Hi All here is a New PopHymn Song called "Tears" of which I posted the instrumental awhile back,
The demo vocal is by Mr F Allseto a dodgy character! and I put no base Guitar in it because im getting it ready for a trio to sing and they have no base player.I didnt put drums because I felt it might make it up tempo too much.The lyrics come from a the book of Psalms 56:8,the verses from a sermon by a friend and the breakdown from a local headstone with a Spurgeon poem.Hope you enjoy .
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Acoustic Piano 1277
Synth pad Pop Believe 1543
Acoustic Guitar 1702
Electric Guitar 843


Open up the book of Tears,
Open up the book of Tears,
Read the chapters thats within,
All the Tears that Ive forgotten remember them again.
Open up the book of Tears,
Open up the book of Tears
You've counted and you've stored everyone of them

My Tears are caused by being a fool,
And some are caused by circumstance beyond control.

All the Tears that Ive forgotten remember them again.
Some Tears are caused by this fallen world
And some Tears cry deep within my soul
Lord I'm cryin ,Yes I'm Cryin to you
Tears......
Let no man think he can change too soon,
I found it midnight I thought it was noon


Open up the book of Tears,
Open up the book of Tears,
Read the chapters thats within,
Open up the book of Tears,
Open up the book of Tears
You've counted and you've stored everyone of them

All the Tears that Ive forgotten remember them again.
Some Tears are caused by this fallen world
And some Tears cry deep within my soul
Lord I'm cryin ,Yes I'm Cryin to you
Tears......
Let no man think he can change too soon,
I found it midnight I thought it was noon

A very unusual unique sounding composition...
I'm left wondering what effects you put on "Mr F Allseto's" vocals...
Pretty cool sounding!

Ha Ha Jim,
Mr F came out of having a very flat Irish voice and didnt have anyone to do the demo lol .So I pitched it with Nectar 2 hard over as far as it would go.It didnt sound awful and my friends will be able to follow the melody so I left it in!Invention is the mother of nessacity! Thanks for listening H

Interesting. The vocals were pretty glitchy - intentionally, I assume.

The vocals are also a bit hard to make out.

I have an inherent dislike of lo-fi. But I'm happy to make an exception in this case. I found it a interesting listen.

Hi Hugh,

You made an interesting and daring song. Interesting for where the lyrics came from and daring for the special way it was sung.
I can follow your reason for not using percussion. That electric guitar makes the tempo and has a nice, dominant imput.
I heard parts in the song that made me wonder why this wasn't sung in a 'normal'way. The voice was good enough and has a good reach.

I can not say I like it, because of the vocals, but I've enjoyed it (as you hoped).
Using Nectar 2 can be the cause...

Hans

Thanks Hans,David
I will get someone to sing it at the pro level and it should sound professional but might lose the quirkiness pitched vocals have.The vocals shouldnt work at any level but they have a strange attractiveness to them which I think maybe down to the subject matter of the song .I left it glitchy David as it added an oddness to it.Again I will get someone to sing it but my aim was to get a demo for my friends to sing but I thought id throw it out there as it was an oddity vocals wise ,
Glad you enjoyed the listen H

I liked the melody of this song.

I found the vocals very hard to understand. The FX used ..... well, that made things worse in my opinion. It's often better to run a straight up vocal with some reverb than to try to make it sound "better" with off the wall FX. If Tom Waits can sing a song... anyone can. Well, almost anyone. I'd redo the vox track w/o the FX. If you need pitch correction, use it, but leave off the chorus and flanging and whatever else is on the vox track.

Wow - despite the heavy vocal effects and how hard they were to understand, I found it somehow fit with the nature of the song. They almost become another instrument, in a unique and strange way. A very bold and daring tune for sure, and simultaneously dizzying and attention grabbing.

Thanks for sharing

Hi Herb and Deryk,
Yeah totally agreeing with you Herb ,it needs a vocalist for sure.On the other hand Deryk the crazy vocal works on the quirky scale and has some draw because of the nature of the lyrics and they cryee feel to it.Its worth noting that its only a guide vocal for my friends to sing and they all hate my real voice lol but love me lol.
Glad you listened and were captivated Hugh

Great work on this Hugh. A very moving piece that certainly conveys a mood. Well done!

Well written, arranged and mix.

The vocal FX are beyond our pay grade as we use such a minimum of them.

Obviously you were aiming for something different and for that you used them to good effect.

Thanks for the info on how you constructed the lyric...fascinating.

Enjoyed it!

J&B

Well worth the listen. I'd like to hear more. It seems made for public performance, outdoor, like at a fair or concert.