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#544644 - 07/08/19 03:40 PM [User Showcase] Laugh in the Dark
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Laugh in the Dark

I thought I would write a song around the lyric "laugh in the dark," which I took from the old amusement park spook house ride, Laff in the Dark. This is the result of my efforts.

In addition to the Real Tracks, I added some loops and a synth calliope in the bridge.

Real Tracks (in no particular order):
RT1010 Bass, Electric, BritInvasion
RT2433 Guitar, Electric, Rhythm NewOrleansMardiGras
RT410 Guitar, Electric, Rhythm Country Cowboy
RT381 Guitar, Electric, Rhythm Syncopated Sugar
RealDrums-RockHardLA
RT2327 Koto, Synth, Rhythm NewAge
RT 1031 12 String Guitar
RT2582 Synth, Rhythm MutedMelody
RT2305 Synth, Background DanceRockTensionPad
RT2023 Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm CountryRockJohn
RC395 Guitar, Electric, Soloist Metal



I thought I knew you
Met somewhere before
I saw right through you
A hackneyed metaphor
Set me free. I wanna be free.

Oh I knew it wasn’t right
Still I loved you on a lark
You always cry in the light
And you laugh in the dark

Shattered pieces
Hanging on the wall
Tattered creases
Betraying your downfall
Set me free. I wanna be free.

Oh I knew it wasn’t right
Still I loved you on a lark
You always cry in the light
And you laugh in the dark

Crimson beads
Deadend leads
Your hunger breeds
A pocketful of needs
Nothing left to feed

Oh I knew it wasn’t right
Still I loved you on a lark
You always cry in the light
And you laugh in the dark

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#544645 - 07/08/19 03:48 PM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Powerful rock with a good lyric (You always cry in the light And you laugh in the dark).
Great production and vocals. I also liked the synth you added. Rob

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#544681 - 07/08/19 07:56 PM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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An interesting melange of elements. I don't think the solo at the intro worked all that well but the otehrs seemed to fit in fine.
The bridge is really cool.
I enjoyed the whole package - well recorded/performed vocals and all.
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#544696 - 07/09/19 02:55 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Yeah, I like this. Good writing, nice arrangement and production, good mix, excellent vocal!

Good from start to finish. Really liked the ending, unexpected but fun.

Well done!

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#544711 - 07/09/19 07:27 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Nice work on this one! It really packs a punch - love the groove, your vocals and the progression. I'm getting a 90's vibe on this one. Really catchy, and an interesting source of inspiration as well.

Thanks for sharing smile
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#544712 - 07/09/19 07:35 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: BlueAttitude]
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I like this really good mix good write great vocal everything spot on eric
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#544721 - 07/09/19 07:51 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Very well put together. The BAND sound like...well...a band! who have been playing together for a while. Nice "little bits" thrown in at all the right time. A very cohesive sound. Nice use of the Metal soloist...

Good vocals, harmonies and vocal effects throughout. Sitting in the mix "just right".

A good write. (I've always like the word "hackneyed" - and have also used it... HA!)

Good music. Well done.

fj

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#544736 - 07/09/19 10:33 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Thanks for sharing this Ezekiel's Storm, I found this quite a treat to listen to and the instruments are layered very nicely. Nice work!
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#544741 - 07/09/19 11:39 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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"Your hunger breeds
A pocketful of needs"

One of many cool lines!

This is a very polished sounding production with lots of nice little bits here
and there to grab and keep your attention.

We know nothing about the type of vocal effects used for a production
like this but whatever you did sounds great and much like the late 80's - 90's.

The mix is really strong...you took those dozen or more tracks and shaped
them into a great soundstage.

Kudos!

J&B
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#544744 - 07/09/19 11:43 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Very nice! Well constructed lyrics. Many good lines in this one.

Really enjoyed it!

Steve
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#544757 - 07/09/19 01:23 PM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Well its about time...
I've been waiting since May smile...
But you've finally delivered...
And you've done an outstanding job on this one...
Others have mentioned your lyrics that I found pretty cool...
So I'll just add I like the little laugh you put on the ending of your recording...
Nice touch!
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#544764 - 07/09/19 03:50 PM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Great job all around, especially liked your rhyming patterns and word choices.
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#544780 - 07/09/19 06:17 PM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Sound great - this is a well constructed song.

It doesn't have "the feels" that tug at the heartstrings, but it makes up for it with some bold choices - especially the interesting words!

An enjoyable listen. smile
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#544808 - 07/10/19 01:20 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Hi Scott,

I loved the listen!

When I heard the phrase "hackneyed metaphor", I knew I was in for good ride. I've never ever come across that before. And this was just the start of some really, really fresh sounding rhymes and phrases. I salute you for such inventive lyric writing!

I enjoyed listening to you sing, and the arrangement and production sounded great coming out of my speakers.

It's thumbs up from me smile
Noel
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#544947 - 07/11/19 08:41 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Rob4580]
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Originally Posted By: Rob4580

Powerful rock with a good lyric (You always cry in the light And you laugh in the dark).
Great production and vocals. I also liked the synth you added. Rob


Thanks for the listen, Rob.

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#544948 - 07/11/19 08:42 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: rayc]
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Originally Posted By: rayc
An interesting melange of elements. I don't think the solo at the intro worked all that well but the otehrs seemed to fit in fine.
The bridge is really cool.
I enjoyed the whole package - well recorded/performed vocals and all.


Thanks for the comment, Ray. I am going to experiment a bit with the intro. I might add the solo from between the verses.

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#544949 - 07/11/19 08:44 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Janice & Bud]
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Originally Posted By: Janice & Bud
"Your hunger breeds
A pocketful of needs"

One of many cool lines!

This is a very polished sounding production with lots of nice little bits here
and there to grab and keep your attention.

We know nothing about the type of vocal effects used for a production
like this but whatever you did sounds great and much like the late 80's - 90's.

The mix is really strong...you took those dozen or more tracks and shaped
them into a great soundstage.

Kudos!

J&B



Thanks. I used Nectar three for the vocals. However, for the bridge, I doubled the vocal track adding a bit of spacey cell phone effect.

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#544950 - 07/11/19 08:46 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Steve Young]
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Originally Posted By: Steve Young
Very nice! Well constructed lyrics. Many good lines in this one.

Really enjoyed it!

Steve


Thanks, Steve.

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#544951 - 07/11/19 08:46 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Jim]
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Originally Posted By: Jim
Well its about time...
I've been waiting since May smile...
But you've finally delivered...
And you've done an outstanding job on this one...
Others have mentioned your lyrics that I found pretty cool...
So I'll just add I like the little laugh you put on the ending of your recording...
Nice touch!


Thanks, Jim. The end of the school year kept me too busy, but I finally got a chance to get back to my little hobby.

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#544969 - 07/11/19 09:52 AM [User Showcase] Re: Laugh in the Dark [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Very nice melodic rocker, catchy and well arranged. I got early David Bowie vibes in the melody and in your voice.

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