401: Electric Rhythm
Guitar2: 3162 Baritone Electric
913: Piano, Smooth Poppy
2785: Flute

Lyrics:
Rusted out parts, leaky gaskets,
I see an undertaker carrying my casket.
His face is frozen still, like Calacatta marble
I hear the wheels of a catafalque rattling loud.

You're so vulnerable inside your shell, frightened of the night.
But thousands of years couldn't erase the urge.
Follow blindly into the light.

Sands of pyramids are seeping through my fingers.
And heart adrenalized like a wild party swinger.
Forever young mummies rest in sarcophagi.
I'm jealous of their dreams, their long dreams.

Past will leave dust on the table, perhaps some fossils and coal.
Still thousands of years can't erase the hope of finding the proof of soul.

Walking thin line on hot wire, got this feeling of a frequent mile flyer.
Laughing raven piercing clouds sees the Earth covered in ash and flowers.

Stencil prophecies written in stone,
To bypass cookie cutter days.
But thousands of years didn't stop the craving
Of searching of needles in hay.
Posted By: rayc Re: Needle In Hay - 04/20/19 08:16 AM
Great stuff Misha,
I really enjoyed the fun and insight of the lyrics...the irony of stencils and cookie cutters is cool.
Needles in a haystack, sands in the hour glass, gasket caskets and finally coal powered soul searching.
Musically VERY enjoyable as well.
You're a font of fun and a engaging tunes.
Posted By: Torrey Bliss Re: Needle In Hay - 04/20/19 08:52 AM
Very nice work Misha! Whenever I listen to your songs, the lilt and expressiveness of your voice reminds me of George Harrison! You have a wonderful ability to be inventive with melody and chord structure! Impressive again! Thanks, Torrey
Posted By: Belladonna Re: Needle In Hay - 04/20/19 12:49 PM
Great imaginary!! Love the sort of ominous feeling of this song. I can almost see this as a metal song, I think my son would love it. Very different and well produced.
Posted By: Greg Johnson Re: Needle In Hay - 04/20/19 02:59 PM
Really engaging listen!! Perfect RT choices. Some wonderful lyrics! These grabbed me right off:


Rusted out parts, leaky gaskets,
I see an undertaker carrying my casket

Really great stuff!! Take care. Greg
Posted By: Birchwood Re: Needle In Hay - 04/20/19 04:52 PM
Hi Misha,

A very nice song and very interesting lyrics.
I liked the way you work with the vocals.
I reacted on Soundcloud as well

Thanks,
Hans
Posted By: floyd jane Re: Needle In Hay - 04/20/19 04:53 PM
Misha,

Inventive lyric and music and use of BIAB - becoming the hallmark of your music.

Well done. An enjoyable listen.

fj
Posted By: rsdean Re: Needle In Hay - 04/20/19 05:39 PM
Misha,

I love the lyrics on this song. Along with a great mix and vocal and you have a real winner...

Excellent!

Bob
Posted By: Jim Re: Needle In Hay - 04/20/19 05:47 PM
WoW...

I wonder how many here will miss out on this great poetic piece...
Or maybe I'm just seeing more than is there...
Who are you?...
What is your educational background?...
Are you a disguised poet showing you can also write background melodies for you poetry?...
The lyrics of this song matches many of the poetic pieces I have read...
The background tracks & melody emphasizes the somber tone of your poetry...
This song could easily be dissected in an advanced level English class along with Faulkner & others...
WoW!

I just read & played again...
WoW!
Posted By: BlueAttitude Re: Needle In Hay - 04/21/19 01:18 PM
Very cool and original as per usual, Misha!

Added a new word to my vocabulary too, needed to google "catafalque" smile
Posted By: Rustyspoon# Re: Needle In Hay - 04/21/19 04:57 PM
Ray,
"coal powered soul searching." (!) exellent line for next song (will ask permission to use it) smile Thank you for your support and excellent comments!
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Torrey,
Thank you for listening and kind words. I always appreciate your feedback!
One day, when I have something worthy, I will find the courage of asking you to join smile
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Belladonna, Thank you for listening and nice comments! Hmm, I never thought about doing Metal music. Maybe I should give it a try smile
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Greg, Thank you for taking time to listen and your support!
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Hans, Thank you for your positive comments. And BIG thanks for comment on SC. You are right! I listened to this next day and all frequency was all over the place. Will have to sit with the mix a bit longer.
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FJ, Thank you for your time and nice words!

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Bob, Thank you for excellent feedback on lyrics! I initially thought of doing a parody on morbid subject, but it came out a bit darker than I anticipated smile
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Jim, you are too kind!
Well, I have a degree in arts (not music related) I have done sculpture for some years...clay, bronze...but who need arts these days? smile
The ships had left their bays,
their wooden structures obsolete, by standards of today
and yet, their ghosts are present in my dreams...
their flags are wobbling high, they're played by passing winds,
like cat is playing with it's prey, then stops...when life is gone.
The sacred empty space of soul that can't be filled with fashion, food or gold,
like language that was lost, as weathered tombstone.
I have no say in this, I watch the cycle with a hint of mirth,
at times I wish I could... swim back in time,
like crayfish, backwards,
from the death to birth.

Jim, see what you made me do...? smile I only wrote about a dozen of things in English prior joining this forum. I listen to songs, read lyrics, get help with my text here, it works smile Thank you for your support!
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Dave, sorry it has to be "dark" vocabulary, next time I will try to make something up with positive meaning smile Thank you for kind words!

Misha.
Posted By: Scott C Re: Needle In Hay - 04/22/19 08:39 PM
Another excellent tune Misha. Super vocal and delivery. I think the star of this song is your lyric. What a cool lyric.s So many images described in the song. Well done
Posted By: Rustyspoon# Re: Needle In Hay - 04/22/19 11:37 PM
Scott,
Thank you for listening and nice feedback!
I appreciate you comment on lyrics! I am always unsure how native speakers will react to my experiments smile

Misha.
Posted By: Tangmo Re: Needle In Hay - 04/22/19 11:59 PM
Sweet extra production (octave up back-vocals set back in the mix) and a lyric that requires study. I "get" the imagery at a second-grade level, but I have no idea what the song is about. I think I might even be disappointed if YOU did. Thoroughly enjoyed the listen.
Posted By: Skyline Re: Needle In Hay - 04/23/19 05:21 AM
Very original lyrics to say the least! Your tracks always draw me in as the melodies and instrumentation are always so different and well crafted. Very enjoyable, thanks!

John
Posted By: Noel96 Re: Needle In Hay - 04/23/19 06:50 AM
Misha,

I always enjoy your melodies and your arrangement of them. Your international heritage rings loud and clear throughout your productions.

Very entertaining indeed.

Regards,
Noel
Posted By: Deryk - PG Music Re: Needle In Hay - 04/23/19 11:51 AM
Nicely done! A breath of fresh air, as always. Really diggin' the abstract lyricism and flutes in the backing tracks. Gives a really unique and whimsical quality. Love the melodies too.

Thanks for sharing smile
Posted By: Joe -PG Music Re: Needle In Hay - 04/23/19 01:03 PM
Nice work on this RustySpoon! The mix is quite excellent on this. Great layering on the vocals too. Well done!
Posted By: Janice & Bud Re: Needle In Hay - 04/24/19 04:43 PM
"Rusted out parts, leaky gaskets,
I see an undertaker carrying my casket"

Now that alone is worth the price of admission smile

What a video this could be!!!

We've always enjoyed a good "you connect the dots" song and, man, is this ever a fine example.

The write, the vocals, the band, the arrangement...everything well demonstrates your high, high level of creativity.

Kudos!

J&B
Posted By: Rustyspoon# Re: Needle In Hay - 04/24/19 07:47 PM
Tangmo,
Thank you for listening and you interesting comments!
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John,
Thank you for your time and supportive comments here and on SC!
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Noel,
Thank you for taking time in on this and positive feedback! As wise man said: "you are what you eat" smile
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Deryk,
Thank you! So true, I like that: "whimsical quality"! smile
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Joe,
Thank you for listening and nice comment. I think I fell short addressing high frequencies... Mix is a little too thin.
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J&B,
Thank you for listening and your awesome feedback!
Still, I suck at mixing smile Next morning I listened to this... and realized this was a step back. Bud you do not have to be soft with me, I take your hints seriously.

Misha.
Posted By: MarioD Re: Needle In Hay - 04/24/19 08:06 PM
Misha, all I can say is WOW! This is a really good song. The mood you set was perfect. Your vocals and backing tracks were very good but it was your lyrics that took it over the top for me.

Keep up the excellent work.
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