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Posted By: jannesan You Are The Day - 03/24/20 01:52 PM
You Are The Day

This song started, once again, from a dream. In it, a girl with a lovely voice was singing the chorus melody (and maybe some lyrics also, can't recall) in an American Idols contest and I said to her that if I had a record company, I would sign her immediately smile Well, more than a year passed by and there was a lullaby song contest on a local forum. I looked for a gentle sounding song from my archive and found this one. I wrote the lyrics in Finnish (translating what existed from the chorus part) and used child sounding Vocaloids to sing it. It got very warm reception, so I thought it would be nice to share it with you one day. But the translation was difficult part, how to translate nursery rhyme type of alliterations etc.

And now here it is. I think I managed to capture something from the original mood I hope my English is not too clumsy, I'm just wondering how fluent text a native poet could have written... It would have been better to be sung by a child (or a girl like in my dream), but no child was available so I decided to sing it myself (with some gender modifications in the lyrics), although I used some Vocaloids in the ending part.

RealDrums: Congas

RealTracks:

Acoustic bass #1162
Cello #1856
Viola #2336
Violin #2338
Acoustic guitar Pick #1814
Horns #2291
Synth Pad #1840

MIDI:
MIDI SuperTrack #2058 (SampleTank3 - FullStrings)
Melody music box

Vocals: me and backing Vocaloids

Mixed in Adobe Audition 2020

Lyrics:

You are the dawn that wakes me up
you are the day that lasts for a lifetime
you are the summer that sings me lullabies
gives away the bride
nurtures 'til I die.

This story started from a small seed
a little lady laughs now in her cradle
the wonders of the world in blue beads
sitting snickering
the first steps of her fable
all her dauntless deeds.

You are the dawn...

A dinky doll, the plan of a pixie
a tiny tender twinkle in her dimple
a romping baby barefoot carefree
scrambles to the swing
she loves life sweet and simple
stalls and falls asleep.

You are the dawn...

Close your eyelids
slowly swinging
sleepy kid.
To the shadows of the world
slumber slumber
sister, my little girl.

----
Janne

Posted By: Greg Johnson Re: You Are The Day - 03/24/20 07:12 PM
What a pretty song!!! And a wonderful arrangement (congas are a tiny bit loud at times). I think I am going to play around with "your band".....such a nice blend of instruments. Melody and lyrics are fantastic.....may be my favorite of yours!! Take care. Greg
Posted By: Crossroads Re: You Are The Day - 03/25/20 05:06 AM
Hi jannesan,

that's a very nice and pretty song. Good lyrics, well-sung and a terrific backing track. Enjoyed it a lot.

Stay healthy,

Stefan
Posted By: Janice & Bud Re: You Are The Day - 03/25/20 10:42 AM
Lovely lyric, vocals and production.

The RT/percussion selection is perfect for the lyric.

Thanks for taking the time to redo it and sharing...

Most enjoyable... and relaxing!

J&B
Posted By: BabuMusic Re: You Are The Day - 03/25/20 11:13 AM
Ahhh (pronounced awe). A conga-playing friend of mine would say the congas are perfect, but I agree more with Greg that they are a bit loud. Love that "kid" effect. It really makes it. I hear what you mean about having a child sing this one, but you did great. Your English is wonderful (especially compared to my Finnish). I live this line you are "the day that lasts for a lifetime."
Posted By: TuneMonger Re: You Are The Day - 03/25/20 06:13 PM
Beautiful, especially liked the music box over the strings. Nice poetry also.
Posted By: Birchwood Re: You Are The Day - 03/25/20 06:39 PM
Hello Jannesan,

You always have different sounding songs, with an original story. That is what I like in yours songs. And ths one is no exception! The story is even more nice. A lullaby song contest... Never heard of! At first I thought you were singing about a newborne babygirl. Then reading your lyrics and saw that wasn't the case. So, a very lovely song you made with this one. I got a smile on my face listening to it.
I agree with Greg the gonga's are a bit too loud compared with the other instruments and also with the kind of melody. But you did a fine job with this song. I am curious how it sounds in Finnish. Must be nicer (I once had a Finnish girlfriend...)

Hans
Posted By: MarioD Re: You Are The Day - 03/25/20 08:44 PM
This is super. Great vocal and super lyrics! The backing tracks are outstanding. Excellent work!

I thoroughly enjoyed this.
Posted By: rayc Re: You Are The Day - 03/26/20 08:03 AM
Lovely backing, terrific melody & sweet lyrics though I think dauntless is out of place.
Cool song.
Posted By: Scott C Re: You Are The Day - 03/26/20 04:47 PM
Such a lovely song. Loved the vocal and backtrack. Well done
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 03/26/20 05:14 PM
Originally Posted By: Greg Johnson
What a pretty song!!! And a wonderful arrangement (congas are a tiny bit loud at times). I think I am going to play around with "your band".....such a nice blend of instruments. Melody and lyrics are fantastic.....may be my favorite of yours!! Take care. Greg


Thanks Greg for your positive words smile I had more electric band first, but I thought an acoustic approach would be more suitable for a lullaby. And I agree about congas - the loudness could wake up the sleeping child, I had difficulties to find a suitable percussion, but then I realized that congas have this ancient hypnotic effect to help fall into trance.

Janne
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 03/26/20 05:17 PM
Originally Posted By: Crossroads
that's a very nice and pretty song. Good lyrics, well-sung and a terrific backing track. Enjoyed it a lot.
Stay healthy,
Stefan


Thanks Stefan for your kind feedback smile I'm glad you enjoyed it. And I'll try my best to avoid any viruses at the moment laugh I wish you and your family good health, I really hope to see more of your great funny videos in the future!

Janne
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 03/26/20 05:18 PM
Originally Posted By: Janice & Bud
Lovely lyric, vocals and production.
The RT/percussion selection is perfect for the lyric.
Thanks for taking the time to redo it and sharing...
Most enjoyable... and relaxing!
J&B


Thanks Janice and Bud for your heart-warming words smile Nice to hear that you enjoyed and relaxed smile

Janne
Posted By: dcuny Re: You Are The Day - 03/26/20 06:46 PM
Gentle melody and singing, lovely cello and musicbox.

Nicely done!
Posted By: BlueAttitude Re: You Are The Day - 03/28/20 09:19 AM
Good song as usual, Janne. Nice melody and lyrics.

I would like to hear it in Finnish actually!
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 03/28/20 03:39 PM
Originally Posted By: BabuMusic
Ahhh (pronounced awe). A conga-playing friend of mine would say the congas are perfect, but I agree more with Greg that they are a bit loud. Love that "kid" effect. It really makes it. I hear what you mean about having a child sing this one, but you did great. Your English is wonderful (especially compared to my Finnish). I live this line you are "the day that lasts for a lifetime."


Thanks Marty, your kind feedback really warms my heart smile And thanks for quoting the keyline of the song!

Janne
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 03/28/20 03:40 PM
Originally Posted By: TuneMonger
Beautiful, especially liked the music box over the strings. Nice poetry also.


Thanks TuneMonger for your kind words, I'm glad you accepted my poetry smile

Janne
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 03/28/20 03:44 PM
Originally Posted By: Birchwood
You always have different sounding songs, with an original story. That is what I like in yours songs. And ths one is no exception! The story is even more nice. A lullaby song contest... Never heard of! At first I thought you were singing about a newborne babygirl. Then reading your lyrics and saw that wasn't the case. So, a very lovely song you made with this one. I got a smile on my face listening to it.
I agree with Greg the gonga's are a bit too loud compared with the other instruments and also with the kind of melody. But you did a fine job with this song. I am curious how it sounds in Finnish. Must be nicer (I once had a Finnish girlfriend...)
Hans


Thanks Hans, your comments are always big pleasure to read smile Actually, it is about a baby girl, from the view point of her big brother. I hope I didn't ruin your image wink Anyway, I can see your smile smile Oh, you had a Finnish girlfriend, nice to hear, so I hope you have learned something about Finns, hopefully something positive also wink

Janne
Posted By: dani48 Re: You Are The Day - 03/29/20 04:36 AM
Hi, Janne !

Wonderful tune, I´d say
it is my new favourite of yours
Janne ! Your compositions are
always something else,
something new and interesting !

Cheers
Dani
Posted By: floyd jane Re: You Are The Day - 03/29/20 11:56 AM
Janne,

A lovely sound. Perfect for a lullaby. I really like your vocal on this.

Very nice arrangemnet and BAND. and a very good mix.
Posted By: Robertkc Re: You Are The Day - 03/29/20 06:34 PM
Janne,
A lovely melody brought out with the fine arrangement.The "music box" Midi track with strings behind is perfect for the lullaby theme.
What really strikes me about this song is how good your voice is in the upper register- clear and pure sounding. The first verse to really made me sit up because of that quality.
Very well done.

Robert
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 03/30/20 03:26 PM
Originally Posted By: MarioD
This is super. Great vocal and super lyrics! The backing tracks are outstanding. Excellent work!

I thoroughly enjoyed this.


Thanks Mario, your positive feedback warms my heart and mind smile

Janne
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 03/30/20 03:33 PM
Originally Posted By: rayc
Lovely backing, terrific melody & sweet lyrics though I think dauntless is out of place.
Cool song.


Thanks Ray for your kind words smile Glad you commented on that word, I have no ear for English nuances… I thought a child who has just learned to walk is ready to go anywhere without fear, whole life ahead. But maybe you see the idea or 'dauntless' differently.

Janne
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 03/30/20 03:34 PM
Originally Posted By: Scott C
Such a lovely song. Loved the vocal and backtrack. Well done


Thanks Scott, I appreciate your kind and positive words smile

Janne
Posted By: animarorecords Re: You Are The Day - 03/31/20 03:47 AM
Janne,

Very beautiful melody!
Your vocal fits this song perfectly.
I can feel of your uniqueness very much as usual in devising the chord progression on the way.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 04/01/20 04:15 PM
Originally Posted By: dcuny
Gentle melody and singing, lovely cello and musicbox.
Nicely done!


Thanks David for your kind words smile I'm glad you liked the music box, because I thought it could have had much better sound closer to real music box, I just didn't find a suitable one.

Janne
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 04/01/20 04:17 PM
Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
Good song as usual, Janne. Nice melody and lyrics.
I would like to hear it in Finnish actually!


Thanks Dave for your nice review smile Well, maybe one day I have enough time to sing a Finnish version for you to hear smile

Janne
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 04/01/20 04:20 PM
Originally Posted By: dani48
Wonderful tune, I´d say
it is my new favourite of yours
Janne ! Your compositions are
always something else,
something new and interesting !
Cheers
Dani


Thanks Dani, I always appreciate your positive feedback and this one is really delightfully heart-warming smile

Janne
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 04/03/20 10:55 AM
Originally Posted By: floyd jane
A lovely sound. Perfect for a lullaby. I really like your vocal on this.
Very nice arrangemnet and BAND. and a very good mix.


Thanks Floyd for your positive review smile Nice to know it works for you as a lullaby.

Janne
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 04/03/20 11:00 AM
Originally Posted By: Robertkc
Janne,
A lovely melody brought out with the fine arrangement.The "music box" Midi track with strings behind is perfect for the lullaby theme.
What really strikes me about this song is how good your voice is in the upper register- clear and pure sounding. The first verse to really made me sit up because of that quality.
Very well done.
Robert


Thanks Robert, I really appreciate your kind words smile I'm glad you liked the music box thing, although its sound is not as authentic I would like. I like to sing in the upper register, because my voice doesn't break there, thus it sounds much cleaner (and my melodyne edits are not audible…)

Janne
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 04/03/20 11:02 AM
Originally Posted By: animarorecords
Very beautiful melody!
Your vocal fits this song perfectly.
I can feel of your uniqueness very much as usual in devising the chord progression on the way.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.
Best regards.
Shigeki Adachi


Thanks Shigeki Adachi for your kind and heart-warming words smile

Janne
Posted By: F.M.M. Re: You Are The Day - 04/03/20 11:29 AM
Hi Jaane this is excellent really mixed well so engaging thanks for sharing eric
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 04/05/20 01:46 PM
Originally Posted By: F.M.M.
Hi Jaane this is excellent really mixed well so engaging thanks for sharing eric


Thanks Eric for your positive feedback smile

Janne
Posted By: Deej56 Re: You Are The Day - 04/05/20 04:18 PM
Janne,

Enjoyed this one. . . some very stellar production touches on this one. Like that melody music box sound you’ve mixed in. And I like the melody in that first verse/chorus—the whole song has a soft lullaby feel to it. The congas work very well in this one as well. Good stuff!

All my best to you,

Deej
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 04/07/20 03:32 PM
Originally Posted By: Deej56
Enjoyed this one. . . some very stellar production touches on this one. Like that melody music box sound you’ve mixed in. And I like the melody in that first verse/chorus—the whole song has a soft lullaby feel to it. The congas work very well in this one as well. Good stuff!

All my best to you,

Deej


Thanks Deej, I appreciate your nice words smile Glad you find the lullaby feel in the song.

Janne
Posted By: Al-David Re: You Are The Day - 04/07/20 05:49 PM
Hi Janne ...

This is such a nice song! the arrangement and mix are great! And this is, in my opinion, your best vocal ... it's really, really nice! i really enjoyed my listen ... everything about this is terrific! Excellent!

Best to you. Be safe ...

Alan
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 04/09/20 02:21 PM
Originally Posted By: Al-David
This is such a nice song! the arrangement and mix are great! And this is, in my opinion, your best vocal ... it's really, really nice! i really enjoyed my listen ... everything about this is terrific! Excellent!
Best to you. Be safe ...
Alan


Thanks Alan, I truly appreciate your kind words, especially about my vocals, very nice to hear that you think it's my best smile All the best to you and Di.

Janne
Posted By: Ezekiel's Storm Re: You Are The Day - 04/13/20 08:47 AM
Well-written lyrics. Beautiful chorus melody.

I really like the instrumentation. Besides fitting the lyrics nicely, it's a unique and pleasing combination of instruments.
Posted By: jannesan Re: You Are The Day - 04/13/20 01:05 PM
Originally Posted By: Ezekiel's Storm
Well-written lyrics. Beautiful chorus melody.

I really like the instrumentation. Besides fitting the lyrics nicely, it's a unique and pleasing combination of instruments.


Thanks, that's very warm and positive review of my song smile

Janne
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