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Posted By: musician17 The Nightingale - 12/14/20 03:26 PM
Another one (groan!), haha. Hope you like it, though :-)

https://soundcloud.com/jamesdelsono/the-nightingale


THE NIGHTINGALE

He opens up and sings to them
A song of friends no more,
He's overwhelmed by memories
And stories of before.

His voice, it soars amid the tears,
The notes, they choke him so;
He sings as he's never done before
And never will, you know.

The audience cries, oh how they cry
At his heartbreaking tale;
He smiles as he takes his bow,
His heart truly unveiled.

And then, so proud at what he did
He wants to share it all:
And, so that others hear his pain,
He goes to a record store.

***

"The tape's not good enough" he's told,
"For your voice on it doth shake!
We cannot share this with the world,
We have a name to make.

How dare you show your soul on this!
You know it's not polite!
Come back when you sing, note by note,
A song that's somewhat trite".

***

He opens up and sings once more
A song that means so much
But not to others any more ...
Not e'en to friends, as such.

He sings for friendship and for those
He knew ago so long ...
As to the world, he's happy to
Let others sing their songs.


****** Song Summary *************
Title: The Nightingale - 14 December 2020
File:The Nightingale - 14 December 2020.SGU
Key=C , Tempo 60, Length (m:s)=4:16
No intro. 60 bar chorus, from bar 1 to bar 60. Repeat x1 chorus
No Melody
Soloist track has 74 notes, Soloist harmony is < no harmony >(0)
Song is saved with Volume, Pan, Reverb, Chorus, Bank0,
Song is saved with bar changes for Key Signature,
Style is _SEPIA.STY (Sepia Americana Organ Ballad)

RealTracks in style: 2877:Bass, Acoustic, AmericanaSlow16thsByron Ev16 060
RealTracks in style: 3099:Organ, Rhythm AmericanaSlow16thsMike Ev16 060
RealTracks in style: 2879:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm AmericanaSparseSlow16thsColin Ev16 060
RealTracks in style: 2878:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm AmericanaSlow16thsBrent Ev16 060
RealDrums [in style:BluesRockSlowEv^3-a:SideStick , b:Snare, Ride

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Voice recording and mixing done in Audacity.
Posted By: floyd jane Re: The Nightingale - 12/15/20 11:37 AM
James,

A good write. Ah, the trails and tribulations of being a singer and songwriter...

Good tracks. Vocal is well done (good balance). Good mix.

fj
Posted By: Al-David Re: The Nightingale - 12/15/20 01:47 PM
Hi James ...

Well, Floyd beat me to everything I was going to say ... literally. He probably said it much than I would have, though.

I always enjoy your spoken word songs ... you are so good with that style. You have a uniquely, pleasant voice for the genre. Another gem from you!

Wishing you a wonderful Christmas and fabulous 2021. Will be looking forward to more great songs from you next year.

Alan
Posted By: Tano Music Re: The Nightingale - 12/15/20 05:21 PM
Very nice James! I really liked the diminished chords in there and overall your cord progression was very interesting. The lyrics told a very emotional story about the lonely plate of the creative soul. Great work!
Posted By: musician17 Re: The Nightingale - 12/15/20 07:49 PM
fj: thank you! Good to know that the mix and vocal balance are ok!

Alan: as always, you are ever so kind. I really don't deserve such kind comments, but they are immensely appreciated nonetheless! Have a wonderful Christmas and yes, let's keep writing during all of 2021 and hopefully beyond!

Tano Music: thank you. I tried to make the chord progression interesting - on listening back, there's a small corner that I'm not sure works (right when the last section starts - between it and the section just before) ... but, in the spirit of "errare humanum est", I think I'll leave it like that, haha ... anyway, thank you!

Have a lovely Christmas, everyone!!!
Posted By: Janice & Bud Re: The Nightingale - 12/16/20 02:59 PM
Fascinating chord progression to carry the nice write.

And a good BiaB band and mix.

Tano said it so eloquently ... "the lonely plate of the creative soul."

Lovely,

J&B
Posted By: musician17 Re: The Nightingale - 12/17/20 11:13 AM
Thank you so much, Janice and Bud!
Posted By: edshaw Re: The Nightingale - 12/17/20 12:25 PM
Your songs touch a sacred place.
Posted By: musician17 Re: The Nightingale - 12/19/20 03:23 AM
Wow, Ed - thank you.
Posted By: tommyad Re: The Nightingale - 12/19/20 12:57 PM
This certainly made me think about how we all bare our souls when we put out these personal songs for all the world to hear. There are some great lines in the song and the mood of the backing tracks fits it quite well. I enjoyed listening to your observations on being both a writer and a performer. Well done,Tom
Posted By: Derochette Re: The Nightingale - 12/19/20 05:20 PM
Hi Musician17,

It's a very nice song with well written lyrics. It's a song that takes us to heart and it's successful. Well done.

Kindly regard
Derochette
alias JaniJackFlash
Posted By: Ezekiel's Storm Re: The Nightingale - 12/19/20 09:03 PM
The backing track is quite intriguing: It doesn't go as expected, but works nicely nonetheless. Smooth track.
Posted By: PeterF Re: The Nightingale - 12/20/20 12:57 AM
Nicely produced and written, with an interesting song structure.

A good listen.

Merry Christmas.

Peter
Posted By: musician17 Re: The Nightingale - 12/20/20 06:56 AM
Thank you everyone - didn't expect so many positive reactions!

tommyad: Yes, exactly - we do put ourselves out there. This one was at least partly autobiographical. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Derochette: thanks, very kind!

Ezekiel's Storm: yes, the backing track is a little unusual in a number of ways. I chose an arrangement with an organ because it reminded me of a small performance I did in a church once, in memory of a friend ... that's where this song was inspired from ... so I thought that a "church-like" arrangement may work ...

PeterF: very kind comments, thanks! I'm glad you liked it - I'm in awe of your own songs and performances, so to hear that is wonderful :-)

Merry Christmas to everyone on here ... thanks PGMusic once more!!! Stay safe and well, everyone!
Posted By: Greg Johnson Re: The Nightingale - 12/20/20 09:02 PM
Really nicely done James!! You voice and emotion fits the music track so well! Enjoyed! Take care and Merry Xmas! Greg
Posted By: Deej56 Re: The Nightingale - 12/22/20 12:24 PM
James,

A very good mix on this one—you’re voice is sitting perfectly in the music bed, just the right balance. And it’s your most expressive vocal performance that I’ve heard to date—lot of emotion there and hitting all the right spots. The lyrics have a great story, one that will resonate with most songwriters. And I love that lead acoustic guitar in the break. Good stuff!

My best to you,

Deej
Posted By: F.M.M. Re: The Nightingale - 12/22/20 05:21 PM
Hi James so different however very engaging creation nice work thanks for sharing Eric
Posted By: rayc Re: The Nightingale - 12/22/20 09:20 PM
James,
it's a good chord progression and lyric...nicely done.
"errare humanum est" is part of the song's message too.
I enjoyed it.
I can't deny I longed to hear a soaring female vocal supporting it but I enjoyed what you offer.
Posted By: musician17 Re: The Nightingale - 12/23/20 11:03 AM
Thanks everyone - you're all far too kind, but thank you. I hope you all, and everyone on this forum, partake of a wonderful Christmas - full of health, joy, laughter and, of course, music. May the New Year be kinder to us all. Happy Holidays!
Posted By: CaptainMoto Re: The Nightingale - 01/03/21 01:36 PM
Another good write.
Always enjoy you story telling.

moto
Posted By: musician17 Re: The Nightingale - 01/04/21 10:09 AM
Thank you so much, CaptainMoto! Happy New Year :-)
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