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Wrong To Write on YouTube

Sorry folks, this one has no relation to Carlos Santana except that its writer has always been a big fan, and is really really enjoying the current challenge on this forum.

In this song it seems the singer wrote a nasty-gram to his significant other who left him for another. But then he had time to think about it and wished he could take it back and just get her back. I'm not sure the meaning will come out in the lyrics. It's a conversation between two and we are not one of them.

The original vocal seemed a bit uncaring. When I redid it and tried to roll some compassion into it, it sounded like whining more than crying. So, after spending a couple days in bed with some kind of stomach flu, my voice seemed distressed enough to give it another go.

Your comments are much appreciated.

Style is _PBALCEL.STY (Pop Ballad w/ Cello & Guitars)
Style MIDI Instruments are : Bright Piano (2),
RealTracks in style: 838:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopBalladClean Ev 085
RealTracks in style: ~703:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Spirited Ev 085
RealTracks in song: 3348:Guitar, Electric, Soloist HazyBallad ev16 070
RealTracks in song: 1856:Cello, Background PopCountry Ev 085
RealDrums in style:NashvilleEven16^5-a:Snare, HiHat , b:Snare, Ride
I played bass and cried –er, sang.

Wrong To Write

You stood by my side until the day he took you away.
I can see now that you lied when you told me you would stay.
Every night I go to sleep alone. Every day I just wait for night.
I regret those words I was so wrong to write.

I sat with pen in hand, then started writing without a thought.
In truth I had to take a stand to regain the love brought.
I'll never understand what it meant to you if you could throw it all away.
I was wrong to write. I just want you to stay.

If I could take it back could I get you back? Would you stay right by my side?
I was in a mood when I wrote to you. Please forgive my foolish pride.
If I could take it back would you take me back? Would you make it all alright?
I want to take it back. I was so wrong to write. I want to take it back. I was so wrong to write.

Hi Marty ...

Somewhere between easy-pop and country - a place I like a lot of my music to reside. And yes, the meaning is well-depicted in the lyric. Nothing to worry about there.

As your music always is, this perfectly mixed and produced. You definitely weren't wrong to write this one! That acoustic guitar on the left carries the background tracks so nicely. The other backing tracks just fall in line behind it. Thanks for a real nice listen ...

Alan

Great hook, Marty! The style you chose matches the mood of the lyrics perfectly. Is that a BIAB guitar solo?

Very nice song Marty, good hook. I think your vocal came out very well, and really love the music and the mix. It's got a terrific overall sound that really drew me in.

Marty...what a hook!..."so wrong to write"...That's so creative and unforced and the music style and delivery fit it so well...loved your vocal on this...smooth and sincere...great love song...all of the lines of the lyric are conversational and as I said "unforced"...way to write man! I've made a few videos for some of my stuff but yours are always so well done and so cool! I'm jealous! Good on you Bud!

Marty,

Soulful and touching—I think your vocal delivery is spot on, conveying a sincere and longing regret. Love that guitar solo—works perfectly. Not sure why but this reminds me of a 50’s songs—lyrically it just has that feel to me—though sound wise it’s much more contemporary. No matter, as it’s sweet as all heck--and a clever hook. Well done!

All my best,

Deej

Marty,

Nice country pop ballad!
Soulful and touching as Deej sais.
Heartbreaking Song!
Your singing perfect fits this.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi

Thanks, Alan. Yeah, it's nice not having a target audience so I don't have to make a song fit the genre parameters. Thanks for your wonderful comment. Stay well.


Thanks, Dewey. Yes it is. Used multroffs to get it right --or close.

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Thanks, Brad. Glad the hook caught you.


Thanks for all of that, Dan! All of that!

Hi Marty,

This is really, really comfortable listening. It's similar to the electric-acoustic sound that I love and that I often seem to use in my own songs. Maybe that's why I could identify with it so well.



I love, love, love the hook and the play on words... "Wrong to write" versus "wrong to right". To my ears, I listen to your song and hear this as "wrong to write" because that's what the lyrics are clearly saying. But I also hear the song saying "wrong to right" as in the guy imploring his love interest to come back so that he can right his wrong. This is insanely clever. Though my brain never thinks of these kinds of lyrics, I sincerely admire them when I hear them in the work of others. I'm impressed!

I enjoyed the journey.

All the best,
Noel

Nice hook. Wrong to write.... nicely done.

This reminds me of the folk rock that I grew up listening to. Dan Fogleburg and others in that singer/songwriter/folk rock scene.

That was cool.

Marty,

You knocked this one outta-the-park!
Everything is well done.

Good write. A clever hook and you "wrote to it" really well. Good lines all over the place.
My favorite of yours.

Well sung.
Excellent BAND. Good solo! (and cool Bass, of course).
Excellent mix.

Like it. Like it. Like it!!!

fj

Hi Marty,

Well, the stomach flu certainly did sort of good work.
The vocal really sounds a bit affected, seized with emotion.
Perfectly fits this song.
Which is a really good song!

Rob and Anne-Marie

Marty suffers for his art.
It's the part of song recording that defeats me every time - I can't act with my voice.
Your voice does have the right edge to it on this song - well done virus!
A good narrative...we all live with regrets and pressing the END button these days, which seems to happen far too easily, compounds the problem.
A sad story wrapped in a very comfy arrangement & melody.
Nothing superfluous...nothing missing.
VERY cool.

Marty, what a fantastic song

Everything is so well balanced and your vocal was very strong

Outstanding lyrics

This took me back to the early 60s

Your best to date

I love this.
Excellent... top to bottom, start to finish...

Thanks, Deej. Guess my heart is in the 50s while my mind is here and now.


Thanks so much!!


YES, Noel! I reasoned similarly after writing the lyrics, and was going to end with "Write the wrong I did" in a second letter. Thanks so much!!


Thanks, Herb. I like the reference.

Good one, Marty, man, you are such a good writer! Vocal turned out great too.

Hello Marty
great song
Very nice melody
In addition a very good singing
Your songs are always very different.
that's exactly what I like about your music
Great work
Many greetings
Andi ;-)

Sounds like the stomach flu agrees with you

Don't take it back, I like it.


moto

Hi Marty,

This is a very nice sad (ex-) lovesong!
I loved it from the start, mainly because I always like this kind of chord progressions that force one into singing heartbraking things.
And you did that with the right touch in your vocals!

But I also had to laugh about Dave wrote:

because that writing brought you into trouble!!!

I was thinking if it could have been nice if you sang this song in a collaboration with Deej. He has that tremelo you were trying to achive. Both your voices could sound great in the chorusses, don't you think?
But without his vocals I still enjoyed your song a lot!
Is she back yet?

Hans

Thanks you, Thank you. Thank you, Floyd. Your inspiration is never-ending. I thought of you often when writing this one. So much so that if I ever made any money on it, you'd get half. O' course half o' nothin' ain't much, but my gratitude is infinte.


Thanks you guys. Rob, I can't mention this enough, but you did an outstanding job mixing Andi's song. Such variety of sounds to work with, and you brought them all together so well.


Thanks so much, Ray. Hey, I like your vocals. You don't need to act because you're good right out of the gate. [A Kentucky Derby reference.]


Thanks, Mario. Well-placed on the timeline, man. I was thinking pre-Beatles, around the time they were partying in Hamburg.

haha, yeah, you are right, Hans. I should have said lyricist, not writer

Wrong to write ... mega cool.

A new and clever take on remorse.

And we get to see the sentimental side of Babu.

Fine vocal, bass, and mix --- no surprises there

Well done in both the audio and video departments!

J&B

Loved the vocal Marty. Delicate delivery. So appropriate for your lyric. Excellent story telling. So much emotion. Lovely backtrack to frame vocal. the intro and guitar break was excellent as well.

The soundcloud version sounded my better than the youtube link.

Thanks, bloc-head.


I really liked this comment, Dave. But --see below.


Thanks, Andi. Appreciate that, man.


Haha. Cool comment, Moto. Thanks.


Thanks, Hans. Good suggestion about asking Deej. I love his voice. But I'll admit I'm confused about what you're saying about Dave's comment...

...and this didn't help me understand:


Thanks, Dave. But are you saying I'm not very good at writing the music part? hehe

Lyrics with wit and emotion. It was right to write such a beautiful ballad. I really enjoyed the mourning and regret in your voice. The cello gives nice depth to the mood. Excellent solo writes all the right notes.

Janne

Marty,
Super tune. Sad, yet listens very easy. Excellent vocals. Clever progression. Mix is top notch. Some good things come out even out of stomach flu...Who knew. Liked it! Thank you for sharing.

Misha.

P.S. I need some of those vitamins you are taking.

I like that "clever take on remorse." Thanks for everything, J&B.


Thanks, Scott. Yes, unfortunately YT really compresses the track, and sometimes the video distracts appreciation of the music. Thanks for your comments!!


Thanks, Janne. Glad you notice the regret and mourning. Yeah, that subtle cello seems to make a loud statement to me, too.


Thanks, Misha. Yes, the stomach flu gave it that edge of sleeplessness caused by crying or something.

This is gorgeous Marty!

Maybe you can start a gorgeous song challenge, or a crying song challenge??

What a pretty song Marty! You did a super job with vocals and bass! That cello following along tracing the melody really sounds good! You always do great work! Thanks, Torrey