Tear Me

For this song, I tried to create a persona who is in a dark place. I'm still working on the mix. Don't know if the volume on the vocal is right.

Real Tracks:
RT1814 Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking CelticAir
RT2870 Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm CelticAirDave
RT2482 Bass, Acoustic, Bowed Held
RT3267 Cello, Background CelticAirFlowingNatalie

Lyrics:

Hide me from the sun
Walk along the broken limbs
Here lies everything we’ve done
Among the fallen seraphim

From this empty space
You can’t hear me
No one will ever know
How much you tear me and tear me.

Wrap me in tattered sheets
Throw me into the abyss
I only touch you when I sleep
Let me live unconsciousness

From this empty space
You can’t hear me
No one will ever know
How much you tear me and tear me.

From this empty space
You can’t hear me
You’ll do what you’ll do
You tear me. You tear me.

Nice!
Evocative lyrics.
Nice mix.

Vocals sound good to me.
How did you get the backing vocals, they are just enough to add some depth when they come in.
Well done!

moto

Hi Scott
A dark place indeed, beautifully conjured up. The vocal level sounds good to me (as does the whole song). Never heard 'tear' used as a verb before - very creative.
Regards,
Leon

Hi Ezekiel.
I always learn new words from your lyrics (seraphim). I can imagine this song in a Broadway or West End " Fiddler on the Roof" type musical.
I have mentioned this before that your voice reminds me of Edwyn Collins with a touch of Johnny Cash.
If you would indulge me one small 2¢ : The word "tear" is used with two different meanings (at least that's how I hear it). I would prefer they were both used in the same context.
I have listened to this a few times and it gets better with each listen. Lyrics , BV's , mix , a totally absorbing , compelling , atmospheric and beautiful piece of music. Well done.

beautiful song, hauntingly sung. All that needs be said.

Very cool song. You've created a dark atmosphere with the music, vocals and lyrics. Everything works well together. Nice mix too. Do I hear a second vocal on the harmony? The band hit their mark too.

Ezekiel,

You definitely created the right mood for the lyric—target hit square. I think the vocal sits just fine in the mix. I’m wondering though if it might help with a bit more reverb and/or delay, maybe to suggest his aloneness/emptiness. Just a thought.

Really like the harmonies you added on the chorus—nicely done. Enjoyed this one a lot!

Best regards,

Deej

Nicely sung! A bit of a '60s vibe to it.

The sparse instrumentation works nicely.

Very moody and atmospheric.
The vocal sounds good level wise, and an impressive performance.

I agree it could fit nicely in a stage play.

Nice work.

Peter

Vocals sound fine to me, and love those harmonies during the chorus.

Great sounding track, good choice of instrumentation. Love the dark mood!

Nicely done, enjoyed!

P.S. learned a new word, "seraphim"

I think this is an excellent vocal Scott. Love the acoustic framing your vocal. Well done

Ezekiel's Storm,
Very unusual and emotional song. Yes, sure dark, but silky smooth. Composition and arrangement A+. Strong lyrics. Excellent vocals! Actually, to my taste, one of your best. Perhaps mix has to do something with that too, as vocals are not way high, nor they are hiding deep in the mix. Enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing.

Misha.

"Wrap me in tattered sheets
Throw me into the abyss
I only touch you when I sleep
Let me live unconsciousness"

Powerful.

An excellent write.

A strong vocal. Wrapped in the perfect instrumentation. Moody and dark done well. Good BGVs.

Super.

fj

Excellent choice with the bowed bass. It fills with a dirge-like bottom. Your vocal is )(as always) outstanding, Ezekiel. This is a great write and production. The vox sits perfectly in the mix. Woudn't change a thing.

Scott,

This sounds really good man.

Hey there, Cap'n Moto: I used Meladyne for the harmony instead of the BIAB harmonizer because it creates weird "twirps (I don't know what to call them) with he harmony vocals and with Meladyne, I can write the harmony I want.



Leon, thanks for the comment. "Tear" can be used as a verb as in "Her eyes were tearing," but I broke a little rule by following "tear" with "me"; however, I consider that my poetic license. :-)



Thanks for the feedback, Gary. I had Johnny Cash in my head when I wrote this.



Tunemonger, thank you so much, my northern neighbor!

Very darkly beautiful!! One of my faves from you!! Perfect arrangement and delivery!! Take care. Greg

Excellent lyrics and nicely sung.

Hey, jpt, thanks for the comments. There's just one vocal in the harmony.



Thanks, Deej. I was worried that I might be putting in too much reverb. I will play around with what you suggested and see what happens.



David, Thanks. I guess I'm always stuck a bit in the 60s musically.



Scott, thanks for the comment and listen!



Thanks, Misha. I think I am beginning to figure out some of the EQ stuff, even though I can't hear it.

The vocal level is fine for the timbre of your voice except when the cello overlaps it...you might want to automate a little EQ subtraction of the cello in those spots.
The tag line of tear and tear falls flat on my ears as the saline drop isn't a convincing verb on its own, (and not a verb in the true sense either). It needs up, "tear up" or something with it to force the issue.
Other than that I dig it.

Hi Scott,

I've listened to TEAR ME several times, and I must say that this is an outstanding song. A great and very idiosyncratic write which is perfectly caried by the music. Remarkable vocal, I must say! And the whole productionsounds just brilliant.

Very, very well done!

All the best,

Stefan

Hi Ezekiel,

I enjoyed your sensitive song very much!
I loved that line "you tear me, you tear me". It expresses everything in this song
And your vocals were very delicate. They are taking this song to that high level where it belongs.

Hans

Thanks, Floyd. I appreciate your feedback.


Thanks, Marty. The bowed bass was key for me in producing this.


Scott C.: Thank you, much!


Greg, thanks for your kind words!

Very dark and moody. Good vocal and an interesting write with some unusual and thought provoking words. Very good production. The bowed bass was a perfect choice. An engaging and entertaining listen,Tom

Cool song. It's got it's share of imagery yet leaves it up to us to fill it in. I'm curious if you had specifics in mind when you wrote this, or if it was more of a general "I'm going with this concept" write.

I enjoyed this much! Thanks

Hello Ezekiel's Storm,

It is really a pretty composition. the sound and the playing of the guitar are splendid. And the Cello reinforces this sad atmosphere that you wanted to create. Your slightly deep voice lends itself perfectly to your lyrics. I really enjoyed it.

Kindly regard
Derochette
alias JaniJackFlash

"Wrap me in tattered sheets
Throw me into the abyss
I only touch you when I sleep
Let me live unconsciousness"

Those are four very strong lines.

We thought the dual meaning of tear worked well.
"Tear up" is common in our neck of the woods for
the welling of tears.

You picked an excellent all acoustic band that, as Janice
pointed out really fit the timbre of your vocal. Nice
job creating those harmonies also - very convincing.

Sad indeed but very engaging.

J&B