A visit back to the forum after a long time away..hope this is a worthy re-entry..Thanks in advance for listening.

The End


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We trust there's a way for us,
To know how to grow, we pray.
Can't wait on fate to plan
What we can't understand
So we're underway.

We know that the road we're on
Will run in the sun and snow;
And so let's vow to bear
All the hurdles out there
Everywhere we go.

All through the night
Until daybreak;
Stay awake
And trek
In search of sunlight!

We tried to have eyes of hope
And cope without asking why.
To fly by inner stars
And to follow guitars
Playing lullabies.

We flew pretty straight right through
And guessed that our quest was true.
Not once did comprehend
What the way might intend
That the end was You.
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Style: _TANGLED Cool World Jazz Percussion

Tano,
This might sound a bit nuts, but I was just thinking about your music couple of days ago.
Excellent re-entry tune! I like your music and find it very special. Please do not leave us for too long. Thank you for sharing.

Misha.

P.S> 1:36 break was fun

Hi Tano ...

Really nice! I love the selection of backing tracks you chose - a somewhat eclectic but nice mix. To me this has somewhat of a European sound to it. I lived in Europe almost 12 years and can remember many songs similar to this, particularly in France ... but not necessarily as nice as this one.

If I may, two things that crossed my mind for your consideration:

1. The vocal could use a little effect. not too much but possibly a touch of reverb or some modest echo/delay. I think it would add a little more depth to it. You have a very nice voice with great vocal tone. But I think a bit of vox effects would make it even more dynamic.

2. The violin break from 1:23 through 1:30 could be a but louder. I think it's placement in the soundscape (too distant) renders a loss of energy in those few seconds of the song.

Just my thoughts, for what they are worth. I did enjoy this a lot. It was a really nice listen. Had a nice, gently sway to it.

Welcome back! Please be safe ...

Alan

Tom,

Nice to see you back. I always enjoy the unexpected (for me at least) places that your melodies good. Always interesting.

fj

Thanks for the constructive criticism..I'm going to dig back into it to see how I can improve it.

Hadn't heard any of your previous tracks but I must admit that I don't get the chance to visit the site that often myself.
I enjoyed your song and I thought that the reflective flavour of the lyrics and your understated vocal delivery helped to carry it off beautifully.
I also listened to your song 'Yoke Up' and I really liked that too.

The End as a new beginning here- welcome back!
I like the light playful percussion and jazzy melody applied to meaningful lyrics:
Lots of good rhyming lines:

To fly by inner stars
And to follow guitars
Playing lullabies.

Sweet!
You have a distinctive and eclectic style that`s most enjoyable.
(I agree a little change in vocal processing would improve this).

Robert

I always like being surprised by songs and you sure did deliver on that in this one. You've got a very nice blend of instruments and sounds in there. The way to take twists and turns but keep the melody on track is pretty neat.

It would be unfair to compare this to Miles Davis music, but there is something that I see in common. To paraphrase, Miles said "always play the unexpected notes," and that's what you've got going here.

It's fresh, inviting and interesting. I'll always go for interesting and daring over boring.

The vocal has an odd halo around it...probably the room you recorded in - or some proximity effect.
The actual vocal is well done but needs to sit in the mix rather than sounding like it was placed on top.
Did you use the reverbs automatically applied to the individual tracks in BIAB? it may be a mismatch between that and you voice treatment that make the distance/difference.
Apart from that - nice song, nicely done.

Thanks for the comments, esp on vocal processing..it's an area I need to improve on..your collective 'ears' are more seasoned than mine!

BTW, back story...the song is about adoption..the 'voice' is a couple who haven't been able to have children, confidently plowing ahead in the hopes that someday their persistence be rewarded with that child they want to love.

Very cool backtrack. Very different in a good way. Loved the vocal and lyric. Well done

Rhythmically well done, busy, but not too busy, however, the vocals might sit a little too much in front?

Nevertheless, this is an enjoyable production in many, many ways.

Cool vocal, backing and a gentle thought provoking lyric made
for a great listen.

We particularly liked:

"We tried to have eyes of hope
And cope without asking why.
To fly by inner stars
And to follow guitars
Playing lullabies"

Yes, positive! That.

Glad to see you back around!

J&B

Scott, VideoTrack, J&B---thanks for the comments and for stopping by to listen!

I love this song! Nice, original melody. Solid lyrics. Horn placement was a little weird but can be fixed.

Production-wise, the vocal sits badly outside of things. It needs a lot of work. I have struggled with this myself so I understand. There's a lot of youtube videos on how to get the vocal to sit right. It's a chore to get there, but your music is worth it. Hope I'm not seen as being too critical, I'd just love to hear your song as it should be.

Tunemonger… I appreciate your feedback! I intend to get back into it and dig deeper and use all the great suggestions I’ve gotten here on the forum! Thanks

I like the instrumentation--it's a "good" different than the usual.

Effective double tracking...sound authentic and not electronic.

Enjoyable and uplifting.

Nice "comeback " tune Tano! Very interesting jazzy tune with a great message! Lots of clever little bits in here! I have been absent myself more than I have cared to be lately, but I speak for a lot of people when I say it's good to see you back around here! Thanks, Torrey

Guys--Ezekiel/Torrey--thanks for the comments!

Good to hear from you again!! Love the optimistic feel in this song....happy and inspiring!! Take care. Greg

This is really good!

Super backing tracks and vocals.

I think a touch of reverb would work wonders on your vocal.

I was impressed by your dynamics! Great job on that.

Greg, Mario...thanks for listening...I know I can tighten up the vocal processing...appreciate the suggestions.

Hello Tano,

Also a nice Latin(ish) song you made!
I must have missed it, because it's 8 days on the forum. Shame on me!

Nice tempo and melody.
About the vocals you already heard some comment. Vocals are always difficult (in my experience). Too much sibbilance, too loud, too soft, too close, too far away etcetera, etcetera. In your case thiss all happened too. So keep learning on it. Your songs are too good not to.

Nice day,
Hans

Tom,

Nice to see you back.
I am very happy to listen to your music again.
I found again that you were very good at using various musical instruments.
Your arrangement skill is still alive.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi

Tano,

You’ve gotten a ton of great feedback on this song. Just chilling in to say I enjoyed it and think it has a ton of potential. Love the use of the horns and the jazzy feel to this one. A little more spit and polish and you’ll have yourself something with this one. Nice work!

Best regards,

Deej

Hans, Shigeki, and Deej..your feedback is much appreciated, and I will definitely continue "polishing" on this one!

Man, I missed this forum. So much talent on it, it's unbelievable - and no two people are ever the same on here. This is DEFINITELY a worthy re-entry from you ... the style choice is inspired, the lyrics beautiful and the music writing itself simply wonderful. The lyrics twist at the end is brilliant. More of such re-entries, please!!! :-)

Thanks James...I have also been away for a long time! Enjoying the "re-entry" and hearing all the great stuff from creative minds.