A song about staying put with the one you love... shared here on the day we sold our house.
Looks like a few days away from the forum and I have some catching up to do, but I have to post now: its Canada Day, eh!

When Her Eyes Shine


Style is _SHAMAN.STY (Shaman Folk Rock w Psych Solo)

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When Her Eyes Shine

a stowaway to the gates of heaven
didn`t mind they were closed
she brought back the radiance
spilled onto her clothes

people piled higher`n higher she said
from earth up into space
grabbing grasping yearning
until the stars back away

I always was the restless kind
one more twist to tune my string
since she told me of her vision
settle and stick that`s my thing

been hither `n thither
I can live wherever
we hang our do not disturb sign
home grown happy
when her eyes shine

sometimes she wants to walk out of our painting
we have to widen the frame
when someones been close to heaven
you just want to stay near their flame

the meadow mown in spirals we have tea
at the door of the soul within
don`t need scientists or preachers
in her arms is where my world begins

been hither `n thither
I can live wherever
we hang our do not disturb sign
home grown happy
when her eyes shine
home grown happy
when her eyes shine


© Robert Cordrey June 2020

I just got back from taking my wife out to super and I listened to this song. It is such a fitting song for me as today was our 53 wedding anniversary!

"been hither `n thither
I can live wherever
we hang our do not disturb sign
home grown happy
when her eyes shine
home grown happy
when her eyes shine"

What a great chorus.

I liked everything about this song, the lyrics, vocals, backing tracks, and mix.

Hi Robert,

Of course your lyrics are sublime, but the song is very nice too.
A nice style (Shaman) you chose, a good rhythm and that swell violin.
I don't want to forget your vocals, but I can't say anything new on them. I already like that.
So I really enjoyed listening to your song!

Of course I was charmed by your lyrics again, like 'one more twist to tune my string', but then you continued with some even nicer lines: 'sometimes she wants to walk out of our painting. We have to widen the frame'. Those sentences are so well found, hats off!

Have a nice day,
Hans

Really enjoyable listen!! Just feels good! Love the band and the way you mixed it! Great stuff Robert!! Take care. Greg

That song is a thing of beauty Robert! This immediately put me in mind of Neil Young in so many ways from the melody and chord structure to the vocal delivery to the instrumentation! This is your best yet for my money! Thanks, T

Hi Robert
Very much enjoyed your vocal, the style and the mix of instruments. And of course the lyrics. Particularly struck by 'grabbing grasping yearning until the stars back away.'
Regards,
Leon

Robert,


An excellent BAND. And an excellent mix. You vocal sits in it just as it should. Nice use of the fiddle.

"home grown happy" - what a great phrase!

"when someones been close to heaven
you just want to stay near their flame" - NICE!

A really nice write.

I like it when you "get your rockin' rhythm on". This style really suits you to a T (I think).

I really like it!!

fj

Awesome, Robert! This sounds great!

Killer mix man.

Very cool backtrack on this one Robert. Loved the intro. Excellent and vocal. Well done

Mario,
Congratulations on your anniversary! I`m happy this song fit well with your celebration with your wife.







Hi Hans,
Very kind thoughts - I thank you for them and especially for picking out lines I like too!



Thank you,Greg!




Torrey,
I appreciate those very positive comments!

Robert

Robert,
I hope the selling part was at least in some way as smooth as this tune

You are one skilled story teller!
Choruses are so different, yet work very well. Excellent performance! Mix is very good, but I think fiddle might be asking for a little reverb. Enjoyed it! Thank you for sharing.

Misha.

Robert,

Very nice song!
The chord progression of the beginning of the melody is great.
The tight drum is wonderful.
Your narrative vocal are comfortable as usual.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi

Robert,

Terrific tune . . . I’m not sure why but it reminds me of R.E.M. . . . just in the style of write, the delivery of the vocal and some of those cool chord changes. Cool listen!

All my best,

Deej

Nice intro with the Fiddle! Works well for the solo too.

Excellent writing as per usual, Floyd's favorite line is also mine, and I also really like the first part of that verse:

"sometimes she wants to walk out of our painting
we have to widen the frame
when someones been close to heaven
you just want to stay near their flame"

I get the R.E.M. vibe too in spots, mostly the vocal delivery I think.

Good song, Robert.

Happy belated Canada Day!

You are truly incredible. I don't know who to compare you to, I am not an expert in this kind of style of music. That said: wow. Sensitivity, lyrics (and an ability to write them) to die for - mature, well written and arranged music - gentle, sensitive singing. You are one of the very first names I look for when I log on on here, 'case you've written something new I can enjoy. Well done ... wonderful song.

Thanks, Leon!




Floyd,
I heard someone say that- "home grown happy"- about their kids and it stuck.
I appreciate those comments - especially on the mix & vocal placement as I`ve been trying to fine tune that.



David - thank you, sir!



Thank you Scott!

Robert

"been hither `n thither
I can live wherever
we hang our do not disturb sign
home grown happy
when her eyes shine"

It's been quoted but that suits the two of us to a T.

As I sometimes say no need to parse it out infinitum.
It's all good.

Standouts:

- The image rich write,

- your vocal and

- the band. Andy is a heckuva fiddler and you put his talents to good use indeed.

We think this would have precipitated some spousal eye shining!

Nice!

J&B

Lovely romantic poetry sung with passion, the light arrangement supports the vision nicely. Chords and melody create an interesting colorful tapestry for the house of love. Widening the frame sounds like a big renovation

Janne

Hello Robert ...

Being late to the party ... and what a great party ... almost everything I was thinking, as I listened, has already been mentioned. The one thing that hasn't been mention (I think) is the ending ... totally loved that! You're quite the lyricist!

Wishing you the very best. Be safe ...

Alan

The lyrics make their own music.
The backing for them works a treat and the ending is very cool.
Well done.

Robert

Superb work all round, lovely song, vocal,lyric and backing choice.

Excellent.

Peter

Misha,
Not at all easy selling a house these days!
I`m glad you like that change of feel on the chorus. I think I did put an eq on the fiddle to try to lift it apart from the el.guitar- will listen again to reverb levels.
Thanks for your comments.




Thank you Shigeki!




Deej,
I can hear that REM sound a little too ( though its been years since I listened to them).
Thanks for those likes!




Dave,
A happy aha! moment when that verse was written- I appreciate the quote and your other kind comments.
A strange, same as any other day, Canada Day this year!

Robert

Neat song. Cool lyrics. Nice melody you found. Good use of the band.

Hi Robertkc,

Your song kind of has an R.E.M. sound to it in several places. Especially around the "been hither `n thither" part. Cool song, good vocals and lyrics.
Thanks for posting it.

Good song and you created a great backing track and mix. Everything flowed and blended together well. Enjoyed the song and performance.

More lyrical gems from Robert. I especially like the opening verse--that's first class writing.

Enjoyed the melody and instrumentation. They give the song a half earthbound and half astral plane feel to it.

A big THANK YOU! to all those who listened and made encouraging comments; I`m in the thick of that hither and thither house move now, so its over and out for a while.

Robert

A lot of terrific poetry going on here. I like how you bring all the imagery back and tie it together with the very simple line 'when her eyes shine.' When 'hither and thither' came in, I almost thought you were going to rap. But not. Another highly creative effort by you that I enjoyed a great deal.