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Demo Lyrics Cryptic Drifter.mp3 (googleDrive )

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Hi everyone,
So, I made my first draft on the lyrics to this song. It's about a man (or a handler) who falls in love, with his " MK-Ultra " mind controlled victim... he decides ... to release her, so that she might help him work against the cabal, that started this entrapment network, which he wants to get out of.... He doesn't know if his victim will turn against him, or join forces with him.

So the lyrics, "must" be modified to fit this narrative.
Seems like an interesting way to write a song, because the melody and much of the song is already done. Perhaps this songwriting method is the direction I should go.... ??? Maybe www.rhymezone.com will be useful. Has anyone used it?

The tempo 64bpm: might be set to go faster... later...
What do you think??? All comments welcome... eek


0:09 I hope your happy
0:13 With that smile
0:17 Today's a special day
0:19 You'll be staying for a while
0:24 It's time to show you

0:28 Your the one...
0:31 You break the spells
0:33 You thought, you spun
0:36 and.. oh my..
0:38 Everything's under the sun
0:43 Oh, yes

0:47 I've been a handle
0:51 You've been a cup
0:54 The world so crazy
0:58 The world so crazy

1:03 It's time to show you
1:06 Yeah..your the one

1:09 I hope your happy
1:13 With that smile
1:17 Today's a special day
1:20 You'll be staying for a while
1:24 It's time to show you

1:28 The world is crazy
1:31 The world so crazy
1:35 But things are about to change

1:40 You are the one
1:43 oh my..
1:47 Everything's under the sun
1:51 Oh, yes

1:53 It's so crazy
1:55 The world so crazy
2:00 The world so crazy
2:04 The world so crazy

2:08 Today's the day
2:12 With that smile
2:16 Oh, yes
2:18 It's time to show you
2:24 Oh, yes

2:27 With that smile
2:31 You are the one
2:34 I've been a handle
2:37 You've been a cup
2:43 Oh, yes

2:49 I hope your happy
2:53 With that smile
2:56 You'll break the spells
2:58 You thought, you spun
3:01 and .. oh my..
3:04 Everything's under the sun

3:09 Oh, yes
3:12 Oh my..
3:16 It's time to show you
3:20 You are the one
3:23 I've been a handle
3:26 You've been a cup

3:31 I hope your happy
3:35 With that smile
3:39 It's time to show you
3:43 You are the one

3:46 Oh my..
3:49 Everything's under the sun
3:52 You are the one
3:56 You are the one

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I use rhymezone.com all the time when I can't think of a rhyme and it does give me some good ideas. But I don't think it solves all the problems of writing good lyrics it's just another tool to use.

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Originally Posted By: Belladonna
I use rhymezone.com all the time when I can't think of a rhyme and it does give me some good ideas. But I don't think it solves all the problems of writing good lyrics it's just another tool to use.


I've heard of rhymezone but have never used it.
I'm just a song writing bottom feeder as I just struggle through the lyric writing process, the mental gyrations and hopefully I finish something that meets my satisfaction.
Guess I should peruse the 'rhymezone'.

I agree....employing an interesting subject matter and fleshing out a good story line where the verses and chorus actually adhere to it is more important than just rhyming for the sake of rhyming. smile
It's not any easy task for us song writers.

Back to topic....

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Originally Posted By: Belladonna
I use rhymezone.com all the time when I can't think of a rhyme and it does give me some good ideas. But I don't think it solves all the problems of writing good lyrics it's just another tool to use.


I've heard of rhymezone but have never used it.
I'm just a song writing bottom feeder as I just struggle through the lyric writing process, the mental gyrations and hopefully I finish something that meets my satisfaction.

I agree....employing an interesting subject matter and fleshing out a good story line where the verses and chorus actually adhere to it is more important than just rhyming for the sake of rhyming. smile
It's not any easy task for us song writers.

Back to topic....


Thanks Belladonna & chulaivet1966 for your comments. I should have mentioned the mp3 from the google drive is the better version, because the vocals were spliced and and copy/pasted to populate the song melody; as temporary building blocks. Right now I have the lyrics printed out on the left side, while I'm "fleshing out " better lyrics to fit the narrative... placing the new lyrics on the right side of the page.

I've used 6 rhymes so far from rhymezone.

I am sharing this method.... so have no excuses to throw in the towel; while I'm remaining open to this lyric challenge.

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Originally Posted By: LPman
[quote=chulaivet1966][quote=Belladonna]"fleshing out " better lyrics


Although I don't write love songs or ballads I'd like to throw this out which is my approach (probably along with many others).
After choosing a subject matter I need to go there in_my_mind.
IE: if I wanted to write a song about the Grand Canyon.
I'd close my eyes and go there....maybe check a few YT videos, or look at Grand Canyon book or photos to help with the concept as I write down what I envision to create the imagery into lyrical form.
Of course....there's a tool called 'rhymezone' that can be utilized too. smile

Don't mean to hijack your initial intent here at all.

Back to topic....good luck on your song quest.

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[quote=chulaivet1966][quote=Belladonna]"fleshing out " better lyrics


Although I don't write love songs or ballads I'd like to throw this out which is my approach (probably along with many others).
After choosing a subject matter I need to go there in_my_mind.
IE: if I wanted to write a song about the Grand Canyon.
I'd close my eyes and go there....maybe check a few YT videos, or look at Grand Canyon book or photos to help with the concept as I write down what I envision to create the imagery into lyrical form.
Of course....there's a tool called 'rhymezone' that can be utilized too. smile

Don't mean to hijack your initial intent here at all.

Back to topic....good luck on your song quest.


Your not hijacking my intent, I welcome your comments... I know very little about MK-Ultra... so I am breaking a rule, about writing what I don't know... Yes rhyme zone is just a cluster tool with rhyming attributes...

I am having difficulties sorting out multiple overlapping agendas... much like the "matrix"... never escaping rules of control...

Right now it seems... a smile is a form of a lethal transference... in my song.... and intent is an illusion ... and there is no escape! Ambiguity is becoming the problem.

I don't mind making this song a creative common license. I am interested mostly in making this a viable method for both music & lyrics
lyrics update

Thanks for your comments, I welcome all creative suggestions




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Although I don't write love songs or ballads I'd like to throw this out which is my approach (probably along with many others).
After choosing a subject matter I need to go there in_my_mind.
IE: if I wanted to write a song about the Grand Canyon.
I'd close my eyes and go there....maybe check a few YT videos, or look at Grand Canyon book or photos to help with the concept as I write down what I envision to create the imagery into lyrical form. From chulailet1966


My process is much like chulailet1966. I put myself in the experience of what I'm writing, I become the person, I go to the place in my mind. Sometimes I do read articles and research what I'm writing. I did a song called "The Ghost of Jenny Gray" which is a local folklore, but couldn't find alot about it so I read about another famous ghost near our area and then visualized the area Jenny was from and did the song.

I also like to think of my verses as writing for short scenes in a play, movie or a video, you would have the setting, the characters, the conversations, etc. Verse 1 would be a scene with details, the Chorus would be your hook, an emotional or generalized sing a long, Verse 2 would be another related scene with more details. The Bridge could be some new reflection, or a twist on the story, or a conclusion.

I like to write out the story first and then start my lyrics and rhyme schemes. A "great title" is really essential as it helps create your catchy chorus. A "great unusual title" also grabs the listener's attention immediately. The first few lines are equally important to pull the listener into the song. Also, need a good melody and a catchy chorus.

The music is "king" as it has to be good, the lyrics are "queen". In other words if the music is not good, no one is going to care about good lyrics. Sometimes if the music is good, one can get away with substandard lyrics. But the best marriage of course is good music and good lyrics.

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Originally Posted By: Belladonna
I like to write out the story first and then start my lyrics and rhyme schemes. A "great title" is really essential as it helps create your catchy chorus. A "great unusual title" also grabs the listener's attention immediately. The first few lines are equally important to pull the listener into the song. Also, need a good melody and a catchy chorus.


I took a song writing class when doing my music major in college. (1975)
The teacher suggested what you note above....write out the complete story line as complete as one desires then deal with putting it in lyrical form.

To be honest....I don't write using that discipline all the time....just sometimes.
Since I've been writing for some time I tend to do a lot changing/editing within my pea brain during the writing process.

Back to topic....


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Originally Posted By: chulaivet1966
Originally Posted By: Belladonna
I like to write out the story first and then start my lyrics and rhyme schemes. A "great title" is really essential as it helps create your catchy chorus. A "great unusual title" also grabs the listener's attention immediately. The first few lines are equally important to pull the listener into the song. Also, need a good melody and a catchy chorus.


I took a song writing class when doing my music major in college. (1975)
The teacher suggested what you note above....write out the complete story line as complete as one desires then deal with putting it in lyrical form.

To be honest....I don't write using that discipline all the time....just sometimes.
Since I've been writing for some time I tend to do a lot changing/editing within my pea brain during the writing process.

Back to topic....



When I made the song "To world " I did it completely on the fly. Not a word was written... I never lived "in a town that is now gone "... don't even know where that came from,.. and yet it was the most profound part of the song... in my opinion.
I tried to say things, I might not be willing to back up very well afterwards. I sang from my alternative ignored self... Knowing I was giving my pea-brain a chance to be heard... the part that would be slaughtered in the real world, or the complex rest of me, would not be willing to survive with. I was a lame duck, trying to surprise myself.... and I kinda did. The song surpassed all my other songs, because it is still on the Voloco autotune app featured songs... Plugging BiaB2018

I Wonder if I will ever pull that off again?

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Well LP Man I certainly hope you do. Lightning does sometimes strike the same place twice. Consistent good writing is quite another matter, but miracles do happen.

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Originally Posted By: Belladonna
Well LP Man I certainly hope you do. Lightning does sometimes strike the same place twice. Consistent good writing is quite another matter, but miracles do happen.


Well, I am more a tinkerer, then a writer

Lyrics Cryptic Drifter V1.3

This song should have repeatable lyrics, because brainwashing stories, are snippets that have added info per iterations. Haven't done the vocals yet: Singing in a parental soft voice will make this song more creepy though sick


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Lyrics Cryptic Drifter

0:09 I hope your happy
0:13 With that smile
0:17 Today's the day
0:19 You're staying for a while
0:24 It's time to show you

0:28 Your the one...
0:31 You broke the spells
0:33 You thought, you spun
0:36 and.. oh my..
0:38 Everything's under the sun
0:43 Oh, yes

0:47 I've been a handle
0:51 You've been a cup
0:54 The world so crazy
0:58 It's totally crazy

1:03 It's time to show you
1:06 Yeah..what we are

1:09 I don’t feel savvy
1:13 Or worthwhile
1:17 Today's a penciled day
1:20 We are going to wait a while
1:24 It's time to show you

1:28 The world is crazy
1:31 We’re ULTRA crazy
1:35 But things are about to change

1:40 You were the one
1:43 Good-bye
1:47 Everything's under the gun
1:51 Out-guessed

1:53 It's so crazy
1:55 My heart is racing
2:00 The worlds gone hazy
2:04 A soul is waking

2:08 Today's the day
2:12 Without a smile
2:16 Oh, yes
2:18 I never told you
2:24 Don't guess

2:27 Without that smile
2:31 Your not anyone
2:34 I've been a handle
2:37 You've been a cup
2:43 Just rest

2:49 I’m not your daddy
2:53 Now, with two smiles
2:56 You figured it out
2:58 Will ya cat meow
3:01 and .. oh my..
3:04 Everything's under the sun

3:09 Out-guessed
3:12 Good-bye
3:16 I couldn’t sell ya
3:20 Your now the one
3:23 You’ll be the handle
3:26 I’ll be the cup

3:31 Hope you’ll be happy
3:35 Without guile
3:39 I can’t hold you
3:43 Your not anyone

3:46 Oh my..
3:49 Everything's under the sun
3:52 Your not one
3:56 You are the one



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Yes, kinda creepy. Hmmmm!!!


Yeah, having second thoughts sick
I decided to make lyric corrections

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Cryptic Drifter ( take 02 ) on Smule


I think some lyrics will have to be removed... for more breathing space

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