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#155311 - 03/30/12 01:30 AM [User Showcase] A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen
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Rob4580 Offline
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Hey guys this is my first tune with the new pop screen.
I think its a little better than what I have been producing sound wise any way.

Sound Cloud

All Comments welcome.

A million Sparkling Stars


Some where near the moon and mars I let her take my heart.

Just by the milky way I knew that she'd be mine.
And for all time and then some more then she,l be mine. Ooh ooh

Met her in a thunder storm lightening flashing up high.
Couldnt bare to let her just pass bye.

I asked her why and then again could she be mine.
ooh ooh

.......................................................................
A million sparkling stars dont compare to you.
The heavens up above shine down for you.
.......................................................................

Our loves been like a hurricane thers good and then some bad.

But then its like a summer breeze that takes away the sad.

But then I know that your the best thing I ever had.

Repeat Chorus.



****** Song Summary *************
Title: A million Sparkling Stars
File:Sparkstrs.SGU
Key=C , Tempo 165, Length (m:s)=2:07
No intro. 84 bar chorus, from bar 1 to bar 84. Repeat x1 chorus
No Melody
No Soloist track.
Song is saved with Volume, Pan, Reverb, Chorus, Bank0,
Song is saved with bar changes for RealDrums Changes,
Style is _GEORGE.STY (Ctry Bal w George Fiddle (85 RS))
Style MIDI Instruments are :
RealTracks in style: ~~520:Bass, Electric, Pop HalfNotes Ev 165
RealTracks in style: ~~407:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Ev 165
RealTracks in style: ~~524:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Ev 165
RealTracks in style: ~~618:Fiddle, Background Allis Ev 120
RealDrums in style: NashvilleEven8^2-a:Sidestick, HiHat , b:Snare, HiHat
*******************

Vocals and guitar fill me

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#155312 - 03/30/12 02:13 AM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Rob4580]
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Hi Rob,

Nice, catchy song you've got happening. My fingers started tapping on the computer desk almost immediately after the intro started. The pop filters sure seems to have done it's job nicely No need to run scared of those 'p' sounds now.

In your post, you asked for comments. I hope you don't mind, and I apologize if I've over-stepped the line, but when I read your request, my "critical thinking" hat immediately flopped onto my head. As I listened, one thing that I noticed in the lyrics is that there's mixed perspective. My experience is that this usually weakens the cohesiveness of lyrics and confuses the listeners.

The first two sections ...
Quote:

Some where near the moon and mars I let her take my heart.
Just by the milky way I knew that she'd be mine.
And for all time and then some more then she,l be mine. Ooh ooh

Met her in a thunder storm lightening flashing up high.
Couldn't bare to let her just pass bye.
I asked her why and then again could she be mine.
ooh ooh



... are first person narrative. That is, a story about "I" the singer and "she", the character that the singer is telling the audience about.

Then when you get to ...
Quote:

A million sparkling stars dont compare to you.
The heavens up above shine down for you.



The lyrics' perspective changes to second person, direct address; where you are now talking directly to "you" and no longer telling a story to the audience.

In the last section, the word "Our" can mean either "she and I" or "you and I". Thus "Our" works for both perspectives.

Considering the above, I think it would help to make the song lyrically stronger if the perspective was consistent. To accomplish this, try either:

(a) replacing "her" and "she" with "you";
(b) replacing "you" with "her".

Just my thoughts. Please feel free to take or leave as you see fit.

All in all, I enjoyed listening

All the best,
Noel

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#155313 - 03/30/12 03:52 AM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Noel96]
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Rob4580 Offline
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Hey Noel.

Had a bit of a giggle when I read your comments.
Not that I was giggling at you but I didnt realise how complex the songs lyrics were.

I guess I could use the excuse that Im Schizophrenic.

No I dont think you over-stepped the line, so need need to apologize

Thanks for your imformative comments.

Your not a school teacher by any chance?

Regards Rob

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#155314 - 03/30/12 05:02 AM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Rob4580]
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Noel96 Offline
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Hi Rob,
Quote:

Your not a school teacher by any chance?



Is it that obvious!!!! I've also been to around a dozen weekend songwriting workshops by Prof. Pat Pattison (http://www.patpattison.com) who, to my mind, is one of the world's experts on lyrics. Have a look at some of the videos on his webpage and you'll see what I mean. Pat's book, Writing Better Lyrics (2nd Ed.), is one of my constants references and re-reads. I'm slowly feeling more comfortable with writing lyrics these days but I've still got a long way to go. My second favorite book of Pat's is Essential Guide to Lyric Form and Structure.

Glad I didn't step on any toes

Regards,
Noel

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#155315 - 03/30/12 05:00 PM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Noel96]
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Hey again Noel.
Checked out the web site .
Looks interesting.

Regards Rob

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#155316 - 03/30/12 10:41 PM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Rob4580]
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Yea new Pop Screen IronBarkBob that should stop those Pea's dead in their tracks! Seems like you get better with every song!

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#155317 - 03/31/12 12:45 AM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Tommyc]
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Hey Tommyc.
How you getting along?

Got a new one to put up in a couple of days.

Thanks for commenting.

Rob

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#155318 - 03/31/12 11:14 AM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Rob4580]
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Tim Lawrence Offline
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Hey Rob,

I really like the lyrics.
Sorry but my computer locks up about half the time I try to access Sound cloud, so I didn't even try to give it a listen.
But as I said the lyrics look good.

Tim

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#155319 - 03/31/12 12:53 PM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Tim Lawrence]
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Have you tried a different browser Tim?

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#155320 - 03/31/12 02:05 PM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Tommyc]
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Hi Tommyc,

I've tried IE and the latest version of FireFox.
Firefox was actually working pretty good with Sound Cloud for a while, then started only working about half the time.
I don't mind that, but when the computer locks and I have to do a hard reboot I start to get concerned about screwing up my computer by not shutting it down in the normal way.
Because of other browsers out there not working with speech I'm limited to using IE or fire fox.
I've sent bug reports off to Fire Fox every time it happened, so I'm hoping the next version of FF will solve the problem.
Unfortunately till then I don't feel comfortable accessing Sound cloud.

Tim

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#155321 - 03/31/12 07:02 PM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Tim Lawrence]
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Hello Tim.

Im about to try a new site called Indaba.
Will post link when uploaded.

Sorry to hear about your pc issues.

Regards Rob

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#155322 - 03/31/12 08:16 PM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Rob4580]
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Hello Tim.
Here is the link to Indaba.
Hope it work regards Rob.

http://www.indabamusic.com/asset/show/1708561#

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#155323 - 04/01/12 01:37 PM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Rob4580]
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Hi Rob,
This is really really good.

Two thumbs ups.

FYI – I have no problems what so ever using IE8 when listening via Sound Cloud.
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#155324 - 04/01/12 05:37 PM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: MarioD]
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Hey MarioD.
Thanks for the two thumbs up.

Regards Rob

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#155325 - 04/02/12 05:54 PM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Rob4580]
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Rob,

Two more thumbs up!

Another good one! Noel gave some good advice. The good thing about being schizophrenic is that you can do all your own background vocals!

(And I can listen to SoundCloud from any browser.)

Steve
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#155326 - 04/02/12 06:33 PM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Rob4580]
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Tim Lawrence Offline
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Hey Bob,

Thanks much for the new link. It worked.
I'm glad I got to hear this one. Like very much.
Your voice sort of reminds me of Marty Robbins, also your style as well.
Definitely a keeper.
Look forward to hearing more.

Tim

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#155327 - 04/02/12 07:09 PM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Tim Lawrence]
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Your a funny guy Steve you make me laugh.

The other good thing about being schizophrenic is you always have some one to talk to.

Rob

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#155328 - 04/03/12 03:37 AM [User Showcase] Re: A million Sparkling Stars: With POP Screen [Re: Rob4580]
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Hi Tim.
Glad you where able to hear my tune.

Thanks for the comparison to Marty Robins.
Regards Rob

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