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#599017 05/25/20 12:09 PM
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The following is not really what the song is about- just a trivia test for those interested.

In my old trade there`s something called "borrowed landscape"- incorporating a distant landscape into the design. In songwriting you`d likely call it plagiarism, but I think it can work... you can let me know; if you don`t get the reference to a famous song in this sad ballad you must have been a

Castaway

Style is _HOMESIK.STY (Homesick Soft Pop Serenade)

RealTracks in style: ~2474:Bass, Acoustic, Held Ev 085
RealTracks in style: 2195:Piano, ElectricVintage, Rhythm CoolJazzPopHeld Ev 085
RealTracks in style: 3059:Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm Muted16thsFintan Ev16 080
RealTracks in song: 2542:Pedal Steel, Background ModernBalladAtmosphere Ev16 065
RealTracks in song: 3230:Guitar, Electric, Background CinemaHeldLowDarin Ev16 090
RealDrums [in style:CongasEv16[single] [Multi]




Castaway


in a field sitting adrift
knees up to his chest
a bitter boy`s first glimpse of a last breath
he`ll soon find a tune
wish I had more illusions
planet earth is blue nothing I can do

for a touch without hurting
a heart quietly enduring

with rescue uncertain
through a gap in the curtain
you`ll see his candle holding out
he`ll be the hammer the anvil
pray for an angle
under a roof of ragged dreams

for a touch without hurting
a heart quietly enduring
shining on endless islands
count them above diamonds
tears of the castaway

city lights receding from on high
visions rise on the ebb tide

the boy will be a man
marooned til he understands
planet earth is blue one thing I can do

touch without hurting
a heart quietly enduring
shining on endless islands
count them above diamonds
tears of the castaway

© Robert Cordrey May 2020


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Neat song. Poetic lyrics. The production of the song captures the mood perfectly. I think I get the hints you are giving. Reminds me of Ashes to Ashes "Do you remember a guy that's been in such an early song?"


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The pedal steel works really well.
The muted acoustic & percussion really belong together - well done - it's a very satisfying arrangement.


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rayc
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Hi Robert,

"planet earth is blue nothing I can do" - Major Tom?

Loved the whole thing.

Wonderfully atmospheric backing and the vocal and harmony were sublime.

Always like your lyrics - there's just so much which you can read into them.

One of your best.

ROG.

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Good stuff, Robert, love the pedal steel and the congas!

Also like your vocals, especially the harmonies.

And no one writes lyrics like you do. I'm also thinking the Bowie song?

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Robert,

A very original sound in all regards (I think) - lyrically, melodically and overall sound. A cool BAND. An expressive vocal and nice harmonies.

A good mix.

(the reference to any previous known work is lost on me)

I enjoyed the listen. It takes one to a new place...

fj

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Originally Posted By: ROG
Hi Robert,

"planet earth is blue nothing I can do" - Major Tom?

Loved the whole thing.

Wonderfully atmospheric backing and the vocal and harmony were sublime.

Always like your lyrics - there's just so much which you can read into them.

One of your best.

ROG.


First prize to you ROG for recognizing the David Bowie line!
Major Tom was adrift on the airwaves when the young lad in the song was having a tough time.
Many thanks for your kind comments.

Robert

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Very pretty song Robert. Super vocal and harmonies. Love instruments you chose for the piece. Steel is a very nice touch. I missed the Major Tom. Loved this one. Well done Robert


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I fear I am a castaway, Robbert.

There wasn't any 'borrowed landscape' related to your song, much to my regred.
So it must be an original song. I only recognized the style. I used it as well. Only some other instruments.
Although I think I have given you enough compliments on your writing- and singing skills in the past, I will continue saying that again.
Your voice easily gets you pinpointed to the song. It is soft, but so present! Enjoyed it very much.
The band played very gentle. 'Even the pedal' had a nice role in the song.
Nicely done!

Hans


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Hi Robert, this is a great tune all around. Thanks for posting.

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Love the musical texture you've created here Robert.......beautiful and meditative!!! Vocal is one of your best!! Lyrics are interesting.....nothing wrong with borrowing a line now and then! VERY COOL!!! Take care. Greg

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Robert

One of your best arrangements, both vocally and musically.
Excellent sounding band and very nice harmonies and your always inventive lyrics.

Peter

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Hi Robert
Sitting in a tin can, high above the world. One of my favourites. Nice touch that your line the second time says there is something that can be done. Plagarism? I prefer to think of it as 'the folk process.' If it's good enough for the likes of Bob Dylan, who has borrowed both lyrics and melodies throughout his career, I reckon it's good enough for you and me. Always enjoy your lyrics and singing and this is another fine piece of work.
Regards,
Leon

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Robert,

Great feel to this song. Some really creative near rhymes in this song that work well and a poetic, emotive write Terrific production work on this as well. I’m not sure how I feel about the Bowie lyric reference. I get the rationale, but that line is somewhat iconic—perhaps if it were more clear a reference to that song, it might work better for me and divert my attention less. A subjective comment—it will hit people in different ways—but offering it up for what it’s worth.

Enjoyed this one! Nice work!

All my best,

Deej

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Love the imagery and the pedal steel is one of my favorites. A song that your mind can drift on and be interpreted by the listener. Interesting lyrics.

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Love the imagery and the pedal steel is one of my favorites. A song that your mind can drift on and be interpreted by the listener. Interesting lyrics.

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Hi Robert ...

I have to admit the reference passed right by me. But, at the time, i was playing nothing but what was then Contemporary Country ... 25-28 nights a month. So, 98% of my listen was country.

Regardless, this is one really great song. You've painted your own musical landscape ... a soundscape, I suppose ... that is so magnetic. it just clings to your brain ... in the best of ways. there's a magnetism that makes this wonderful listen cling to your soul. Such a wonmderful delivery!

Wishing you the very best ...

Alan


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Originally Posted By: jptjptjpt
Neat song. Poetic lyrics. The production of the song captures the mood perfectly. I think I get the hints you are giving. Reminds me of Ashes to Ashes "Do you remember a guy that's been in such an early song?"


Truth is I was never a big Bowie fan- I hadn`t heard that Ashes to Ashes song!
Thanks for your listen and sending me there.



Originally Posted By: rayc
The pedal steel works really well.
The muted acoustic & percussion really belong together - well done - it's a very satisfying arrangement.


Thank you!

Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
Good stuff, Robert, love the pedal steel and the congas!

Also like your vocals, especially the harmonies.

And no one writes lyrics like you do. I'm also thinking the Bowie song?



Dave,
This style is a kind of old friend for me now- I hope it doesn`t disappear from the menu!
Thanks for the nod to my harmonies and lyrics.
Yes, right answer to the trivia test!


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Robert,

A very original sound in all regards (I think) - lyrically, melodically and overall sound. A cool BAND. An expressive vocal and nice harmonies.

A good mix.

(the reference to any previous known work is lost on me)

I enjoyed the listen. It takes one to a new place...

fj


Floyd,
I appreciate those positives- thank you!

Originally Posted By: Scott C
Very pretty song Robert. Super vocal and harmonies. Love instruments you chose for the piece. Steel is a very nice touch. I missed the Major Tom. Loved this one. Well done Robert


I`m pleased the reference wasn`t obvious, Scott- and glad you liked the song!


Robert

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We've never listened to Bowie...other than very peripherally...so the reference blew by us.
Bowie's popularity was during our lost bluegrass years smile

Irrespective of all that we enjoyed the walk across another one of your
always creative and vivid sonic landscapes.

As always you tell a story that leaves plenty of dots for the listener to connect.
We like that.

Standouts for us were your vocals and the steel. We've used that RT several before
and feel it is one of the best. It adds so much and distracts from nothing.

Really nice.

J&B

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Originally Posted By: Birchwood
I fear I am a castaway, Robbert.

There wasn't any 'borrowed landscape' related to your song, much to my regred.
So it must be an original song. I only recognized the style. I used it as well. Only some other instruments.
Although I think I have given you enough compliments on your writing- and singing skills in the past, I will continue saying that again.
Your voice easily gets you pinpointed to the song. It is soft, but so present! Enjoyed it very much.
The band played very gentle. 'Even the pedal' had a nice role in the song.
Nicely done!

Hans


Thank you for those likes, Hans.
In retrospect I think I`d have done better to leave out that intro and just see if anyone recognised the reference.



Originally Posted By: cubanpete
Hi Robert, this is a great tune all around. Thanks for posting.

Mike B.


I appreciate your listen, Mike.

Originally Posted By: Greg Johnson
Love the musical texture you've created here Robert.......beautiful and meditative!!! Vocal is one of your best!! Lyrics are interesting.....nothing wrong with borrowing a line now and then! VERY COOL!!! Take care. Greg


Very kind, Greg- thank you for commenting.

Originally Posted By: PeterF
Robert

One of your best arrangements, both vocally and musically.
Excellent sounding band and very nice harmonies and your always inventive lyrics.

Peter


Peter,
Many thanks for that!

Originally Posted By: Leon1
Hi Robert
Sitting in a tin can, high above the world. One of my favourites. Nice touch that your line the second time says there is something that can be done. Plagarism? I prefer to think of it as 'the folk process.' If it's good enough for the likes of Bob Dylan, who has borrowed both lyrics and melodies throughout his career, I reckon it's good enough for you and me. Always enjoy your lyrics and singing and this is another fine piece of work.
Regards,
Leon


Hi Leon,
Its nice to know someone got the subtle change in that borrowed lyric, and heard good things in this.
Thank you!

Robert

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