TRUST MY WINGS

This is my attempt to write in the style of Burt Bacharach, with Hal David-type of lyrics. I tried to do a typical Bacharach thing--insert an extra 2 beats in a 4/4 song.

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No one wants to love and wind up lonely;
No one wants to love if only feeling emptiness;
So why say 'yes?'
  
No one gives their heart to be neglected;
No one gives their love to be rejected or shut out;
What it's about?  
 
I'd like to try--
To kiss once more the sky;
I'm willing to risk it!
Still wonder why
I can't TRUST MY WINGS to fly.
 
Anyone could be the one I search for;
Anyone at all I'm sure there's someone seeking, too;  
It could be you. 
 
Someone's got to want to love like I do
Someone just like you to give their heart unselfishly;  
It might be me--     

I long to try--
To kiss once more the sky;
I'm willing to risk,
To understand why
I can't TRUST MY WINGS to fly.
 
Look in my eyes and believe in my love..
And then with the confidence of love
I might TRUST MY WINGS to fly.
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I've lost most of the info about this, but I think it's mostly:
Style = BurtBac1 - Even 8ths Pop-Rock
In Style = Finger Elec Bass, E Piano, Std. Drums, Acoustic guitar, Slow Strings
Added: Mute Trumpet, Organ, Marimba

Tano,

Good write! Solid arrangement and lyrics. Clever stuff! Listens well, but I think vocals are a little loud.Thank you for sharing!

Misha.

I think it certainly has the feel you were after.
A style appropriate lyric and good choice of instruments.
A nice clever write.

Peter

Tano,

Started reading the lyrics while enduring the awful SoundCloud commercials (yuck), but they really had my interest and was curious to hear the song. You’ve definitely captured that 60’s loves song feel—so mission accomplished there. It’s a well-constructed tune, with solid production elements throughout. Love how you slow down the tempo for a bit (or seem to) following the bridge. Haven’t quite figured out how to do that yet myself. Well done!

All my best to you,

Deej

Where's Dionne Warwick when you need her?
You do have the gentle bossa feel and the lilting melody of the consummate sophistipop writer..

Misha, Peter, Deej, Rayc...thanks for checking in and listening. The BIAB style was right-on for the feel I was looking for.

Sounds great man, you're really cranking them out!

Hello Tano ...

Love the song! I'm Al David, not Hal David, but I give it my seal of approval! No one ever confuses me with Hal David ... he has a lot more numbers before the decimal point on his checking account. But I'm a big fan of his even though we're not related.

Your lyric and musical arrangement are reminiscent of the Bacharach - David style. I think you can say "Well done. Mission accomplished".

Bacharach & David, plus Jimmy Webb, were my favorite songwriters of the 60s and early 70s.

Best to you. Please be safe ...

Alan

Thanks Alan, I appreciate the feedback.

...and thanks David-- I was "off" the forum for over a year and half, and so I'm finishing up lots of projects that I worked on during my absence.

The lyrics are light and have that almost conversational quality I like in the genre... married to a very good structure : I think Ray nailed it with "sophistipop"!
A brave vocal on a tune that`s tailor made for one of the greats of the era.
Very well done.

Robert

Yep, you captured that 60's music style of Burt Bacharach and the Hal David style of lyrics.

Super work on this one.

Robert/Mario...thanks for taking a listen, and for your feedback!

Brilliant!!! Loved it. A wonderfully executed piece of pastiche :-) Great job!!!

Hope you take this as the compliment it's intended as, but I see this as a song that might well work on Sesame Street or something, with Kermit singing it. It's meant as a genuine compliment!!! :-)

Tano,

Sure, I can hear the Bacharach influence in this. Quite a good tune. Nicely arranged and performed.

SD

Yes, in the style of Burt Bacharach. Really good tune, and ambitious instrumentation and arrangement... that change of tempo and feel at the end, really well done.

James, SD, Frank...thanks for listening, and I appreciate your comments!!

Being able to write anything that comes close to a Bacharach/David tune is a talent. And this truly delivers. An excellent write - melody AND lyric.

A perfect backing track. The vibes touches are icing on the cake. And the strings are done "just right". The muted trumpet - nice!! Nice drums accents, too. A lot of thought went into this. On my 4th listen. Very few things make me do that!!

A nice vocal. (I agree that the vocal is slightly louder than it needs to be)

Excellent.

fj

I would say that you hit the target dead center. Good write.

Floyd, Robert...thanks for the feedback, and the compliments!!

It's all been said.

The Bacharach vibe is nailed and it summons up Dionne's interpretations of his songs.

Ray said a lot in one word. Sophistipop

Janice said you're in good company because one of our favs, Diana Krall, admires Bacharach!

Cool...mission accomplished.

J&B

Appreciate that J&B..thanks for taking a few moments to listen in!

Yes, a very Bacharach feel, no doubt about it. Maybe you could get Elvis Costello to cover this song.

Very pretty!! I'm a huge fan of Bacharach and David, and I think you've captured many elements of their style here.......lyrics have that kind of poetic, philosophical twist. Very cool!! Take care. Greg

Excellent "in the style of" - I'm impressed.

The marimba really helped with the vibe.

I liked the change of the lyric on the final chorus - nice.

Ezekiel, Greg, David..thank you for tuning in and letting me know how I did..I appreciate your comments!

I got the Butch Cassidy and Sundance Kid vibe on this. Super backtrack and excellent vocal. Well done

Touching lyrics, simple but effective. Excellent arrangement with rhythmical, instrument and vocal style changes - I really like what you do in the second chorus. Great colorful mood - feels like I have really moved back in time.

Janne

YES!! You got it, Tano. Bacharach/David. Trust your wings, man. You're soaring. I once spent a day with Dionne Warwick's dad at Scepter Studios, and got to play the piano Bacharach used for recording. He would have loved this song, too.

Hey Scott, Janne, Marty... Thanks for listening in.. The BIAB style helped me be a Burt wannabe!

Nice arrangement, poignant lyrics (they evoke comparisons with Gilbert O'Sullivan).

Thanks Ghostgum! I appreciate you taking the time to listen in.

"Where's Dionne Warwick when you need her?"

Well written.
I like the theme of the song and the melody.