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Closer Than A Tattoo

Pop Rock nostalgia.

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RealTracks in style: 1526:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopPowerPushA-B Ev 120
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Closer Than A Tattoo

all I have is one picture
from our summer of love
standing on the bridge like you`re reading scripture
from the clouds above

I like to think it was me
put that spark in your eyes of flint
pressed the shutter couldn`t breathe
knowing you weren`t one to blink

train clattering round the bend
there`s no full stop at our story`s end

a tear of candlewax
hides the tree where we sheltered
the sun and moon my defences stood no chance
when you danced by the river

said we`re never going back
with our bodies and with ink
we`d stitch our fate make it fact
an indelible link

pulling out to the chains length
the best laid plans with all our strength

hearts too full
hearts too full for our lips to speak
if I could choose
choose the words a day with you to keep
clearer than a picture
closer than a tattoo

carry my dreams from the attic to the cellar
you and me girl in Kodachrome forever

hearts too full
hearts too full for our lips to speak
if I could choose
choose the words a day with you to keep
clearer than a picture
closer than a tattoo

© Robert Cordrey Dec. 2018

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Nice write - very evocative. Solid production, well sung. Not my style of melody, but enjoyable nonetheless.

we`d stitch our fate make it fact

Great line.


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The unexpected phrasing of longer lines reminds me of Grant McLennan of the Go-Betweens' solo work.
Your voice becomes more certain and on task as the song progresses.
"Closer than a tattoo" is a very effective image.


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Nice one, Robert! As always a good write.

Over all the vocal sounded good, and the vocal harmonies are very effective.

Nice production also, starting out with just the piano works well, and I like the way you brought in the pedal steel.

Good way to start out the new year!

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Hello Robert,

what a great song title that's a really strong picture.. And a very nice song, too. Enjoyed the listen.

Cheers,

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Robert, interesting and fresh!

Great lyrics. Interesting harmony. Almost like punk rock sections were smoothed and slowed down for this smile
I enjoyed it!

Thank you!
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I enjoyed the lyrics & your vocal delivery of them...
vivid images leading to the hook... Closer Than A Tattoo
I really like that phrase.


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Robert,

This is a great piece... I love the feel and the dark undertones. Lots of texture and a very cool set of lyrics.

I'm all in on this one. smile

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Originally Posted By: dcuny
Nice write - very evocative. Solid production, well sung. Not my style of melody, but enjoyable nonetheless.

we`d stitch our fate make it fact

Great line.


Thanks for the positives, David.
Due to the busy season I got the vocal in 3 takes ( I`m usually I`m in double figures!) so glad you approve of that.

Robert

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Enjoyed the song - as always an interesting and clever lyric. Has all the hallmarks of your style and is nicely
produced and written.

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Great band with lots of dynamics in the arrangement. Very clear mix and that pedal steel with it strong reverb fits perfectly. Nice photographic story.

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Robert. You got me with the title of this one and it didnt disappoint. Your lyrics are always so well thought out and crafted. Kudos on the production too.


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Robert some really really great imaginary in your lyrics. Beautiful contemplation and memories. Really enjoyed the vocals and melody. Very good song.

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Awesome tune Robert. Loved the way you started the song. Very cool when the band kicked it. Super vocal. Mix was excellent as well


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Robert,

"Closer Than A Tattoo" - One of the most intriguing titles I've ever heard!! Awesome.

And a very interesting write. Very original.

"said we`re never going back
with our bodies and with ink
we`d stitch our fate make it fact
an indelible link"

Strong.

The BAND on this is really nice. A good mix, And your vocal is "confident". One of your best, I think.

I like it.

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Originally Posted By: rayc
The unexpected phrasing of longer lines reminds me of Grant McLennan of the Go-Betweens' solo work.
Your voice becomes more certain and on task as the song progresses.
"Closer than a tattoo" is a very effective image.


Thank you- I`ll have to check out that singer.

Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
Nice one, Robert! As always a good write.

Over all the vocal sounded good, and the vocal harmonies are very effective.

Nice production also, starting out with just the piano works well, and I like the way you brought in the pedal steel.

Good way to start out the new year!


Dave,
I`ve been trying different things to make mixes less muddy,so I hope its working.
Originally I had the whole band in at the start- it seemed to take away from the lyrics so thanks for the nod on the just piano opening.

Robert

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Hello Robert,

what a great song title that's a really strong picture.. And a very nice song, too. Enjoyed the listen.

Cheers,

Stefan


Stefan,

Thanks for your listen and comments!


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Nicely done Robert!! Pretty song, and some beautiful lyrical images...reminds me a little of Leonard Cohen! Vocal is very emotive and beautiful. Like Floyd said, great title. You should listen to This Tattoo (great song by David Wilcox). Great stuff here!! Take care. Greg

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I always enjoy the listen and know that I'll like what you write

I'm a fan

you are a creative and great writer

I don't always love the phrasing but it makes it uniquely you

this is a fine write, storytelling is what we're supposed to be about

love it,

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Originally Posted By: Rustyspoon#
Robert, interesting and fresh!

Great lyrics. Interesting harmony. Almost like punk rock sections were smoothed and slowed down for this smile
I enjoyed it!

Thank you!
Misha.



Thanks for that, Misha!

Originally Posted By: Jim
I enjoyed the lyrics & your vocal delivery of them...
vivid images leading to the hook... Closer Than A Tattoo
I really like that phrase.


I appreciate that - no idea where that line came from, just glad I wrote it down and saved it!

Originally Posted By: rsdean
Robert,

This is a great piece... I love the feel and the dark undertones. Lots of texture and a very cool set of lyrics.

I'm all in on this one. smile

Bob


Thank you, Bob!

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Robert

Enjoyed the song - as always an interesting and clever lyric. Has all the hallmarks of your style and is nicely
produced and written.

Peter


Peter,

I`m glad you liked this. I guess I have a recognizable lyrical style... sometime I think musically I`d do better to play around with less varied styles though!

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Originally Posted By: jannesan
Great band with lots of dynamics in the arrangement. Very clear mix and that pedal steel with it strong reverb fits perfectly. Nice photographic story.

Janne


Thank you,Janne!

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Robert. You got me with the title of this one and it didnt disappoint. Your lyrics are always so well thought out and crafted. Kudos on the production too.


Joanne,
Thanks for your listen and kind comments!

Originally Posted By: Belladonna
Robert some really really great imaginary in your lyrics. Beautiful contemplation and memories. Really enjoyed the vocals and melody. Very good song.


Its good to hear that - particularly on the lyrics; you write some cool images yourself!


Originally Posted By: Scott C
Awesome tune Robert. Loved the way you started the song. Very cool when the band kicked it. Super vocal. Mix was excellent as well


Thank you, Scott!

Robert

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