Just wrote this a few days ago, tried to put stuff from my life in it, think it turned out ok,

BIAB and Cakewalk

I played the lead guitar again, did not use a style, but mixed and matched.

Bass-Craig Young #1008
Piano-Blair Masters #1264
Drums-Wayne Killius Rock Texas
Acoustic Guitar-Jason Roller #405
Electric Guitar-Darin Favorite #844

https://soundcloud.com/braddh66/halfway-there

remixed, sounds much better now, don't know what I was thinking before.

Brad,

Skoon66,

First off, welcome to the BIAB forum—it’s great to have you on board. I didn’t hear the original version, but the remix sounds pretty good. Would love to see the lyrics to this one, only because there some good lines in there. I had to laugh at playing baseball with a “ball made for tennis”. Brings back memories!

The production has a couple of spots I think you can tighten up—really just balancing the instrumentals with the vocals. For example, in the beginning when the electric guitar comes in, for me, just a tad too abrupt . . . and the vocals in the chorus, particularly in the second chorus, just a touch too forward in the mix. It’s the hardest part for me in any song I do—and drives me totally batty, and I never think I ever quite get it right . . . and to boot, it’s subjective . . . so go with what you think works in the end. Just a couple of thoughts.

You’ve got a good song here. Keep polishing.

Again, welcome to BIAB. I’ll look forward to hearing more from you.

Kind regards,

Deej

Thank you, and you're right mixing is hard for me, sometimes.

And here you go.

"Halfway There"

1:) The first ten, was outside and playing,
model cars, friends, and going swimming,
Cardinal ball games, with my dad.
The next ten, was guitars, and ladies,
Playing Baseball, with a ball made for Tennis,
standing under the street light, with my friends.

C:) Life was great, couldn't wait till I got older,
to do the things, to be cool, just like my brother,
little things, that made sense back then.
Growing up to be just like my father,
getting there, seemed like such a bother,
don't look now, I'm almost halfway there.

(Guitar)

2:) The next ten, was changing what had started,
Desert Storm, changed my life more than I wanted,
I made it home, to see my friends again.
The next ten, I settled down and I got married,
had a boy, that the wife and I cherished,
I think I know now, what my father had meant.

3:) The next ten, was about love, and making money,
time with family was a joy and sometimes crushing,
don't see my friends, like I used to do.
The next ten, not sure just how it's going,
getting older, and wishing I was younger,
I'll see my father, when I'm called up there.

(Chorus-Guitar-2nd Chorus)

C:) Life is tough, and I wish that I was younger,
to do the things, that I could do over,
little things, that made sense back then.
I grew up to be just like my father,
getting there, just like all the others,
all along, I was more then halfway there.

End:) all along I'm almost there.

Really liked both songs on your SoundCloud, Brad. This one is really wonderful hearing about your life. I'm quite new here also, but these folks are a terrific help. Keep 'em coming.

thank you, so far what I've seen the people here are awesome.

Welcome to the creative world of the BIAB Forum!

You were able to put a glimpse of your entire life in one song. That's a feat.

Enjoy the "ten" you are in now!

You've got a decent voice (wish I did), good musicianship, and the ability to put a song together. What I hear right now that's keeping you from getting to the next level is that you're shoehorning words and lines, trying to make them fit where they don't. I think it's an easy fix with a little forethought.

Quite a story, very interesting, maybe we should all do a song like this to get to know each other better.

Hi, Scoon !

Welcome to the site !
BIAB is just a wonderful tool
making writers of us all !
Good luck with writing
and performing - this was
a good start and every new
one will improve still
I´m sure !;-)

Cheers
Dani