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You Don't Serve Me Anymore

Here is my entry for the jazz category. The style is _SMOOTHY, and I have used also Vocal Oohs and organ realtracks. The melody is bit out my vocal range, but I tried my best This would really need more soulful vocalist anyway.

Style is _SMOOTHY.STY (Smoothie Soul and Smooth Ballad)
Category: Jazz

RealTracks in style: 908:Bass, Electric, SmoothBallad Ev16 065
RealTracks in style: 2808:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm SoulfulPop16thsMike Ev16 065 Reverb 20
RealTracks in style: 1072:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm SmoothJazzBallad Ev16 065 Reverb 75
RealTracks in style: 1543:Synth Pad, PopBelieve Ev16 065 Reverb 120
RealDrums in style: SmoothJazzBallad^3-a:Sidestick, HiHat , b:Sidestick, Ride Reverb 60

RealTracks in song: 1656:Organ, Soloist Bossa Ev 085
RealTracks in song: 673:Organ, B3, Background Blues BB Ev 085
RealTracks in song: 3064:Vocal Oohs, Rhythm Pop3-part Ev 085

Vocals: Janne S
Mixed in Sonar Platinum

Lyrics:

You filled my mug of life with foam
but happy hours are long gone
you made me feel like I am home
now how am I supposed to go on?
Cooling stream of sparkling joy
from the vessel of your heart
I could enjoy bites of kindness
you were serving a la carte.

It's been a long time since your last call
it's hard to swallow the aftertaste, the bitter fall
you don't serve me anymore
you don't serve me anymore.

Your stout embrace intoxicating
an age-old spirit that made me strong
you let me be a vulnerable
uncertain man, you let me belong.
please forgive if I have been
heavy-handed or too loud
or was I just drinking too much
to be stranded and shut out?

It's been a long time...

I have many stories to tell
but there is no one who listens to
life on the rocks, living through hell
like you did for years before
but you don't serve me anymore.

I was an actor in your play
but my glass is empty now
you have got what you wished from me
it's my time to take a bow.
Just for good and old times' sake
could I get a final round?
I will accept it's my last shout
and then I'll leave you chances downed.

It's been a long time...

Your door is closed
I'm out on the streets, exposed
the shadows of my past on my heels
an unwelcome man, that's how life feels.

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Janne

Janne,

Really cool piece here! Congrats and good luck. Like the lyrics.

I have NO idea what to do for a jazz piece. Still scratching my head.

Janne, this is an excellent piece of music. Great lyrics, chord progression, and mix. Your vocal is very good also.

I love this and especially the double entendre play on words in the lyric.

Thanks David for liking and kind words I'm quite sure you'll find inspiration for your jazz piece Good luck for the contest you too!

Janne

Thanks Mario for your very kind words Good luck for the contest!

Janne

Thanks John for your positive feedback As a non-native English speaker, I wasn't quite sure that my lyrical intentions are easy to understand, but I'm glad you noticed my playing with words Naturally, I'm sure a native English speaker would have managed to extend the idea much further...

Janne

Yeah Janne, this is REALLY cool.

Totally enjoyed it.

Good luck with the contest.