Take The Pain Away

Posted by: floyd jane

Take The Pain Away - 11/12/19 10:36 AM

Hangovers and heartaches.


TAKE THE PAIN AWAY

an empty bottle by my pillow
leaves a bitter taste and a head crackin' throb
our final moments coming back to me
so jim beam didn't do his job

i find myself wonderin'
why the hell the sun came up today
you'd think that someone would know better
and make the damn thing go away
   
   don't they know without you i got nothing but misery
   nothing that makes me want to face the day
   take it any way you choose all i know is i need something
   to take the pain away

you were more than my everything
can't be clearer than that
now you're gone so there's nothing left of me
just a shadow where i once sat
   
   don't they know without you i got nothing but misery
   nothing that makes me want to face the day
   take it any way you choose all i know is i need something
   to take the pain away




Tracks:

RealTracks in song: 1684:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopPromiseCrispHeld Ev16 100
RealTracks in song: 2585:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PunkHeldPlus Ev 165
RealTracks in song: 1037:Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm NorthernRockBallad Ev 065
RealTracks in song: ~~688:Organ, B3, Background Pop Ev 065
RealTracks in song: 2690:Guitar, Electric, Soloist Slow16thsPopBrentSimple Ev16 075
Royalty Free Loops




As always, comments of any kind are welcomed.
Have at it.

fj
Posted by: VideoTrack

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/12/19 11:10 AM

Really excellent Floyd.

What a great mix, perfect levels, and a top band you got there.

Lyrically quite sensational. 'so jim beam didn't do his job', 'just a shadow where i once sat'
What a fantastic lines.
Posted by: PeterF

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/12/19 12:28 PM

floyd

Really great build, captivating, and immediately memorable.

Excellent lyrics, vocal, and song structure a really enjoyable thoroughly professional song.

The bass followed the song really well was it a RT?
Also wondering about the guitar that starts at 1.34 playing a riff not credited - one of the loops?

Superb.

Peter
(who did the artwork?)
Posted by: TuneMonger

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/12/19 04:11 PM

Good tune, a bit dark but not too much. Jim Beam line is great. Vocal and mix is outstanding as always.
Posted by: Greg Johnson

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/12/19 04:53 PM

As frequently happens with an FJ song, I copied a few lines I wanted to paste, and quickly realized that they didn't stand out (like pulling a 7 footer off the NBA court before you realize they're all that size)!! Just an excellent, excellent write!! A dark, poignant lyric and a haunting melody! And Floyd, how does someone who's been in music forever get better at singing in their 60's? Damn!! Great stuff!!! Take care. Greg
Posted by: Torrey Bliss

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/12/19 05:32 PM

Floyd, what a picture you painted with these lyrics! The overall sound of this song is at the top of your work that I have heard! It has such a beautiful feel to it....everything here is sitting in the perfect place to my ears!! That chorus is over the top great! Thanks, Torrey
Posted by: Rob4580

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/12/19 05:37 PM

Ah! Those hangover days. Aching head and heart.
I see you have both. Great production.
Really enjoyed my listen Floyd.
Thanks for posting. Rob4580
Posted by: Ember - PG Music

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/12/19 05:40 PM

This song really hit me in the feels. There was definitely a depth of emotion to this particular song that I really enjoyed. Thanks for taking the time to share it with us.
Posted by: Robertkc

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/12/19 06:46 PM

Floyd,

The band and build of this edge-of-darkness song is a thing of beauty... a little British folk in the acoustic moving into Southern rock by the time the organ comes in.
A fine,slightly restrained vocal that suits the mood of the lyrics.... very professionally produced,of course!

Robert
Posted by: bluage

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/12/19 08:44 PM

Originally Posted By: floyd jane

Have at it.

fj


Mr. Jane:

"Have at it." "Have at"...what ???!!! What could anyone "have at" this song of yours, Take The Pain Away ???

I deliberately, intentionally, purposely, never, ever read other listener's comments on a Users' Forum member's song post, because I do not want anybody else's thoughts and opinions to influence my own. But in this case, because your song rendered me literally speechless upon listening to it for the first time, I abandoned the above-stated rule and chose a statement by another listener, "robertkc", to fill in for my temporary loss of words:

"The band and build of this edge-of-darkness song is a thing of beauty..."

Obviously, you are one of the most prolific songwriters on the forum, and if being prolific could offer anything to other songwriters that they could use to sharpen their craft, then Take The Pain Away would be an outstanding, peerless example of how staying on a steady path while working towards a goal -- songwriting, in this case -- will eventually lead that hard-working, midnight-oil-burning songwriter to produce songs that are, as 'robertkc' illuminated, things of beauty.

The brevity of the song's duration only serves to point out the economy of expression you employed in the song's construction. The lyrics go straight to the bleeding heart of the drama in the song, as swift and as unrelenting as heartbreak causes tears to flow from the eyes of the one whose heart has been shattered. The PAIN described by the title is as immediately felt as a knife wound. You're not playing around, here, Mister. Not. At. All. The suffering is so real that even a person who had not experienced such hurt could feel it simply because of the empathy that the words and the music plant in the listener's heart.

Those Real Tracks you selected were waiting for you to put them in a song in which they could reveal their power as musical accompaniment for your anguished lyrics.

It would be too easy for me to say that this song 'is one of your best', but I believe that would be the wrong thing for me to say, and only because, as far i'm concerned, you've been producing your 'best' for as long as I've participated in this forum.

LOREN
Posted by: Leon1

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/12/19 09:50 PM

Hi Floyd

Like Greg said, one shouldn't cut and paste lines when they're all so good, but I'm going to anyway.
I was particularly taken by this stanza (and the way you sang it):

i find myself wonderin'
why the hell the sun came up today
you'd think that someone would know better
and make the damn thing go away

All up, yet another beautifully written and performed song.

Regards,
Leon
Posted by: Crossroads

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/13/19 12:10 AM

Dear Floyd,

the first thing I noticed was that brilliantly sounding mix - so bright, so clear.

And it's a good song, too (wouldn't have expected anything else...), the music captures the mood of the lyrics very well, and it's being sung jusrt 'floydish' (which I would like to propose to include in the synonym dictionaries as another word for 'extremely well-sung').

All the best,

Stefan
Posted by: Chris37

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/13/19 01:17 AM

Hi Floyd,
Your song is very well built.
Each instrument is in place when and where it is the more efficient. Your voice takes us in your universe. Christian
Posted by: rayc

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/13/19 01:32 AM

An excellent melody, narrative & arrangement.
the best part for me, other than your voice, is the bass: I really like the way it works through the verse and preps for the chorus.
Stellar.
Posted by: sslechta

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/13/19 07:22 AM

Nice song FJ! Loved it. The shakers throughout the song were a nice touch. I really like your ability to tell your story through vocals/lyrics. As others said, very well produced. Keep 'em coming sir!
Posted by: Deryk - PG Music

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/13/19 07:49 AM

Really nice work on this one - really sincere in it's delivery, and your vocals are top notch on this one. I love the instrumentation as well - it all flows tremendously well. Thanks for sharing smile
Posted by: BlueAttitude

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/13/19 09:51 AM

Hi floyd,

This is my new favorite from you I think. I wonder how many times I've said that over the last few years?

Everything is just "right" about this.

Great opening with just the acoustic and vocal. And then the build in dynamics adding the shaker then the bass (great bassline), and holding off on the drums until the chorus. Obviously a lot of thought went into the arrangement, and it paid off big time.

Love your vocal, and great writing too. Favorite line "so jim beam didn't do his job".

Really, really good, floyd!
Posted by: cliftond

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/13/19 11:30 AM

There is nothing about a hangover that I miss. HA, Enjoyed this one Floyd, your harmony carried well in the background, that little shaker stands out in a nice way also. Cliff
Posted by: Marty Ricciotti

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/14/19 03:44 AM

Dear Floyd.
My goodness you do an awesome job with your songs.
And you cover such a wide range of topics and do it so well.

This song sure brought back old feelings and I'm so glad to not have had any whiskey for many many years.

Thanks for what you do here in this forum.

I have this vision of you toiling away every day in the studio working on several projects at the same time.
Gotta be some thing like that going on to have so many great tracks on this forum.
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/14/19 01:16 PM

Originally Posted By: VideoTrack
Really excellent Floyd.

What a great mix, perfect levels, and a top band you got there.

Lyrically quite sensational. 'so jim beam didn't do his job', 'just a shadow where i once sat'
What a fantastic lines.


Trev - I always appreciate having you stop by. Thans for the great comments...
Posted by: Teletwanger

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/14/19 02:30 PM

Very good song. Great arrangement and vocals.
Posted by: jannesan

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/15/19 07:35 AM

Rhythmically reminds me of Sweet Home Alabama, but definitely nothing sweet in this song, dark but familiar story. Great arrangement and mix, nice acoustic intro, organ fits perfectly and the solo guitarist is the final icing on the ca... bottle. A snap at 3:17, soundcloud addition, perhaps?

Janne
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/15/19 12:51 PM

Originally Posted By: PeterF
floyd

Really great build, captivating, and immediately memorable.

Excellent lyrics, vocal, and song structure a really enjoyable thoroughly professional song.

The bass followed the song really well was it a RT?
Also wondering about the guitar that starts at 1.34 playing a riff not credited - one of the loops?

Superb.

Peter
(who did the artwork?)


Peter - thanks for the nice comments. Both the bass and the riff are loops - been fiddling around with more loops lately to help get a few new sounds and to conjure different writing styles - gives me "something new" over just picking up my guitar (which tends to end up similar chords patterns over periods of time).
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/15/19 01:08 PM

Originally Posted By: TuneMonger
Good tune, a bit dark but not too much. Jim Beam line is great. Vocal and mix is outstanding as always.


Appreciate that...thanks!
Posted by: beatmaster

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/15/19 02:40 PM

Floyd this is a stand out piece, You had to have put a good bit of time on this, But it shows in the quality of it all.

Nicely done.

Thanks
Posted by: Will Josef

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/15/19 04:58 PM

Floyd Jane, you are exceptional! I am not talking about production values here. but more about the way you compose, the way you just always make a completely fitting and convincing arrangement and composition for your lyrics... it is truly unique... I just love the way you work with music (even if you work in completely different genres from me)!

Will
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/16/19 09:06 AM

Originally Posted By: Greg Johnson
As frequently happens with an FJ song, I copied a few lines I wanted to paste, and quickly realized that they didn't stand out (like pulling a 7 footer off the NBA court before you realize they're all that size)!! Just an excellent, excellent write!! A dark, poignant lyric and a haunting melody! And Floyd, how does someone who's been in music forever get better at singing in their 60's? Damn!! Great stuff!!! Take care. Greg


Thanks, Greg!! You made me feel 7 feet tall!! smile

I've lost a few notes from the top of my range (you should have heard me when I was 24...)...so I have to make up for that somehow... smile
Posted by: Jim

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/16/19 11:21 AM

Excellent lyrics with numerous vivid outstanding lines...
Strong delivery...
Wonderfully simple mix...
With nothing getting in the way of your poignant vocal...
I really enjoy listening!
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/16/19 01:47 PM

Originally Posted By: Torrey Bliss
Floyd, what a picture you painted with these lyrics! The overall sound of this song is at the top of your work that I have heard! It has such a beautiful feel to it....everything here is sitting in the perfect place to my ears!! That chorus is over the top great! Thanks, Torrey


Torrey - thanks for that very nice review. (Your new one is killer!)
Posted by: Scott C

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/17/19 06:25 AM

Very cool vocal Floyd. Boy does your backtrack ever stand out as well. All the instruments so well balanced but all identifiable. The guitar was very cool as well.
Posted by: jptjptjpt

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/17/19 08:51 AM

Outstanding use of BIAB. Powerful song. Great lyrics. Vocals convey the message of the song peferctly. Good one!

And thanks for listen and comments on my song. I appreciate it.
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/17/19 10:14 AM

Originally Posted By: Rob4580
Ah! Those hangover days. Aching head and heart.
I see you have both. Great production.
Really enjoyed my listen Floyd.
Thanks for posting. Rob4580


Thanks for listening, Rob...



Originally Posted By: Ember - PG Music
This song really hit me in the feels. There was definitely a depth of emotion to this particular song that I really enjoyed. Thanks for taking the time to share it with us.


"...really hit me in the feels." Ember, that is a great line!!
Posted by: Deej56

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/17/19 12:48 PM

Floyd,

Love the clean guitar opening, then followed by that shaker in the left ear. Terrific vocal on this (as usual). Catchy chorus, with a sweet harmony behind. Really crisp throughout—and, wow, that lead guitar solo. Might be on of my favorites from you (among many). Awesome track!

My humble regards,

Deej
Posted by: Birchwood

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/18/19 05:50 AM

Hi Floyd,

Since you were in my hometown Haarlem, you make only good songs!
I'm glad you make songs concerning pain and sorrow, because you're at your best then. No, I'm joking.
I really like this one about your hangover. You better use Havanarum or red wine (still joking).

What I like even more than your good songs is the bright way they sound. I'm convinced you can learn me something here...
So, I have nothing to complain about, or give you advise in (except the rum). You made a very good piece of work here!

Thanks for that,
Hans
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/18/19 03:04 PM

Originally Posted By: Robertkc
Floyd,

The band and build of this edge-of-darkness song is a thing of beauty... a little British folk in the acoustic moving into Southern rock by the time the organ comes in.
A fine,slightly restrained vocal that suits the mood of the lyrics.... very professionally produced,of course!

Robert


I appreciate that, Robert...
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/19/19 03:20 AM

Originally Posted By: bluage
Originally Posted By: floyd jane

Have at it.

fj


Mr. Jane:

"Have at it." "Have at"...what ???!!! What could anyone "have at" this song of yours, Take The Pain Away ???

I deliberately, intentionally, purposely, never, ever read other listener's comments on a Users' Forum member's song post, because I do not want anybody else's thoughts and opinions to influence my own. But in this case, because your song rendered me literally speechless upon listening to it for the first time, I abandoned the above-stated rule and chose a statement by another listener, "robertkc", to fill in for my temporary loss of words:

"The band and build of this edge-of-darkness song is a thing of beauty..."

Obviously, you are one of the most prolific songwriters on the forum, and if being prolific could offer anything to other songwriters that they could use to sharpen their craft, then Take The Pain Away would be an outstanding, peerless example of how staying on a steady path while working towards a goal -- songwriting, in this case -- will eventually lead that hard-working, midnight-oil-burning songwriter to produce songs that are, as 'robertkc' illuminated, things of beauty.

The brevity of the song's duration only serves to point out the economy of expression you employed in the song's construction. The lyrics go straight to the bleeding heart of the drama in the song, as swift and as unrelenting as heartbreak causes tears to flow from the eyes of the one whose heart has been shattered. The PAIN described by the title is as immediately felt as a knife wound. You're not playing around, here, Mister. Not. At. All. The suffering is so real that even a person who had not experienced such hurt could feel it simply because of the empathy that the words and the music plant in the listener's heart.

Those Real Tracks you selected were waiting for you to put them in a song in which they could reveal their power as musical accompaniment for your anguished lyrics.

It would be too easy for me to say that this song 'is one of your best', but I believe that would be the wrong thing for me to say, and only because, as far i'm concerned, you've been producing your 'best' for as long as I've participated in this forum.

LOREN



A delightful review. Thanks for that, Loren...
Posted by: Janice & Bud

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/19/19 02:28 PM

Before we get to the goodness of the song in it's totality we'd like to
point out that this mix is over the top good. The soundstage and
the dynamics are as good as anything we listen to...and we listen
a lot.

OK, some specifics:

From our perspective the tune is square in the middle of our
Americana wheelhouse and you sing the heck out of it.

Your mashup of BiaB and the loops is outstanding. The drums
and the bass line are immediately attention getting in a
very good way.

Any songsmith can write a heartache song. Very, very
few can write one like this. As Janice said you can immediately
feel the darkness.

"i find myself wonderin'
why the hell the sun came up today
you'd think that someone would know better
and make the damn thing go away"

Janice laser beamed in immediately on how powerful
that verse is.

Just when one thinks the mr jane bar couldn't be
moved any higher....

J&B

PS Nice album cover too!




Posted by: Ezekiel's Storm

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/19/19 04:16 PM

I like the sparse instrumentation you start the song with, especially the lone acoustic. This is my favorite melody I have heard from you. It evokes a haunting melancholy mood. Masterful lyric writing!
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/20/19 07:27 AM

Originally Posted By: Leon1
Hi Floyd

Like Greg said, one shouldn't cut and paste lines when they're all so good, but I'm going to anyway.
I was particularly taken by this stanza (and the way you sang it):

i find myself wonderin'
why the hell the sun came up today
you'd think that someone would know better
and make the damn thing go away

All up, yet another beautifully written and performed song.

Regards,
Leon


Leon - Thanks! Always nice to have a guy who write well quote some lines... smile


Originally Posted By: Crossroads
Dear Floyd,

the first thing I noticed was that brilliantly sounding mix - so bright, so clear.

And it's a good song, too (wouldn't have expected anything else...), the music captures the mood of the lyrics very well, and it's being sung jusrt 'floydish' (which I would like to propose to include in the synonym dictionaries as another word for 'extremely well-sung').

All the best,

Stefan


Stefan - "floydish"... HAHAHA!! That's great! Thanks...
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/20/19 02:54 PM

Originally Posted By: Chris37
Hi Floyd,
Your song is very well built.
Each instrument is in place when and where it is the more efficient. Your voice takes us in your universe. Christian


Christian - thanks for stopping by and having a listen...
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/21/19 07:45 AM

Originally Posted By: rayc
An excellent melody, narrative & arrangement.
the best part for me, other than your voice, is the bass: I really like the way it works through the verse and preps for the chorus.
Stellar.


Thanks, Ray. The bass is a loop and I used it "as is" - no extra processing - it just seemed so "present" as it was...



Originally Posted By: sslechta
Nice song FJ! Loved it. The shakers throughout the song were a nice touch. I really like your ability to tell your story through vocals/lyrics. As others said, very well produced. Keep 'em coming sir!


Steve - nice to have you drop in on one of my songs... as I recall, you are not a fan of Country (or the singer-songwriter thing...)
Posted by: sslechta

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/21/19 08:14 AM

Originally Posted By: floyd jane
...as I recall, you are not a fan of Country (or the singer-songwriter thing...)

More-so on the Country part... smile

I still like to hear an awesome recording though, and you have a very high standard on yours.
Posted by: Guitarhacker

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/21/19 09:01 AM

Nice work. Good lyric write and the tracks are spot on. I really like the harmonies in the chorus.

Yep...a good one.
Posted by: dani48

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/21/19 10:10 AM

Hi, Floyd !

Been away too much and when
back what do I hear, one of the
absolute best tunes you´ve done !

Cheers
Dani
Posted by: mkg50 (Mike G)

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/21/19 02:42 PM

Top shelf Floyd - the song, the band, the vocals, the sound!
I think we can all identify with the sentiments in your song, still, you make it sound so fresh.
You had me from the first verse: Rhyming "throb" with "so jim beam didn't do his job".
Cheers,
Mike
Posted by: HearToLearn

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/21/19 03:24 PM

I really am not sure where to start. I know for a FACT, I am going to leave something out.

1st off-This is my favorite song from you. That's been said a lot, but I have a specific reason for it. I absolutely love your songs that are built with a story. You are a master of that; and have done it more times than I can count. This song is not that style of writing.

To me pretty much everything about this song is you going in a direction that is different. The entire song sounds new. That being said, it also sounds like you've been writing this way for years.

With this style, trying to say a lot without the lyrics doing it can be a challenge. Then it turns more to interplay of phrasing with every element. It relies MUCH more heavily on orchestration and arrangement in a way that really builds. That argument could be made for many genres of music; but to this is essential. It's not only building instrumentation for the sake of adding emotion to a song. It focuses much more on keeping the ear interested as well. However, you don't want it to be distracting. It shouldn't take you out of the song.

All of that being covered (like you didn't know it) brings me to the finer points :

Your vocal fits this perfectly. There's some great emotion to your singing. It's haunting, which I love.

The interplay between the vocal melody and guitar parts are fantastic! There is a groove that's established that compliments and supports the vocal as though it were written specifically for this song.

The picked the perfect real band styles to make it sound real. By no means does this sound like it's out of the box.

Those drums are placed and chosen so well that I sat here thinking "Yeah. That's how it's done." Looking forward to every fill. The entire time thinking it was just a really well played part. Great choice. The sound of the drums was excellent as well.

The shaker, the organ, every part building to keep interest and bring the song forward until the final few measures. What a great way to bring it back down to the essence without it just having a blunt ending. The release was a truly great choice in my book.

Man, I could go on and on; but at the heart of it I am really drawn to this song. I love the mood. I love the groove. I wouldn't change a thing. Ok, I would maybe lower the shaker slightly when it first comes in. That would change nothing; but at least it's not all compliments all the time. wink

Thank you for not only sharing this; but writing this. Is a new direction that I'm really liking. The cool thing is; there's room for the new creations along with the others. I hope you had fun with it!

(Spoken into my phone, so I'm positive there will be errors. Just had to post something about this great song.)
Posted by: Will Josef

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/21/19 04:33 PM

Very nice track! The music and lyrics just works very well together.
Enjoyed listening to this!

Thanks for sharing!
Will
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/22/19 07:42 AM

Originally Posted By: Deryk - PG Music
Really nice work on this one - really sincere in it's delivery, and your vocals are top notch on this one. I love the instrumentation as well - it all flows tremendously well. Thanks for sharing smile


Deryk - always nice to have you drop by...


Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
Hi floyd,

This is my new favorite from you I think. I wonder how many times I've said that over the last few years?

Everything is just "right" about this.

Great opening with just the acoustic and vocal. And then the build in dynamics adding the shaker then the bass (great bassline), and holding off on the drums until the chorus. Obviously a lot of thought went into the arrangement, and it paid off big time.

Love your vocal, and great writing too. Favorite line "so jim beam didn't do his job".

Really, really good, floyd!



Dave - I do appreciate such a flattering review... If I could make every new song your "new favorite", then how could I ever complain about that!!! Thanks for your continued support...
Posted by: jimmadsen

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/22/19 08:56 AM

Impressive track - well written!
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/22/19 02:52 PM

Originally Posted By: cliftond
There is nothing about a hangover that I miss. HA, Enjoyed this one Floyd, your harmony carried well in the background, that little shaker stands out in a nice way also. Cliff


Thanks, cliff...


Originally Posted By: Marty Ricciotti
Dear Floyd.
My goodness you do an awesome job with your songs.
And you cover such a wide range of topics and do it so well.

This song sure brought back old feelings and I'm so glad to not have had any whiskey for many many years.

Thanks for what you do here in this forum.

I have this vision of you toiling away every day in the studio working on several projects at the same time.
Gotta be some thing like that going on to have so many great tracks on this forum.



Marty - thanks for all of that. I do spend a good deal of time working on music... writing is most important... but production is a close second... it's my "happy place"... smile smile
Posted by: MarioD

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/22/19 03:56 PM

I'm late to the party and everything I wanted to say already has been said. IMHO this is one of if not your best to date. But it seams I say that after hearing every song you sing!

I do have one question for you, how in hell can you keep coming up with winners after winners? Your songwriting, instrumentation, and processing skills are second to none.
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/23/19 07:28 AM

Originally Posted By: Teletwanger
Very good song. Great arrangement and vocals.


T - thanks!


Originally Posted By: jannesan
Rhythmically reminds me of Sweet Home Alabama, but definitely nothing sweet in this song, dark but familiar story. Great arrangement and mix, nice acoustic intro, organ fits perfectly and the solo guitarist is the final icing on the ca... bottle. A snap at 3:17, soundcloud addition, perhaps?

Janne


Thanks, Janne. I did not hear that snap until you pointed it out. I believe it is a bad edit on my part - the cut to add that last chord strum... I'll fix it (but won't re-load)...


Originally Posted By: beatmaster
Floyd this is a stand out piece, You had to have put a good bit of time on this, But it shows in the quality of it all.

Nicely done.

Thanks

Thanks, beatmaster!!....
Posted by: rsdean

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/23/19 10:29 AM

Floyd,

This song is truly awesome! I love the country-rock feel...

Your vocals are always superb and your lyrics put the listener right in the scene.

Loved it all!

Bob
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/24/19 07:52 AM

Originally Posted By: Will Josef
Floyd Jane, you are exceptional! I am not talking about production values here. but more about the way you compose, the way you just always make a completely fitting and convincing arrangement and composition for your lyrics... it is truly unique... I just love the way you work with music (even if you work in completely different genres from me)!

Will


Will - what a nice thing to say...not the "usual"... I really appreciate that...


Originally Posted By: Jim
Excellent lyrics with numerous vivid outstanding lines...
Strong delivery...
Wonderfully simple mix...
With nothing getting in the way of your poignant vocal...
I really enjoy listening!


Thanks, Jim. Good to have you back around...



Originally Posted By: Scott C
Very cool vocal Floyd. Boy does your backtrack ever stand out as well. All the instruments so well balanced but all identifiable. The guitar was very cool as well.


Scott - thanks for your continued support. And thanks for mentioning the solo guitar (which you often do). Getting that "right" is always something I strive for - and BIAB almost never lets me down in that regard (although it does sometimes take a while to get the pieces to fit just right).
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/25/19 02:54 AM

Originally Posted By: jptjptjpt
Outstanding use of BIAB. Powerful song. Great lyrics. Vocals convey the message of the song peferctly. Good one!

And thanks for listen and comments on my song. I appreciate it.


jpt - thanks! Nice to see ya in the Showcase!! Been a long time...


Originally Posted By: Deej56
Floyd,

Love the clean guitar opening, then followed by that shaker in the left ear. Terrific vocal on this (as usual). Catchy chorus, with a sweet harmony behind. Really crisp throughout—and, wow, that lead guitar solo. Might be on of my favorites from you (among many). Awesome track!

My humble regards,

Deej


Thanks, Deej...
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/25/19 06:04 PM

Originally Posted By: Birchwood
Hi Floyd,

Since you were in my hometown Haarlem, you make only good songs!
I'm glad you make songs concerning pain and sorrow, because you're at your best then. No, I'm joking.
I really like this one about your hangover. You better use Havanarum or red wine (still joking).

What I like even more than your good songs is the bright way they sound. I'm convinced you can learn me something here...
So, I have nothing to complain about, or give you advise in (except the rum). You made a very good piece of work here!

Thanks for that,
Hans


Thanks, Hans...



Originally Posted By: Ezekiel's Storm
I like the sparse instrumentation you start the song with, especially the lone acoustic. This is my favorite melody I have heard from you. It evokes a haunting melancholy mood. Masterful lyric writing!


I appreciate that, Scott...
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/26/19 06:44 AM

Originally Posted By: Janice & Bud
Before we get to the goodness of the song in it's totality we'd like to
point out that this mix is over the top good. The soundstage and
the dynamics are as good as anything we listen to...and we listen
a lot.

OK, some specifics:

From our perspective the tune is square in the middle of our
Americana wheelhouse and you sing the heck out of it.

Your mashup of BiaB and the loops is outstanding. The drums
and the bass line are immediately attention getting in a
very good way.

Any songsmith can write a heartache song. Very, very
few can write one like this. As Janice said you can immediately
feel the darkness.

"i find myself wonderin'
why the hell the sun came up today
you'd think that someone would know better
and make the damn thing go away"

Janice laser beamed in immediately on how powerful
that verse is.

Just when one thinks the mr jane bar couldn't be
moved any higher....

J&B

PS Nice album cover too!



HAHAHA! I'm so accustom to you guys being a part of my music, I nearly skipped over this without a response... Thanks for pointing out the write!... AND the mix...AND the genre...

I noticed early that I forgot to respond to Peter's question about the art work (album cover - HA!)... It was done by a guy who worked with my wife - after we had gone on a rafting trip down the Chattooga - Section 4 - of "Deliverance" fame...(I provided entertainment around the campfire that night).
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/27/19 08:54 AM

Originally Posted By: sslechta
Originally Posted By: floyd jane
...as I recall, you are not a fan of Country (or the singer-songwriter thing...)

More-so on the Country part... smile

I still like to hear an awesome recording though, and you have a very high standard on yours.


smile


Originally Posted By: Guitarhacker
Nice work. Good lyric write and the tracks are spot on. I really like the harmonies in the chorus.

Yep...a good one.


Thanks, Herb...



Originally Posted By: dani48
Hi, Floyd !

Been away too much and when
back what do I hear, one of the
absolute best tunes you´ve done !

Cheers
Dani


Good to see ya, Dani....
Posted by: dcuny

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/27/19 04:42 PM

Pro work, as usual. smile

Love this line:

our final moments coming back to me
so jim beam didn't do his job


But I'm disappointed you didn't use this rhyme:

take it any way you choose
all I know is I need some booze...
wink

When I saw the title of the song, I thought How do you write a song about a hangover?

Of course, I'm asking the wrong question.

Because it's about why there's a hangover, and the answer is a broken heart, of course.

Thanks for showing me how it's done!
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/29/19 05:58 AM

Originally Posted By: mkg50 (Mike G)
Top shelf Floyd - the song, the band, the vocals, the sound!
I think we can all identify with the sentiments in your song, still, you make it sound so fresh.
You had me from the first verse: Rhyming "throb" with "so jim beam didn't do his job".
Cheers,
Mike


Mike - thanks for the listen. (I kinda dug that rhyme, too...) smile
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/29/19 08:48 AM

Originally Posted By: HearToLearn
I really am not sure where to start. I know for a FACT, I am going to leave something out.

1st off-This is my favorite song from you. That's been said a lot, but I have a specific reason for it. I absolutely love your songs that are built with a story. You are a master of that; and have done it more times than I can count. This song is not that style of writing.

To me pretty much everything about this song is you going in a direction that is different. The entire song sounds new. That being said, it also sounds like you've been writing this way for years.


I like hearing that a song is a "favorite". That generally means they are getting better - or at least staying consistent.
New? Maybe not "everything" - or else it certainly wouldn't sound like I'd been doing it this way for years smile

Quote:

With this style, trying to say a lot without the lyrics doing it can be a challenge. Then it turns more to interplay of phrasing with every element. It relies MUCH more heavily on orchestration and arrangement in a way that really builds. That argument could be made for many genres of music; but to this is essential. It's not only building instrumentation for the sake of adding emotion to a song. It focuses much more on keeping the ear interested as well. However, you don't want it to be distracting. It shouldn't take you out of the song.


Over the last several years, I've focused as much on production as I have on song writing. So, this means a lot to me.

Quote:

All of that being covered (like you didn't know it) brings me to the finer points :

Your vocal fits this perfectly. There's some great emotion to your singing. It's haunting, which I love.

Thanks! smile

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The interplay between the vocal melody and guitar parts are fantastic! There is a groove that's established that compliments and supports the vocal as though it were written specifically for this song.

The picked the perfect real band styles to make it sound real. By no means does this sound like it's out of the box.

Those drums are placed and chosen so well that I sat here thinking "Yeah. That's how it's done." Looking forward to every fill. The entire time thinking it was just a really well played part. Great choice. The sound of the drums was excellent as well.

The shaker, the organ, every part building to keep interest and bring the song forward until the final few measures. What a great way to bring it back down to the essence without it just having a blunt ending. The release was a truly great choice in my book.

Again...it is nice to have the subtlies of production appreciated (and noted).

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Man, I could go on and on;

Ah...please do! HA! smile

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but at the heart of it I am really drawn to this song. I love the mood. I love the groove. I wouldn't change a thing. Ok, I would maybe lower the shaker slightly when it first comes in. That would change nothing; but at least it's not all compliments all the time. wink

Thanks!! Yes, the shaker could have been more subtle...

Quote:

Thank you for not only sharing this; but writing this. Is a new direction that I'm really liking. The cool thing is; there's room for the new creations along with the others. I hope you had fun with it!

Thank you! for listening and for all the great comments. It's nice when someone "goes a little deeper" than normal....


Quote:

(Spoken into my phone, so I'm positive there will be errors. Just had to post something about this great song.)


Well, that is just impressive. I need to figure out a way to "speak" comments... would sure save a lot of time...
Posted by: David Snyder

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/29/19 09:54 AM


Floyd,

This is an awesome song man! Another winner dude.
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 11/30/19 06:29 AM

Originally Posted By: Will Josef
Very nice track! The music and lyrics just works very well together.
Enjoyed listening to this!

Thanks for sharing!
Will


Will - thanks for coming again smile


Originally Posted By: jimmadsen
Impressive track - well written!


Thanks, Jim...
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 12/01/19 06:59 AM

Originally Posted By: MarioD
I'm late to the party and everything I wanted to say already has been said. IMHO this is one of if not your best to date. But it seams I say that after hearing every song you sing!

I do have one question for you, how in hell can you keep coming up with winners after winners? Your songwriting, instrumentation, and processing skills are second to none.



Mario - always glad to have you come to the party regardless what time it is... smile

Thanks for the very kind words...


Originally Posted By: rsdean
Floyd,

This song is truly awesome! I love the country-rock feel...

Your vocals are always superb and your lyrics put the listener right in the scene.

Loved it all!

Bob


Thanks, Bob. Glad you came by to catch this one...


Originally Posted By: dcuny
Pro work, as usual. smile

Love this line:

our final moments coming back to me
so jim beam didn't do his job


But I'm disappointed you didn't use this rhyme:

take it any way you choose
all I know is I need some booze...
wink

When I saw the title of the song, I thought How do you write a song about a hangover?

Of course, I'm asking the wrong question.

Because it's about why there's a hangover, and the answer is a broken heart, of course.

Thanks for showing me how it's done!


smile choose...booze... missed that one... smile smile

Thanks for raising a glass to this one, David wink
Posted by: floyd jane

Re: Take The Pain Away - 12/02/19 07:14 AM

Originally Posted By: David Snyder

Floyd,

This is an awesome song man! Another winner dude.


Mr. Snyder - nice to see you drop by!!... New year coming - and a new BIAB version... that ought to get some music juices flowin' for ya...



Thanks to everyone who stopped by for a listen and a comment or two.
I do appreciate it...

fj