Once again you and Janice strike gold! How do the two of you manage it so comfortably and so often? I wish I knew
This is a wonderful listen in every possible way -- writing, arranging, performing, producing and presenting; and the band was seriously well chosen. First class EVERYTHING from start to end!
Right now I'm sitting here doing some heavy duty thinking about a couple of the strategies that you've used that really made me sit up and pay attention.
Firstly, it was lyric-writing magic how you used point-of-view to develop these lyrics. I've never written a set of lyrics where perspective seems to change as the song progresses. As I see it, that’s pretty advanced stuff and to get it to work requires a bit of skill. I’ve always subscribed to the theory that the perspective stays consistent from beginning to end. While I suspect that you might have done this in the past, and I’m going to have to go and revisit your songs to find out, it’s just today that my brain fully appreciated what you have done.
These lyrics started out using the perspective of a first person narrator; that is, “this is my story and how it happened to me”.
i don't know what's supposed to follow next
just making it up as i go
some things work some things don't
there's a whole bunch i still don't know
none of that stops me from moving on
though sometimes i get stuck in the past
i do my best to deal with the demons
hoping the scars don't last
Then, at the end of the chorus you introduce first person plural with “we”. Now, all of a sudden, the lyrics become inclusive of someone else. This change in perspective landscape worked for me.
Moving on to verse 2, you introduce us to the character ‘you’. Now, all of a sudden with this new addition, I formed the impression that the ‘I’ character was working his way through a relationship bump by kind of talking to himself while addressing the woman called ‘you’ who is not actually present. In this regard, you’ve used the poetic literary device called Apostrophe
I know I’ve mentioned your use of apostrophe in a couple of other posts. This particular use, though, really stood out to me because I thoroughly liked the delay in understanding how you’d devised these lyrics. The effect of using perspective that seems to move, but in reality does not, was very, very clever. I hope I don’t sound too envious but I’d love to have the kind of brain that could be inventive like that!
Secondly, the other thing that caused me to think, “floyd that was magnificent – a spark of genius”, was the ending. It is incredibly effective that you throw harmonic and melodic resolution out the window and leave the song hanging in mid-air. It suits the 'I'm working my way through a problem' nature of these lyrics. As the lyrics say, "I'm just praying we'll figure it out"... and the lack of musical resolution is a hand-in-glove match the lack of resolution of that lyric phrase.... wonderful writing and arranging!
You've given me a couple of really great ideas to reflect on and to play around with. Thank you!
Just today I learnt to say a bit of Korean that resonated with all that I thought about this composition and your and Janice’s performances...
(I'm presently trying to teach myself a bit of Korean using Youtube just to see if I can.)
May good things come your way,