Page 1 of 3 1 2 3 >
You need to be logged in to post
Options
Index
#179747 - 11/22/12 12:17 PM [User Showcase] New Song Girl It's Gone
Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Sundance Offline
Veteran

Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Hey Ya'll,

Here's a new song I wrote about a month ago called Girl It's Gone. All real tracks and vox recorded in RB and mixed in Tracktion. Lyrics in link.

I appreciate your time listening and all your comments are welcome - especially regarding the mix.

Hope you enjoy it.

Thank you,

Top
#179748 - 11/22/12 12:23 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: Sundance]
Registered: 08/10/12
Posts: 6945
Loc: Florida
floyd jane Offline
Veteran

Registered: 08/10/12
Posts: 6945
Loc: Florida
Josie - nice song. sounds great. love the piano that starts and ends it. your vocals sounds really good. and a nice mix. great job!
_________________________
125+ BIAB Songs

Top
#179749 - 11/22/12 12:38 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: floyd jane]
Registered: 08/25/03
Posts: 3073
Loc: wales
gibson Offline
Veteran

Registered: 08/25/03
Posts: 3073
Loc: wales
I agree with floyd jane. That was a beautiful song.
good stuff, sounds OK on my set up

Alyn
_________________________
My showcase songs


Top
#179750 - 11/22/12 12:42 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: floyd jane]
Registered: 06/22/12
Posts: 2868
Loc: Karlsruhe, Germany
boehm Offline
Veteran

Registered: 06/22/12
Posts: 2868
Loc: Karlsruhe, Germany
You're a great singer. I like the harmonies and the mix. Well done.

Guenter

Top
#179751 - 11/22/12 01:16 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: boehm]
Registered: 12/06/05
Posts: 4047
Loc: 80 Mi North of Sacramento CA
seeker Offline
Veteran

Registered: 12/06/05
Posts: 4047
Loc: 80 Mi North of Sacramento CA
Josie,

Great piece of work!

Ditto+ for Floyd, Alyn, and Guenter.

Love your vocals, they really standout nicely.

Thanks for sharing!
_________________________
FrankB

Down The Street vs2015 12-03-2014
Win7, AMD QuadA8-5500,16GB,2TeraHD, Komplete 10
PG Ultra Plus 2016,Alesis 12USB, Sonar Platinum

Top
#179752 - 11/22/12 01:43 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: seeker]
Registered: 05/12/12
Posts: 2471
Loc: South Africa
JoanneCooper Offline
Veteran

Registered: 05/12/12
Posts: 2471
Loc: South Africa
I love the vocal. Great stuff!

Top
#179753 - 11/22/12 01:47 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: JoanneCooper]
Registered: 01/08/11
Posts: 2957
Tommyc Offline
Veteran

Registered: 01/08/11
Posts: 2957
I always love your songs, this one is no exception! Great Job!

Top
#179754 - 11/22/12 02:55 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: Tommyc]
Registered: 06/05/12
Posts: 192
jptjptjpt Offline
Apprentice

Registered: 06/05/12
Posts: 192
What a lovely song. I love your vocals and the melody you created. Superb writing too. Outstanding use of BIAB.

Great tune!

Top
#179755 - 11/22/12 10:05 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: jptjptjpt]
Registered: 12/05/01
Posts: 649
occ Offline
Journeyman

Registered: 12/05/01
Posts: 649
Josie I love this. Great vocals and great mix. occ
_________________________
www.soundclick.com/ocandcompany

Top
#179756 - 11/23/12 02:45 AM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: Sundance]
Registered: 10/31/08
Posts: 14890
Loc: Australia
Noel96 Offline
Veteran

Registered: 10/31/08
Posts: 14890
Loc: Australia
Hey Josie!



I've now got a new favourite song of yours. This is top notch in every way!

There were some things that really stood out to me as exceptional crafting. Firstly was the use of the second-person-narrative point of view (that's what Pat Pattison calls it when one uses all pronouns except me or I and their related derivatives). To my ears, second person narrative is a very intimate form of story telling. In this instance, it's like the singer is taking a friend aside and giving heartfelt advice. When second-person-narrative perspective works, it works brilliantly. In these lyrics of yours, it's a hand-in-glove fit; perfect.

The second thing that stood out to me was your amazing lift. The two similes about a train and a plane added just the right touch of philosophical content to the lyrics to push them forward into the chorus. To my mind, these lines really empowered the chorus no end. The music that underpins these lyrics is also first class! (I've got to say that the train and plane are both powerful "gone" images and a masterstroke choice.")

A third thing that stood out to me was how skilled you are at singing and mixing your vocals. The writing, the performance and the production of this song are a tremendous credit to your abilities.

All the best,
Noel

Top
#179757 - 11/23/12 06:26 AM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: Noel96]
Registered: 06/25/12
Posts: 2501
JohnJohnJohn Offline
Veteran

Registered: 06/25/12
Posts: 2501
nicely written, wonderfully performed, great mix...it has everything! very nice job!

Top
#179758 - 11/23/12 01:27 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: JohnJohnJohn]
Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Sundance Offline
Veteran

Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Floyd,

Thank you. I was on the fence about the ending for a while and then went with it. So glad you like it.


Gibson,

Thank you for listening and commenting. Makes me feel like all the time I spent on this was worth it.


beohm,

Thank you. Feels good when I can catch a vibe that moves someone.


Seeker,

Thank you for the kind words, I really appreciate it.

Top
#179759 - 11/23/12 01:47 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: Sundance]
Registered: 02/11/05
Posts: 2646
Loc: Kentucky
PgFantastic Offline
Veteran

Registered: 02/11/05
Posts: 2646
Loc: Kentucky
Sundance, outstanding work! Lyrics, performance and production are all exceptional, thank you for sharing!




My Music Reverbnation
My Music Soundcloud
My Web Page
_________________________
My Tunes

Psalm 57:7 My heart, O God, is steadfast, my heart is steadfast; I will sing and make music.

Top
#179760 - 11/23/12 01:49 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: Sundance]
Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Sundance Offline
Veteran

Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Joanne,

Thank you so much. Nice having another female pov.


Tommyc,

You are quite inspiring to me. Thank you Tommy.


jpt,

You made my day. Thank you.


occ,

Thank you. I'm glad it touched your heart.

Top
#179761 - 11/23/12 02:17 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: Sundance]
Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Sundance Offline
Veteran

Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Noel,

Thank you, thank you and thank you. This was a tough song to write. When I went to my sad place in my mind, I was actually working on a different song. Then to my surprise I got stuck in some really heavy old pain that I thought was over long ago. You are right, I wrote this to my younger heartbroken self using the approach as if talking to my best friend.

Not going to say how many times I remixed it.

Thank you again. I really appreciate your time and the nice things you said.

Top
#179762 - 11/23/12 02:20 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: Sundance]
Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Sundance Offline
Veteran

Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Robert,

Thank you. Appreciate that very much.

Top
#179763 - 11/23/12 02:26 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: Sundance]
Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Sundance Offline
Veteran

Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
If ya'll have a few minutes to spare, Bob made a really cool video of this song for me.


Girl It's Gone video

Top
#179764 - 11/23/12 02:37 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: Sundance]
Registered: 11/09/12
Posts: 89
Loc: Naples FL
pariahdise Offline
Enthusiast

Registered: 11/09/12
Posts: 89
Loc: Naples FL
Hey Josie,

Another pretty good song, I thought. I also thought the backing vocals could have been more present, and that the lead guitar was a bit too busy. It's my personal preference but I tend to not let the lead guitar compete with the vocals, unless, it is mimicking the vocal, and even then, only rarely. Good job..

RG
_________________________
https://soundcloud.com/rfgoggin

Top
#179765 - 11/23/12 04:57 PM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: pariahdise]
Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
Sundance Offline
Veteran

Registered: 05/30/08
Posts: 4414
RG,

Actually, believe it or not I tried several mixes with less busy lead gtr and louder bgvs but this one best captured the vibe I wanted.

Thank you for the nice comments and suggestions, I appreciate it.

Top
#179766 - 11/24/12 01:49 AM [User Showcase] Re: New Song Girl It's Gone [Re: Sundance]
Registered: 08/25/03
Posts: 3073
Loc: wales
gibson Offline
Veteran

Registered: 08/25/03
Posts: 3073
Loc: wales
WOW that video is excellent!!! How did Bob do that???????? What program did he use????
It really adds to the lovely song

Alyn
_________________________
My showcase songs


Top
Page 1 of 3 1 2 3 >


PG Music News
Polish Band-in-a-Box® 2019 for Windows is Here!

Istnieje wiele ekscytujących nowych funkcji w Band-in-a-Box 2019!

Band-in-a-Box® z RealBand 2019: Pakiety
Band-in-a-Box® z RealBand 2019 dla Windows : Nowych Funkcji

Spanish Band-in-a-Box® 2019 for Windows is Here!

Band-in-a-Box® 2019 para Windows® está aquí!

Nuevas características
Todos los Paquetes

Video - Repeats & Endings Dialog Overview for Band-in-a-Box® 2019 for Windows

In our latest video, video we go over the Repeats & Endings Dialog within Band-in-a-Box® 2019 - Learn more...

This video includes information on repeats, 1st/2nd endings, dc al coda, ds al coda, dc al fine, ds al fine, and Fake Sheet Mode.

Testimonial - Woody Piano Shack's Thoughts on Band-in-a-Box®

Check out our latest Video Testimonial from Woody of Woody Piano Shack! Woody uses Band-in-a-Box primarily as a training tool within his YouTube channel and private lessons. He's been a Band-in-a-Box user since the Atari ST days, and is very impressed with the evolution of our program - watch and you'll see! Click here...

Video - Audio Harmony Overview in Band-in-a-Box® 2019 for Windows

We've updated our Audio Harmony Overview video using the latest Band-in-a-Box 2019 for Windows program! Watch now...

Learn even more about Audio Harmonies using the Online Manual, here.

Danish Band-in-a-Box® 2019 for Windows is Here!

Band-in-a-Box® 2019 til Windows® er klar!

Pakker
Nye funktioner

Dutch Band-in-a-Box® 2019 for Windows is Here!

Band-in-a-Box® 2019 voor Windows® is hier!

Pakketten
Nieuwe Functies

Forum Stats
29490 Members
60 Forums
58104 Topics
488068 Posts

Max Online: 2434 @ 11/14/17 12:37 AM
Newest Members
wekds3, jnasser, rdfares, Mr. Melby, Fi1

29491 Registered Users
Top Posters (30 Days)
Jim 140
Noel96 131
Janice & Bud 128
rsdean 119
Ember - PG Music 115
rayc 106
Tangmo 103
Joe -PG Music 91
Jim Fogle 89
Deryk - PG Music 85
Today's Birthdays
alfstone, MusicStudent, Oren Fisher, Pete b